for Plus One6/19/2020 c10 Appealtoreason
hi there! this was a great read and I hope you can come back and update it. i'd love to see where all this potential goes and its been a lot of fun to read so far. Plus i quite enjoy your writing style!
hi there! this was a great read and I hope you can come back and update it. i'd love to see where all this potential goes and its been a lot of fun to read so far. Plus i quite enjoy your writing style!
2/7/2020 c10 maxisaraviamgs
Que buena historia,me encantó hana ,su personalidad su forma de encarar a tai,n ojalá está Historia continúe
Que buena historia,me encantó hana ,su personalidad su forma de encarar a tai,n ojalá está Historia continúe
10/19/2016 c10 
20alicelouise'x
I fell in love with Hana the moment Taichi saw her. This story was simply divine. I enjoyed every word of it. I honestly lost myself in it. Fantastic. You haven't got me loving Catherine yet - she is still a sore spot for me over the whole dynamic between her and Hikari, but I am willing to try for the sake of how well written this story is!
20alicelouise'xI fell in love with Hana the moment Taichi saw her. This story was simply divine. I enjoyed every word of it. I honestly lost myself in it. Fantastic. You haven't got me loving Catherine yet - she is still a sore spot for me over the whole dynamic between her and Hikari, but I am willing to try for the sake of how well written this story is!
10/19/2016 c3 alicelouise'x
It is 2:30 in the morning and I'm snickering and laughing out loud at this. This story is pure bliss, the characters are perfect. I love Taichi more than life itself. His bond with Yamato is more than perfect in this story and I'm looking forward to reading more one on one time for them further on in the story. Takeru is just simply delightful, I love how you are portraying him. These characteristics are absolutely perfect for him. His relationship with Hikari is simply wonderful, I've never fully been able to quite grasp if I love them together together or rather just love them together. But this is fantastic. I'm yet to check if this has been updated recently, but I am definitely hoping that this is an ongoing story still!
It is 2:30 in the morning and I'm snickering and laughing out loud at this. This story is pure bliss, the characters are perfect. I love Taichi more than life itself. His bond with Yamato is more than perfect in this story and I'm looking forward to reading more one on one time for them further on in the story. Takeru is just simply delightful, I love how you are portraying him. These characteristics are absolutely perfect for him. His relationship with Hikari is simply wonderful, I've never fully been able to quite grasp if I love them together together or rather just love them together. But this is fantastic. I'm yet to check if this has been updated recently, but I am definitely hoping that this is an ongoing story still!
4/30/2016 c10 2mrboogie94
I FINALLY got around to reading this. I honestly was putting it off to read it in the right mindset. I love tension, and I love how uncomfortable you've made Tai since he comes off as such an alpha male in the previous chapters, so it's refreshing to read and perceive.
Looking forward to what's next!
2mrboogie94I FINALLY got around to reading this. I honestly was putting it off to read it in the right mindset. I love tension, and I love how uncomfortable you've made Tai since he comes off as such an alpha male in the previous chapters, so it's refreshing to read and perceive.
Looking forward to what's next!
4/8/2016 c10 Guest
Whyyy do the best fanfics never seem to update D:
Whyyy do the best fanfics never seem to update D:
3/23/2016 c5 Guest
The French ain't too annoying. It adds a touch of refinement to the overall theme. Overall, Catherine seems like an interesting character. Hope you can make her more complex.
The French ain't too annoying. It adds a touch of refinement to the overall theme. Overall, Catherine seems like an interesting character. Hope you can make her more complex.
3/23/2016 c4 Guest
Am really liking what I am seeing. You could try putting more detail on the relationship between mimi and Izzy. And some steamy action may be appreciated as well.
Am really liking what I am seeing. You could try putting more detail on the relationship between mimi and Izzy. And some steamy action may be appreciated as well.
3/23/2016 c3 Guest
So far absolutely amazing! It's really great to see the characters brought to life. Keep it up!
So far absolutely amazing! It's really great to see the characters brought to life. Keep it up!
3/21/2016 c10 Keke
OMG PLS UPDATE! IM DYING TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS. I LOVE YOUR WRITING!
OMG PLS UPDATE! IM DYING TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS. I LOVE YOUR WRITING!
3/13/2016 c7 Bee
I love your writing style! I binge read the 10 chapters and I need more!
I love your writing style! I binge read the 10 chapters and I need more!
