for Unrequited1/25/2014 c5 A Friend
Make MORE MORE MORE MORE and... MOAR!
Make MORE MORE MORE MORE and... MOAR!
11/3/2013 c5 3
I love this fanfiction, please continue soon! *-*
I love this fanfiction, please continue soon! *-*
9/2/2013 c5 Nom de Plume
Ohmygods, each chapter just gets more and more interesting!
Clearly we can now see some turning point in Yuzuki's character in the back-story... Or rather, she has always been twisted in the head but now she's openly admitted it. But I found her change to be realistic, after re-reading the previous chapter, one can tell that she has had a whole plethora of traumatic events since childhood. Seeing dead people doesn't help and loneliness truly is a poison for anybody, normal or not.
The fight scene was very disturbing and hence, very Yuzuki-esque. I expected no less from her and you delivered your OC perfectly. I'm starting to believe that her obsession with killing stems from her desire for control. In the past, she was too young and weak to defend herself but since the day she knew she had the capabilities to kill...to take a life, I'm sure that's a great high for anybody who has never held power before. So great job on connecting her past experiences with her present actions.
And the Obito-Rin scene...gods, you really never disappoint us with any of the characters. Each one gets perfect screen time and now Obito is on the verge of discovering her true identity! Which I have the feeling you'll stall even more... Just to string out our anxiety.
As for Yuzuki and Rin's relationship... I feel at this point that Rin is now just staying with her out of fear and partially out of an old friendship and promise (and the fact that she really knows no one else and technically Yuzuki has been taking care of her). I can only wonder what that feels like to be friends with someone you will always be afraid of.
Ohmygods, each chapter just gets more and more interesting!
Clearly we can now see some turning point in Yuzuki's character in the back-story... Or rather, she has always been twisted in the head but now she's openly admitted it. But I found her change to be realistic, after re-reading the previous chapter, one can tell that she has had a whole plethora of traumatic events since childhood. Seeing dead people doesn't help and loneliness truly is a poison for anybody, normal or not.
The fight scene was very disturbing and hence, very Yuzuki-esque. I expected no less from her and you delivered your OC perfectly. I'm starting to believe that her obsession with killing stems from her desire for control. In the past, she was too young and weak to defend herself but since the day she knew she had the capabilities to kill...to take a life, I'm sure that's a great high for anybody who has never held power before. So great job on connecting her past experiences with her present actions.
And the Obito-Rin scene...gods, you really never disappoint us with any of the characters. Each one gets perfect screen time and now Obito is on the verge of discovering her true identity! Which I have the feeling you'll stall even more... Just to string out our anxiety.
As for Yuzuki and Rin's relationship... I feel at this point that Rin is now just staying with her out of fear and partially out of an old friendship and promise (and the fact that she really knows no one else and technically Yuzuki has been taking care of her). I can only wonder what that feels like to be friends with someone you will always be afraid of.
8/11/2013 c2 tsumi
Keep updating! This is fucking interesting.
Keep updating! This is fucking interesting.
7/24/2013 c5 
9Chimebelle
Yuzuki is a bit crazy and possesive isnt she? But i have got to love her clinginess it grows on me. Of course i woild hae opposite thoguhts and would be running the opposite direction if i see her in real life. But in fanfiction i can enjoy her craziness right? Yes a little chat with tobito! He might get even more suspicious/interested in rin now. Cant wait to see them both again!
9ChimebelleYuzuki is a bit crazy and possesive isnt she? But i have got to love her clinginess it grows on me. Of course i woild hae opposite thoguhts and would be running the opposite direction if i see her in real life. But in fanfiction i can enjoy her craziness right? Yes a little chat with tobito! He might get even more suspicious/interested in rin now. Cant wait to see them both again!
7/24/2013 c5 torikai
Ooooh, interesting story, fantastic writing! I'm looking forward to seeing the updates!
Ooooh, interesting story, fantastic writing! I'm looking forward to seeing the updates!
7/23/2013 c5 katie
Thank yo for updating I love this story and how obito and rin are drawn to each other without knowing why, keep up the good work
Thank yo for updating I love this story and how obito and rin are drawn to each other without knowing why, keep up the good work
7/19/2013 c1 Idea Scout
This is platinum material. Continue please!
