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4/13/2013 c1 Tsuyoshi
Hmmmm, interesting, look forward to your next update. Good start, not if most of them are recap of previous chapter but I see you want to build the bond between both of them.
4/14/2013 c1 7Paradox en Vogue
Yes, yes, more, MORE! Also, consult a grammar beta to clean up a few things. Your syntax isn't bad, but it needs touchup. Fix that and you're golden because I can see the ideas bubbling up and you've got what it takes to make both a good story and (I hope) a good love scene or two.

Sincerely,
Vogue
4/14/2013 c1 NoXVZhuusox
Hope to see more of this soon! :-)
4/12/2013 c1 whovian212
are they going to hook up ?
4/12/2013 c1 26PuppetMaster55
Well, this is an interesting beginning. Otherwise, not enough here to warrant a more in-depth review, but again, interesting.
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