for Twins by time, meddling, and power: the Order of the Phoenix7/16/2017 c4 ChaoticMinds
-cringes- I really think putting Harry's ghost form in a hazmat suit was a terrible idea. The only reason Danny was ever in a hazmat suit in ghost form was because he was wearing it when he became a halfa. By that logic, Harry should be wearing wizardly clothes in his ghost form. NOT a hazmat suit! And his eyes should honestly be an actual blue, rather than a silver. So what if he supposedly looks too much like Jack Frost? This is a crossover between HP&DP. Not RotG. Just go by the canon rules(or the ones you've chosen to go by). Don't just pick and choose which rules you want to go by off and on throughout the story. It just makes what could've been an interesting story cringey.
-cringes- I really think putting Harry's ghost form in a hazmat suit was a terrible idea. The only reason Danny was ever in a hazmat suit in ghost form was because he was wearing it when he became a halfa. By that logic, Harry should be wearing wizardly clothes in his ghost form. NOT a hazmat suit! And his eyes should honestly be an actual blue, rather than a silver. So what if he supposedly looks too much like Jack Frost? This is a crossover between HP&DP. Not RotG. Just go by the canon rules(or the ones you've chosen to go by). Don't just pick and choose which rules you want to go by off and on throughout the story. It just makes what could've been an interesting story cringey.
12/13/2015 c4 
5lumigo akvo9504
I would say that the latter option is a good way to introduce Vlad to the story AND it would definitely more entertaining than Skulker because I've seen that many people use Skulker in their fanfic. Plus as an add bonus Danny can see Vlad's expression in person when he realizes that he is so dead. So with that all I have to say is keep writing and following the ideas you have.
5lumigo akvo9504I would say that the latter option is a good way to introduce Vlad to the story AND it would definitely more entertaining than Skulker because I've seen that many people use Skulker in their fanfic. Plus as an add bonus Danny can see Vlad's expression in person when he realizes that he is so dead. So with that all I have to say is keep writing and following the ideas you have.
12/3/2014 c4 4AugustMoon259
I like the second one better. Personally getting beaten by two halfas, yes!
4AugustMoon259I like the second one better. Personally getting beaten by two halfas, yes!
8/2/2014 c4 Guest
This is so awesome plz write more!
This is so awesome plz write more!
7/11/2014 c4 Guest
I think that Vlad should track them down himself. It'd be funnier, in my opinion.
I think that Vlad should track them down himself. It'd be funnier, in my opinion.
1/24/2014 c4 secretwhovianpony
Okay, first off: THIS IS FREAKING BLOODY AWESOME! Secondly: I find that the look you gave Harry's ghost form to be eh. I just don't like it. The colors clash. But, this is your story, and that is just my opinion. 3rd: I don't care how, I just want Vlad to be hilariously humiliated by Danny and Harry. 4: Danny will be in Gryffindor, right? And what about Jazz? You never mentioned if she has any magic. Lastly: while I find that it feels a tad bit rushed, the story as a whole is very good. It is humorous and it flows well. Truthfully, Everyone feels kinda ooc, but I'm putting that off to the fact that this is an au story. Ooc-ness is bound to happen. I think that as long as you keep the balance that is present here of keeping to the story line of OotP and everything being au, your story shall be well received. This balance is delicate though, so be careful. If the story ends up following the OotP story line too closely, it'll feel poorly written. If it's too au, then it'll also feel poorly written. So be careful when you do this.
Okay, first off: THIS IS FREAKING BLOODY AWESOME! Secondly: I find that the look you gave Harry's ghost form to be eh. I just don't like it. The colors clash. But, this is your story, and that is just my opinion. 3rd: I don't care how, I just want Vlad to be hilariously humiliated by Danny and Harry. 4: Danny will be in Gryffindor, right? And what about Jazz? You never mentioned if she has any magic. Lastly: while I find that it feels a tad bit rushed, the story as a whole is very good. It is humorous and it flows well. Truthfully, Everyone feels kinda ooc, but I'm putting that off to the fact that this is an au story. Ooc-ness is bound to happen. I think that as long as you keep the balance that is present here of keeping to the story line of OotP and everything being au, your story shall be well received. This balance is delicate though, so be careful. If the story ends up following the OotP story line too closely, it'll feel poorly written. If it's too au, then it'll also feel poorly written. So be careful when you do this.
11/26/2013 c4 RiverPhoenix3814
This is one of my favorite fanfictions! I was really confused at first with the whole time thing but now that I understand it better it makes a lot more sence. Please up date soon
This is one of my favorite fanfictions! I was really confused at first with the whole time thing but now that I understand it better it makes a lot more sence. Please up date soon
11/17/2013 c4 7NinjaSquirrel1912
It was really good! The humor and writing style were great! I am super excited for the next chapter!
7NinjaSquirrel1912It was really good! The humor and writing style were great! I am super excited for the next chapter!
11/13/2013 c4 1FrostingFlames
Great job! Your writing has improved a lot since you started! Please update soon!
1FrostingFlamesGreat job! Your writing has improved a lot since you started! Please update soon!
11/13/2013 c4 kinitsukirihan
What I find most fascinating about the story is the tongue-in-cheek style. Everything seems to be on the edge of sarcasm and it leads to lots of laughter on my part. I can just imagine how much damage will be done with the two brothers suddenly having new (and strong) powers. If you plan on introducing Vlad as a character, then have him send Skulker. That way Vlad will move operations. But if you don't want to go to the hassle, then just have Skulker go on his failing quest for Danny's pelt. By the way, did the Potters/Fentons rebuild their Ghost Portal? I want to know how Danny's ghost hunting (don't see the ghosts leaving him alone) will conflict with the issues saturating the Wizarding World.
What I find most fascinating about the story is the tongue-in-cheek style. Everything seems to be on the edge of sarcasm and it leads to lots of laughter on my part. I can just imagine how much damage will be done with the two brothers suddenly having new (and strong) powers. If you plan on introducing Vlad as a character, then have him send Skulker. That way Vlad will move operations. But if you don't want to go to the hassle, then just have Skulker go on his failing quest for Danny's pelt. By the way, did the Potters/Fentons rebuild their Ghost Portal? I want to know how Danny's ghost hunting (don't see the ghosts leaving him alone) will conflict with the issues saturating the Wizarding World.