for Love can either conquer or destoy4/13/2013 c4 
1Ikarishipper98
If I could review 100x for you - I would! I love this story so much, it very well written! *Sticks out tongue* Neru you meanie!
*Baka Chops Len* Len you idiot!
*Hugs Rin* Rin you cheer up ok?
Teehee, update soon!,
XxRosie-Sama98xX
1Ikarishipper98If I could review 100x for you - I would! I love this story so much, it very well written! *Sticks out tongue* Neru you meanie!
*Baka Chops Len* Len you idiot!
*Hugs Rin* Rin you cheer up ok?
Teehee, update soon!,
XxRosie-Sama98xX
4/9/2013 c3 7Darkflower123
Great! This is amazing (Will it actually turn out rinxlen... FAVORITE PAIRING)
7Darkflower123Great! This is amazing (Will it actually turn out rinxlen... FAVORITE PAIRING)
4/8/2013 c3 1Ikarishipper98
I love this story so much! I like how Neru is the 'bad guy' character in this since usually it's Miku haha, I definitely cant wait for an update xx
Please update soon
XxRosie-Sama98xX
1Ikarishipper98I love this story so much! I like how Neru is the 'bad guy' character in this since usually it's Miku haha, I definitely cant wait for an update xx
Please update soon
XxRosie-Sama98xX
4/8/2013 c3 9ichigomatsu
I was directed her by another author ( MizuneMinamiki specifically), to check out your story! And to put it in words, I'm quite impressed! Your story is very good, especially if this is your first. And even though you molded some characters (specifically Neru) to fit the plot, no one seemed too outrageously out of character, which is something I like in a story. I like the plot and the situations. Your first Vocaloid story is turning out to be a good one. I expect great things from you!
9ichigomatsuI was directed her by another author ( MizuneMinamiki specifically), to check out your story! And to put it in words, I'm quite impressed! Your story is very good, especially if this is your first. And even though you molded some characters (specifically Neru) to fit the plot, no one seemed too outrageously out of character, which is something I like in a story. I like the plot and the situations. Your first Vocaloid story is turning out to be a good one. I expect great things from you!
4/6/2013 c1 Chr0ma
OK, I started reading your story and so far it's pretty good. If you wanna get technical, you need to fix you punctuation. Even if I may not follow this rule, I'm gonna say it anyway: Show, not tell. The first chapter of this story is actually very good.
OK, I started reading your story and so far it's pretty good. If you wanna get technical, you need to fix you punctuation. Even if I may not follow this rule, I'm gonna say it anyway: Show, not tell. The first chapter of this story is actually very good.
4/6/2013 c2 Guest
So amazing for the story hope u update soon. I want to read it matter of fact I'll make an account to read this story. Hope u update
So amazing for the story hope u update soon. I want to read it matter of fact I'll make an account to read this story. Hope u update
4/6/2013 c3 61MizuneMinamiki
So much improvement that it's not even funny. Excellent!
Interesting story for Rin's mother. Sad, but interesting.
Who said Rin's name!? D: Did Len catch her right as she punched Neru? Is he gonna hate her? So many questions! Update!
(:Mizune
61MizuneMinamikiSo much improvement that it's not even funny. Excellent!
Interesting story for Rin's mother. Sad, but interesting.
Who said Rin's name!? D: Did Len catch her right as she punched Neru? Is he gonna hate her? So many questions! Update!
(:Mizune
4/5/2013 c2 MizuneMinamiki
Nice disclaimer
Oh my goodness! GrammarSO MUCH BETTER! But there are still some missing punctuation marks. Still, Excellent job!:DD
The only thing I have to say as far as criticism is that right here, [I mean, honestly speaking, she was getting annoying like with (trying to pull off Rin's voice) 'Len's gone', 'I miss Len', and don't get me started on-"] Instead of putting that in parentheses, it might be better to write outside of the quotes something like, "Mikuo said, attempting to pull off Rin's girly voice." That way, it flows better, and you don't have much of an author's note cutting in.
And for the story: AAAAWWWW! Such a cute reaction for the two when they met up again, with the little locket and all:3
I like Miku's character in this. Finally, we have a Miku who actually gets along with Rin XD
And wow. That ending was a twist! I mean, I know that the people who are bullied most often turn out to be better just by karma, but is Neru really that CRUEL? She's a little demon!
So now I'm dying to see how this progresses. Neru shan't win! She just shan't! Where's my pitchfork and torch? We need an angry mob! :'DD
(:Mizune
Nice disclaimer
Oh my goodness! GrammarSO MUCH BETTER! But there are still some missing punctuation marks. Still, Excellent job!:DD
The only thing I have to say as far as criticism is that right here, [I mean, honestly speaking, she was getting annoying like with (trying to pull off Rin's voice) 'Len's gone', 'I miss Len', and don't get me started on-"] Instead of putting that in parentheses, it might be better to write outside of the quotes something like, "Mikuo said, attempting to pull off Rin's girly voice." That way, it flows better, and you don't have much of an author's note cutting in.
And for the story: AAAAWWWW! Such a cute reaction for the two when they met up again, with the little locket and all:3
I like Miku's character in this. Finally, we have a Miku who actually gets along with Rin XD
And wow. That ending was a twist! I mean, I know that the people who are bullied most often turn out to be better just by karma, but is Neru really that CRUEL? She's a little demon!
So now I'm dying to see how this progresses. Neru shan't win! She just shan't! Where's my pitchfork and torch? We need an angry mob! :'DD
(:Mizune
4/4/2013 c1 Guest
So adorable
So adorable
4/3/2013 c1 MizuneMinamiki
Ooh, you write KH, too? I'll have to check those out when I get a spare moment.
As for constructive criticism, the main thing that caught my eye is some punctuation missing at the end of sentences. ["I call doing the veil for Rin" Miku said] comma after Rin, and period after Miku. Put commas right before " unless you're using a ? Or !
I also think there could be a bit more description in some of this, and maybe different speech verbs other than 'said.' Maybe like 'stated,' 'suggested,' 'told him/her/me'.
As for the story...heh. Kaito's the goofy crybaby, as usual. XD I like it;)
And D'awww! That's so cute, that Len gave her that necklace! Awww! He's sooo sweet!(:
Oh, nice ending! I can't wait to see how Len reacts upon meeting up with her again!(:
(:Mizune
Ooh, you write KH, too? I'll have to check those out when I get a spare moment.
As for constructive criticism, the main thing that caught my eye is some punctuation missing at the end of sentences. ["I call doing the veil for Rin" Miku said] comma after Rin, and period after Miku. Put commas right before " unless you're using a ? Or !
I also think there could be a bit more description in some of this, and maybe different speech verbs other than 'said.' Maybe like 'stated,' 'suggested,' 'told him/her/me'.
As for the story...heh. Kaito's the goofy crybaby, as usual. XD I like it;)
And D'awww! That's so cute, that Len gave her that necklace! Awww! He's sooo sweet!(:
Oh, nice ending! I can't wait to see how Len reacts upon meeting up with her again!(:
(:Mizune