This is platinum material. Continue please!
7/11/2013 c1 Guest
Please update soon! I love this story
Please update soon! I love this story
6/5/2013 c4 Nom de Plume
Rin and Yuzuki's relationship has to be one of the most ... messed-up friendships I've ever seen, which only makes it all the more fascinating. Almost like one of those love/hate relationships. The past-Yuzuki seemed so human and at least a bit whole, but the current one seemed to have taken a 180 turn. Since her main contact over the years (I think it's years... I'd have to re-read again) has been only Rin, I'm wondering what chain of events has led to this kind of sadistic persona.
And once again, Rin seems to be only innocent&ignorant one without some hidden agenda, while Obito and Yuzuki certainly have some ulterior motives up their sleeves. The strawberry scene was very telling.
Rin and Yuzuki's relationship has to be one of the most ... messed-up friendships I've ever seen, which only makes it all the more fascinating. Almost like one of those love/hate relationships. The past-Yuzuki seemed so human and at least a bit whole, but the current one seemed to have taken a 180 turn. Since her main contact over the years (I think it's years... I'd have to re-read again) has been only Rin, I'm wondering what chain of events has led to this kind of sadistic persona.
And once again, Rin seems to be only innocent&ignorant one without some hidden agenda, while Obito and Yuzuki certainly have some ulterior motives up their sleeves. The strawberry scene was very telling.
5/30/2013 c4 Rin Uchiha
Yes, thank you for updating. I just really like this fanfic. That's all I can think to say.
Yes, thank you for updating. I just really like this fanfic. That's all I can think to say.
5/1/2013 c3 Nom de Plume
Normally I abhor OCs, & yes there's usually a stigma about them (for good reason) but in this story, I can't help but be fascinated with yours. Yuzuki is obviously a disturbed character - but you gave her enough "flaws" to make us sympathize with her, & it's such a highly mismatched feeling. We feel bad for Rin & yet in the bigger schemes of things, we - or at least I - can't help but feel bad for both of them, stuck in their own world of problems.
Which is what I really like about this story, no matter the character - original or series-made - you keep things realistic & you engage your readers through the characters. I love how you worked through Rin's thoughts, how you rationalized her actions, & how skeptical she feels of Yuzuki's morals...and yet.. why she still remains by her side (as you demonstrated at the end here) - simply beautiful!
Heck, this whole premise is interesting - the re-animation of the dead & the amnesia! But I can only wonder how Yuzuki re-animated Rin without any consequences - after all, bringing back the dead is no joke; not to mention that Rin technically should be 'rotting' or at least remaining in a static state even if she is 'alive.' But I'll overlook that only because Yuzuki just seems to have otherworldly powers in general.
And Obito. Man, the dramatic irony of him being THIS close to his teammate without the both of them knowing (for different reasons) - it's just too funny. I like how you kept his ruthlessness here and the merciless manipulation an Akatsuki leader would need to possess - perfecto! Need I say more?
Normally I abhor OCs, & yes there's usually a stigma about them (for good reason) but in this story, I can't help but be fascinated with yours. Yuzuki is obviously a disturbed character - but you gave her enough "flaws" to make us sympathize with her, & it's such a highly mismatched feeling. We feel bad for Rin & yet in the bigger schemes of things, we - or at least I - can't help but feel bad for both of them, stuck in their own world of problems.
Which is what I really like about this story, no matter the character - original or series-made - you keep things realistic & you engage your readers through the characters. I love how you worked through Rin's thoughts, how you rationalized her actions, & how skeptical she feels of Yuzuki's morals...and yet.. why she still remains by her side (as you demonstrated at the end here) - simply beautiful!
Heck, this whole premise is interesting - the re-animation of the dead & the amnesia! But I can only wonder how Yuzuki re-animated Rin without any consequences - after all, bringing back the dead is no joke; not to mention that Rin technically should be 'rotting' or at least remaining in a static state even if she is 'alive.' But I'll overlook that only because Yuzuki just seems to have otherworldly powers in general.
And Obito. Man, the dramatic irony of him being THIS close to his teammate without the both of them knowing (for different reasons) - it's just too funny. I like how you kept his ruthlessness here and the merciless manipulation an Akatsuki leader would need to possess - perfecto! Need I say more?