3/13/2016 c10 20A Hidden Path
An interesting thing about AUs is that the characters are meeting in new circumstances, with entirely new first impressions. I'm not sure that Hana and Taichi are seeing one another in a completely favorable light! XD The talk of name brands and "your type"s really emphasizes that. I would love to know exactly what Hana's thinking here... She sure seems to be in her element around the Palais. I wonder if that has anything to do with her confidence and upper hand, or if that's just Hana?
Oh man, nononono, Hana, no. Do NOT use your silverware for your fries. Good God! XD
I love how they seem to have this... instinctive, gut chemistry, despite basically picking at one another the whole time. Maybe Hana's emboldened by the whole "stalker" angle (ie, you're making me uncomfortable so I'm not worried about making you uncomfortable), but she feels so free to say whatever the hell she wants to Taichi, and that always implies a sort of intimacy, even if what's said isn't... nice XD For now, I'd say that Taichi is just trying to keep his feet in this conversation, but I doubt he'd pass a chance for some fun.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Thanks for writing :D
20A Hidden PathAn interesting thing about AUs is that the characters are meeting in new circumstances, with entirely new first impressions. I'm not sure that Hana and Taichi are seeing one another in a completely favorable light! XD The talk of name brands and "your type"s really emphasizes that. I would love to know exactly what Hana's thinking here... She sure seems to be in her element around the Palais. I wonder if that has anything to do with her confidence and upper hand, or if that's just Hana?
Oh man, nononono, Hana, no. Do NOT use your silverware for your fries. Good God! XD
I love how they seem to have this... instinctive, gut chemistry, despite basically picking at one another the whole time. Maybe Hana's emboldened by the whole "stalker" angle (ie, you're making me uncomfortable so I'm not worried about making you uncomfortable), but she feels so free to say whatever the hell she wants to Taichi, and that always implies a sort of intimacy, even if what's said isn't... nice XD For now, I'd say that Taichi is just trying to keep his feet in this conversation, but I doubt he'd pass a chance for some fun.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Thanks for writing :D
1/4/2016 c9 2mrboogie94
I finally got around to reading this. EXHALE.
As much as I love reading about Tai's rocky romantic endeavours, it's somewhat hard to enjoy him and Catherine's interactions because it feels like it's always been a relationship with too much pull.. as in whatever seems to benefit the individual - which is great to explore, but the two of them have to decide if the other is worth their time lol what do they have in common?
Thanks for the update :)
2mrboogie94I finally got around to reading this. EXHALE.
As much as I love reading about Tai's rocky romantic endeavours, it's somewhat hard to enjoy him and Catherine's interactions because it feels like it's always been a relationship with too much pull.. as in whatever seems to benefit the individual - which is great to explore, but the two of them have to decide if the other is worth their time lol what do they have in common?
Thanks for the update :)
10/27/2015 c9 20A Hidden Path
Okay, you specifically asked about Catherine and Tai, so that's what I'll focus on.
In my opinion, the difficulty I'm having with Catherine may be that we haven't seen her acting as... just as Catherine. She's very focused on her job at all times here. In all of her scenes, she's either in the office, trying to do her job, or arguing with Tai while rushing in between job stuff. Work is important, and obviously it's very important to Catherine, but who is she when she's off the clock? What I can tell you about her at this point is that she's intelligent, capable, hard working, and ambitious. Presumably she likes the arts, also?
So it's hard to frame a convincing relationship between Tai and Catherine when we've only seen one facet of Catherine's life. Also, they haven't had a chance to truly interact thus far; it's always quick touch-and-go moments, and usually they're mad at each other. Sometimes they seem to come off almost as... rivals? Or just... two people who are drawn to each other, but also wary of one another. There's also a feeling that Tai is pining over her and Catherine just sees him as a friend, and a friend she can disappoint in favor of work, at that (obviously he's mis-stepped too, though, so I don't hold that against her). We see Tai obsessing over his relationship with her and with trying to grasp at time with her, but we don't really know how Kat feels about him. That can start to feel a bit unsavory over time.
So when Catherine is hurt by his rejection of ballet tickets and says, "Am I not worth impressing now?" it comes off as being pretty unpalatable. Especially when she then goads him with, "Fine, I'll ask someone else. It's no loss to me." It feels like she's stringing him along/ jerking him around on purpose, and I'm not sure if you're going for that or not? Or maybe it's revenge for his forgetting their last date? It just felt harsh to me, and I'm not sure what vibe you're going for.
