for Invasion of the Super Sue's3/18/2016 c1 Midnight
Ikr! I find it stupid that all OC back stories are like this
Ikr! I find it stupid that all OC back stories are like this
2/21/2015 c3 
10Kendra PJO
nymph's? parent's? God's? Plural doesn't require apostrophes!
Unfortuneatly and starlted aren't in the dictionary, and Calyspo isn't a name, but I do like that Calypso sands up for Annabeth:) She HAS been through heartbreak far too many times. I can just see Leo shortening her name to Cal. Good Caleo, and I guess this answered the question of when in the series this takes place- after BoO, although that is rather vague, you may want to specify which summer.
10Kendra PJOnymph's? parent's? God's? Plural doesn't require apostrophes!
Unfortuneatly and starlted aren't in the dictionary, and Calyspo isn't a name, but I do like that Calypso sands up for Annabeth:) She HAS been through heartbreak far too many times. I can just see Leo shortening her name to Cal. Good Caleo, and I guess this answered the question of when in the series this takes place- after BoO, although that is rather vague, you may want to specify which summer.
2/21/2015 c2 Kendra PJO
Presence, not presents! Presents are received on birthdays, presence is when a person is in the room.
OWWW, I have sympathy for Orion- I've been blinded! Please, Hephaestus, have mercy on me and make me a new pair of eyes! Actually, no DON'T, because then I would look back at the Sues and have to repeat the process.
Dear God. I understand if the Sues are OOC, even the guys, to show the puke-inducing effects of their so-called charm. But Chiron? That's one step too far. And their NAMES! I thought Reyna Avilla Ramirez-Arellano was a mouthful! At least it shortens to RARA or Reyna!
Presence, not presents! Presents are received on birthdays, presence is when a person is in the room.
OWWW, I have sympathy for Orion- I've been blinded! Please, Hephaestus, have mercy on me and make me a new pair of eyes! Actually, no DON'T, because then I would look back at the Sues and have to repeat the process.
Dear God. I understand if the Sues are OOC, even the guys, to show the puke-inducing effects of their so-called charm. But Chiron? That's one step too far. And their NAMES! I thought Reyna Avilla Ramirez-Arellano was a mouthful! At least it shortens to RARA or Reyna!
2/21/2015 c1 Kendra PJO
Maybe you could set off the Sue POV by making the Annabeth portion super IC- the part about the birds singing and bees flying from flower to flower made me want to puke. And you could use some more description- when does this take place in the series? Were Percy and Annabeth dating? Were they sparring in the arena, or someplace else? What time of day?
I get that it's supposed to be humorous (hence why I'm not even starting on the Sue section) but I think it could be even better if the Sue was surrounded by really well-written Annabeth POV
Maybe you could set off the Sue POV by making the Annabeth portion super IC- the part about the birds singing and bees flying from flower to flower made me want to puke. And you could use some more description- when does this take place in the series? Were Percy and Annabeth dating? Were they sparring in the arena, or someplace else? What time of day?
I get that it's supposed to be humorous (hence why I'm not even starting on the Sue section) but I think it could be even better if the Sue was surrounded by really well-written Annabeth POV
6/4/2013 c2 miss.anonymous
Hilarious!
keep writingMiss A
Hilarious!
keep writingMiss A
6/4/2013 c2 1Rueflower3900
You should kill Beatrice and Angel off, they could be one of those monster with one donkey leg and one metal leg that can put a spell on boys to make them fall in love with them! I forget what they are called BUT it starts with a E
1Rueflower3900You should kill Beatrice and Angel off, they could be one of those monster with one donkey leg and one metal leg that can put a spell on boys to make them fall in love with them! I forget what they are called BUT it starts with a E
6/4/2013 c2 nerdyninjaunicorn
No, not Percabeth and Jasper *sobs* You've captured the Sue-ness! And you've done a brilliant job showing how truly evil they are! I applaud you.
No, not Percabeth and Jasper *sobs* You've captured the Sue-ness! And you've done a brilliant job showing how truly evil they are! I applaud you.
3/30/2013 c1 skeletonkid
Yes! Finally you posted it! Can I help you write it Arty? We came up with the idea.
Yes! Finally you posted it! Can I help you write it Arty? We came up with the idea.
3/27/2013 c1 Anounymous
Can you make a Big3 Sue?
Can you make a Big3 Sue?