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3/18/2016 c1 Midnight
Ikr! I find it stupid that all OC back stories are like this
2/21/2015 c3 10Kendra PJO
nymph's? parent's? God's? Plural doesn't require apostrophes!
Unfortuneatly and starlted aren't in the dictionary, and Calyspo isn't a name, but I do like that Calypso sands up for Annabeth:) She HAS been through heartbreak far too many times. I can just see Leo shortening her name to Cal. Good Caleo, and I guess this answered the question of when in the series this takes place- after BoO, although that is rather vague, you may want to specify which summer.
2/21/2015 c2 Kendra PJO
Presence, not presents! Presents are received on birthdays, presence is when a person is in the room.
OWWW, I have sympathy for Orion- I've been blinded! Please, Hephaestus, have mercy on me and make me a new pair of eyes! Actually, no DON'T, because then I would look back at the Sues and have to repeat the process.
Dear God. I understand if the Sues are OOC, even the guys, to show the puke-inducing effects of their so-called charm. But Chiron? That's one step too far. And their NAMES! I thought Reyna Avilla Ramirez-Arellano was a mouthful! At least it shortens to RARA or Reyna!
2/21/2015 c1 Kendra PJO
Maybe you could set off the Sue POV by making the Annabeth portion super IC- the part about the birds singing and bees flying from flower to flower made me want to puke. And you could use some more description- when does this take place in the series? Were Percy and Annabeth dating? Were they sparring in the arena, or someplace else? What time of day?
I get that it's supposed to be humorous (hence why I'm not even starting on the Sue section) but I think it could be even better if the Sue was surrounded by really well-written Annabeth POV
4/20/2014 c3 1multiclouds
This is hilarious!

I absolutely HATE Angel and Beatrice; I really wish I could rip their stupid, ugly, dumb little heads off...
4/7/2014 c2 J.C.Anne
Omr, this is hilarious how you got it right with the Mary Sues XD
6/4/2013 c2 miss.anonymous
Hilarious!
keep writingMiss A
6/4/2013 c2 1Rueflower3900
You should kill Beatrice and Angel off, they could be one of those monster with one donkey leg and one metal leg that can put a spell on boys to make them fall in love with them! I forget what they are called BUT it starts with a E
6/4/2013 c2 2Steering the Stars
Ha! Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha!
6/4/2013 c2 nerdyninjaunicorn
No, not Percabeth and Jasper *sobs* You've captured the Sue-ness! And you've done a brilliant job showing how truly evil they are! I applaud you.
3/30/2013 c1 skeletonkid
Yes! Finally you posted it! Can I help you write it Arty? We came up with the idea.
3/27/2013 c1 Anounymous
Can you make a Big3 Sue?
3/26/2013 c1 5fabbiosa
Hmmmmm. Too early to judge.
3/26/2013 c1 Happy J
I can't stand Mary Sues! Update! :)

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