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9/29/2013 c5 62Agent-G
You might want someone to look over your works you keep missing things like periods and also you screw up on the same words. Girlfriend is one word not girl friend and it's maybe not may be, little things like that you have to learn to watch out for.

Overall it's not bad despite those mistakes, characters are in character for the most part and the story is going well plus the more original parts are more enjoyable to read as we won't know what happens in them so more of those would really be helpful. I'll keep reading on to see how the story turns out.
9/8/2013 c7 9JesterDGrowlithe
at chapter 7 i have read exact same things from another FoZ crossover and like all of FoZ crossovers this one has little imagination if i were you i would try to put more things in it
aside from that 2 things took my interest first ben acts like an adult in alien force he acted more immature second you didnt make alien force side if ben were to disappear like that gwen and kevin would search for him like crazy with and azmut's help they would find him easily(yet i dont think he would help)
9/5/2013 c7 Rebmul
interesting
8/20/2013 c7 22myzor king of war
I have read this thus far and I'm enjoying it I really loved how Ben won those fights and how he chewed those so called Nobles out and how he refuses to take shit from Louise and i loved how he told her off and how he beat that evil fallen noble woman and every thing can't wait to see what will happen when Albedo reveals himself
8/19/2013 c7 6pedrofaria339
Albido?!
8/16/2013 c7 4the DragonBard
Will Ben ever reveal that he's got magical blood in his family?

Should mention that canon Ben has magical potential, just not as much as Gwen, and is untrained.
7/15/2013 c7 15alchemists19
Immersing
7/12/2013 c6 6tarrangar
one talent bendragon like sylphid is totally useless to him as far as i know the one magic power we know sylphid has for sure is the ability to take human form afterall
7/9/2013 c7 ussop
nice... make more
7/7/2013 c7 diamondace4
...really at least this scene made slight sense in the anime..but ben totally ignoring julie
7/7/2013 c6 diamondace4
ugh..u falling into the same pit ever ZnT fanfic does..the main character falling/protective of louisewhenver she feels bad yet hating her next minute
6/21/2013 c7 Guest
Is ben ever gonna be back at his own world? Pleaase update soon!
6/20/2013 c1 1rangertennyson005
Did I say Albedo was Joseph's familiar? Don't jump on conclusions buddy. If you want answers then pm me. I may not be that good writer but I don't just randomly threw characters in my story. If they are here than there is reason which will be explained in later chapters
6/20/2013 c7 PEJP BengtZone V2
Oh, brother!
6/20/2013 c7 10ultima-owner
Albedo makes it more interesting
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