
7/26/2013 c1
2noradiana
I loved your characterization of charles and Raven. I think it's pretty perfect. perhaps the only thing I'd change is the cursing since Charles seem to intellectual of a child and man to use swearing as a means to express himself. I loved how I could still read a bit of that british accent in his dialogue without even trying. Though I dont really understand what was it that passed through ravens mind that made him so angry.

I loved your characterization of charles and Raven. I think it's pretty perfect. perhaps the only thing I'd change is the cursing since Charles seem to intellectual of a child and man to use swearing as a means to express himself. I loved how I could still read a bit of that british accent in his dialogue without even trying. Though I dont really understand what was it that passed through ravens mind that made him so angry.
5/30/2013 c1 RHommie
Hi. I just stumbled across your story after watching X-Men:First Class again and it is a very sweet story.
Write On!
-RHommie
Hi. I just stumbled across your story after watching X-Men:First Class again and it is a very sweet story.
Write On!
-RHommie
5/1/2013 c1 Guest
I've always found 'first class' Raven was a bit too much, she asks Charles to stop using his telepathy and then wants everyone else to accept her mututation. I think that's unfair, not that Charles would say so - the blasted saint. Anyways, I think this is good, it makes me wonder why she wants to be left alone. I've always thought if you trust someone resolutely, one would not mind a telepath digging about, maybe you could show what brought about this "promise"? That would bring more meaning to this.
I've always found 'first class' Raven was a bit too much, she asks Charles to stop using his telepathy and then wants everyone else to accept her mututation. I think that's unfair, not that Charles would say so - the blasted saint. Anyways, I think this is good, it makes me wonder why she wants to be left alone. I've always thought if you trust someone resolutely, one would not mind a telepath digging about, maybe you could show what brought about this "promise"? That would bring more meaning to this.
5/1/2013 c1 Malek
(crying my eyes out) This was so utterly freaking beautiful. A little odd and a little weird but nonetheless utterly AWESOME!
(crying my eyes out) This was so utterly freaking beautiful. A little odd and a little weird but nonetheless utterly AWESOME!