for Poem to poem, Heart to heart7/21/2013 c3 Porkins
What the bloody *beep!*
What the bloody *beep!*
4/6/2013 c2 Tae
It was very GOOD!
Yes and happy lateApril foolsday!:)
It was very GOOD!
Yes and happy lateApril foolsday!:)
4/7/2013 c2 
12Unexplainable Contradiction
Reviewing! Ummm... A poem idea... Hmmm... Life. Demigods. Family. Tsunamis. Earthquakes. Airplanes. Fear. Lightning. His mother! Ha ha... Blue. Why does he love the color blue? Fatal flaws.
Don't listen to me; I'm insane, even my friends say so. And I cannot think of an idea to save my life at the moment, so...
Anyway, I reviewed! Yay! Thank you for your reviews as well!
Kk, bye! :P
12Unexplainable ContradictionReviewing! Ummm... A poem idea... Hmmm... Life. Demigods. Family. Tsunamis. Earthquakes. Airplanes. Fear. Lightning. His mother! Ha ha... Blue. Why does he love the color blue? Fatal flaws.
Don't listen to me; I'm insane, even my friends say so. And I cannot think of an idea to save my life at the moment, so...
Anyway, I reviewed! Yay! Thank you for your reviews as well!
Kk, bye! :P
4/3/2013 c1 lilmonkey13
That's sweet. So I think my one suggestion is that you make an obvious separation between your Author notes and the story. Other than that I think it's wonderful. :)
That's sweet. So I think my one suggestion is that you make an obvious separation between your Author notes and the story. Other than that I think it's wonderful. :)
3/31/2013 c1 Bob
I like candy! Update soon?
I like candy! Update soon?
3/31/2013 c1 WingDawn98
Candy! No wait, cookies. No, Candy...I don't know.
Candy! No wait, cookies. No, Candy...I don't know.
3/30/2013 c1 Seph
-Not bad. Not bad at all. Very original. You write better poems than I do. -_-"
-Anyways here's some tips that I've pick up along the way. You don't have to follow but I'm just throwing ideas around. No, I'm not saying you're a bad author. [You have no idea how many times people accused me of that when I'm only trying to help them out.]
1) Try to make it LOOK longer. I doesn't have to be long; it just have to look like it's worth people's time. People in America, I'm sad to say, are (other than lazy) prejudice no matter what they claim or say. I would suggest indenting after every rhyming word, line, or whatever poems have.
2) Like I said earlier, humans in general are lazy. If they see in your summary that you're new (and I'm not making fun of you) they're going to think 'Oh, if a newbie wrote this, it probably wouldn't be [too good/worth my time]. Also, make your summary sound exciting! People judge a book by it's cover. Add a picture. Capitalize the important letters in the title.
3) Don't beg for your story to be read. It looks unprofessional.
4) Separate the Author Notes, the titles, and the text. I would suggest bolding the Author Notes and the titles (or in this case, theme). Also for the Author Note, try labeling it A/N. Everyone seems to be doing it except for me. I italicize it.
5) This is coming from a person who doesn't specializes in poetry, but as an author I feel like I should tell you this if only for future uses. As I read it, I keep seeing the words 'smile' and 'love' and 'family'. I don't know if you did it for emphasis or whatever, but the message I'm getting is that either you're lacking words to rhyme, or you don't have a large vocabulary (which I'm pretty sure it's not true).
-That's about it. Now for the praising. I didn't have to criticize you about slang (with the exception of the cuz), words that don't exist, and grammar, which is a big deal in our generation I'm afraid. You also make my poetry look like something that came out of the sewer. Then again, I couldn't make a good poem if my life depended on it. *sigh* In addition, I wouldn't have know you were new by the way you write. Your Author Notes seem comfortable and casual, and you do write beautifully.
-I'm also glad to say that you've made my day (well, night). After a whole lot of commenting of stories, I needed something to cheer me up. Keep it up!
-My answer: Cookies (::). They're bigger and don't give you stomachaches as easily. :)
-Not bad. Not bad at all. Very original. You write better poems than I do. -_-"
-Anyways here's some tips that I've pick up along the way. You don't have to follow but I'm just throwing ideas around. No, I'm not saying you're a bad author. [You have no idea how many times people accused me of that when I'm only trying to help them out.]
1) Try to make it LOOK longer. I doesn't have to be long; it just have to look like it's worth people's time. People in America, I'm sad to say, are (other than lazy) prejudice no matter what they claim or say. I would suggest indenting after every rhyming word, line, or whatever poems have.
2) Like I said earlier, humans in general are lazy. If they see in your summary that you're new (and I'm not making fun of you) they're going to think 'Oh, if a newbie wrote this, it probably wouldn't be [too good/worth my time]. Also, make your summary sound exciting! People judge a book by it's cover. Add a picture. Capitalize the important letters in the title.
3) Don't beg for your story to be read. It looks unprofessional.
4) Separate the Author Notes, the titles, and the text. I would suggest bolding the Author Notes and the titles (or in this case, theme). Also for the Author Note, try labeling it A/N. Everyone seems to be doing it except for me. I italicize it.
5) This is coming from a person who doesn't specializes in poetry, but as an author I feel like I should tell you this if only for future uses. As I read it, I keep seeing the words 'smile' and 'love' and 'family'. I don't know if you did it for emphasis or whatever, but the message I'm getting is that either you're lacking words to rhyme, or you don't have a large vocabulary (which I'm pretty sure it's not true).
-That's about it. Now for the praising. I didn't have to criticize you about slang (with the exception of the cuz), words that don't exist, and grammar, which is a big deal in our generation I'm afraid. You also make my poetry look like something that came out of the sewer. Then again, I couldn't make a good poem if my life depended on it. *sigh* In addition, I wouldn't have know you were new by the way you write. Your Author Notes seem comfortable and casual, and you do write beautifully.
-I'm also glad to say that you've made my day (well, night). After a whole lot of commenting of stories, I needed something to cheer me up. Keep it up!
-My answer: Cookies (::). They're bigger and don't give you stomachaches as easily. :)