
7/14/2017 c1 Guest
This is f***ing adorable
This is f***ing adorable
7/2/2014 c1
37April1996
Nice story, but I noticed some punctuation errors in your story. For example, you kept putting commas and periods where they weren't needed or didn't need to be. Here's an example on how you wrote (I'm using my 3DS so I can't copy/paste or bring up another tab since the keyboard pops up so I'm just going to use a made-up example):
Jack, woke up one morning to see a bird. At his window, the bird was chirping happily, and singing.
Well, it's something like that, but here's a better example to where you can read it a bit easier:
Jack woke up one morning to see a bird at his window. The bird was singing happily and chirping.
I'm not criticising you for your story or your punctuation, but your story was good. And you might want to double-check your story and make sure to put periods where you're ending a sentence and commas where there's a short pause in the sentence. But still, your story is pretty good despite the occasional errors. ;)

Nice story, but I noticed some punctuation errors in your story. For example, you kept putting commas and periods where they weren't needed or didn't need to be. Here's an example on how you wrote (I'm using my 3DS so I can't copy/paste or bring up another tab since the keyboard pops up so I'm just going to use a made-up example):
Jack, woke up one morning to see a bird. At his window, the bird was chirping happily, and singing.
Well, it's something like that, but here's a better example to where you can read it a bit easier:
Jack woke up one morning to see a bird at his window. The bird was singing happily and chirping.
I'm not criticising you for your story or your punctuation, but your story was good. And you might want to double-check your story and make sure to put periods where you're ending a sentence and commas where there's a short pause in the sentence. But still, your story is pretty good despite the occasional errors. ;)
11/30/2013 c1 Ung
I thimk that it's good
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score 7.6/10
I thimk that it's good
error
errrormfmf, vglkhgg
score 7.6/10
8/31/2013 c1
8tillyjane119
aaaahh hahahahaa that is soo funny i did that to my dog and chased me around the garden and when on walks!

aaaahh hahahahaa that is soo funny i did that to my dog and chased me around the garden and when on walks!
8/27/2013 c1 Guest
can you do one when Margo gets sick
can you do one when Margo gets sick
8/11/2013 c1 JincedCobra
I'll go with marshmallows. This is pretty good. Nice work.
I'll go with marshmallows. This is pretty good. Nice work.
4/16/2013 c1 Benjamin Warren
That was a good one.
That was a good one.
4/13/2013 c1
4arcticFox102
You should do a story where gru falls in love or something like that :)...please?

You should do a story where gru falls in love or something like that :)...please?