for Storm's a Coming4/15/2013 c1 
35musiclover3
Hello. :) Are you new to the 39 Clues archive? I don't believe I've read a story from you before... Your summary is very strong, and so I'm surprised that not even /one/ person decided to review.
This is a very interesting idea, and I like the idea of the deceased characters coming back, getting amnesia, and gaining powers. This story has /so/ much potential to be something brilliant. :) At first I thought that this was just another OC story, but then as I kept reading, I became surprised. It wasn't obvious at first, until you saw the signs. So good job on the suspense.
You had some grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, such as spelling 'dryer' when the correct use of the term you were using is 'drier'. When you describe ages, it's better to type out the whole word, such as 'one' instead of '1'. You switched tenses several times, and your sentences were a bit awkward, but I'm sure you'll improve, and so I won't be one of those people who will type out all of your mistakes and correct them here in their review. I think all writers /do/ need help with their writing, but also need to improve on their own. (I feel like such a hypocrite, saying this to you. I hope I didn't offend you. Goodness knows if I received a review like this I'd be offended.) But I really /do/ feel that this was a good first chapter, and that this story could easily be something so brilliant, and that's why I feel the need to try to give you some CC.
If you'd ever like help with this story, I'm willing to give you all the help I can give. I'd love to see this story flourish into something amazing. :)
Keep writing.
musiclover3
35musiclover3Hello. :) Are you new to the 39 Clues archive? I don't believe I've read a story from you before... Your summary is very strong, and so I'm surprised that not even /one/ person decided to review.
This is a very interesting idea, and I like the idea of the deceased characters coming back, getting amnesia, and gaining powers. This story has /so/ much potential to be something brilliant. :) At first I thought that this was just another OC story, but then as I kept reading, I became surprised. It wasn't obvious at first, until you saw the signs. So good job on the suspense.
You had some grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, such as spelling 'dryer' when the correct use of the term you were using is 'drier'. When you describe ages, it's better to type out the whole word, such as 'one' instead of '1'. You switched tenses several times, and your sentences were a bit awkward, but I'm sure you'll improve, and so I won't be one of those people who will type out all of your mistakes and correct them here in their review. I think all writers /do/ need help with their writing, but also need to improve on their own. (I feel like such a hypocrite, saying this to you. I hope I didn't offend you. Goodness knows if I received a review like this I'd be offended.) But I really /do/ feel that this was a good first chapter, and that this story could easily be something so brilliant, and that's why I feel the need to try to give you some CC.
If you'd ever like help with this story, I'm willing to give you all the help I can give. I'd love to see this story flourish into something amazing. :)
Keep writing.
musiclover3