My suggestion would be to give them a relaxed moment together. I think we need to see Kat outside of the Palais, just being herself, and we need to hear the two of them communicate when they're not mad/annoyed/rushed. Also, it would help to know more about what Kat thinks of Tai. Does she like him? Is he just, as she calls him here, a friend? (Meanwhile, Tai is all, "Sex? Sex?" XD XD XD) I think I remember Hikari claiming that Kat uses Tai, but I can't be sure. How true is that? Obviously this is all up to you though XD XD XD
Okay, how bad is it that I tried to figure out why Psyche and Eurydice would be in the same image, and also how the viewer would recognize them? XD Mythological figures are recognized either by attributes or by the scene depicted. It would be difficult to identify those two characters outside of images depicting scenes from their stories, since they lack identification objects, and if they're together, the image can't be depicting a scene from their personal narratives. Eurydice would either need to be with Orpheus, or to be shown dying with a snake around her foot, which probably isn't in the Palais? XD Psyche is usually depicted with Eros. And I am so sorry about this. I could talk about this stuff for days. It sounds really super nit picky of me, but people are super serious about their mythology, so it's generally not something you should add without checking up on things. Annoying, right? XD XD XD
Ooooh man, I'm sorry if this sounds discouraging. I love this story! It's awesome, and you should write more :D :D :D I'm looking forward to learning more about Kat and Tai, and seeing what's up with Takeru and Hikari :D :D :D Thanks for writing!
20A Hidden PathOkay, you specifically asked about Catherine and Tai, so that's what I'll focus on.
In my opinion, the difficulty I'm having with Catherine may be that we haven't seen her acting as... just as Catherine. She's very focused on her job at all times here. In all of her scenes, she's either in the office, trying to do her job, or arguing with Tai while rushing in between job stuff. Work is important, and obviously it's very important to Catherine, but who is she when she's off the clock? What I can tell you about her at this point is that she's intelligent, capable, hard working, and ambitious. Presumably she likes the arts, also?
So it's hard to frame a convincing relationship between Tai and Catherine when we've only seen one facet of Catherine's life. Also, they haven't had a chance to truly interact thus far; it's always quick touch-and-go moments, and usually they're mad at each other. Sometimes they seem to come off almost as... rivals? Or just... two people who are drawn to each other, but also wary of one another. There's also a feeling that Tai is pining over her and Catherine just sees him as a friend, and a friend she can disappoint in favor of work, at that (obviously he's mis-stepped too, though, so I don't hold that against her). We see Tai obsessing over his relationship with her and with trying to grasp at time with her, but we don't really know how Kat feels about him. That can start to feel a bit unsavory over time.
So when Catherine is hurt by his rejection of ballet tickets and says, "Am I not worth impressing now?" it comes off as being pretty unpalatable. Especially when she then goads him with, "Fine, I'll ask someone else. It's no loss to me." It feels like she's stringing him along/ jerking him around on purpose, and I'm not sure if you're going for that or not? Or maybe it's revenge for his forgetting their last date? It just felt harsh to me, and I'm not sure what vibe you're going for.
My suggestion would be to give them a relaxed moment together. I think we need to see Kat outside of the Palais, just being herself, and we need to hear the two of them communicate when they're not mad/annoyed/rushed. Also, it would help to know more about what Kat thinks of Tai. Does she like him? Is he just, as she calls him here, a friend? (Meanwhile, Tai is all, "Sex? Sex?" XD XD XD) I think I remember Hikari claiming that Kat uses Tai, but I can't be sure. How true is that? Obviously this is all up to you though XD XD XD
Okay, how bad is it that I tried to figure out why Psyche and Eurydice would be in the same image, and also how the viewer would recognize them? XD Mythological figures are recognized either by attributes or by the scene depicted. It would be difficult to identify those two characters outside of images depicting scenes from their stories, since they lack identification objects, and if they're together, the image can't be depicting a scene from their personal narratives. Eurydice would either need to be with Orpheus, or to be shown dying with a snake around her foot, which probably isn't in the Palais? XD Psyche is usually depicted with Eros. And I am so sorry about this. I could talk about this stuff for days. It sounds really super nit picky of me, but people are super serious about their mythology, so it's generally not something you should add without checking up on things. Annoying, right? XD XD XD
Ooooh man, I'm sorry if this sounds discouraging. I love this story! It's awesome, and you should write more :D :D :D I'm looking forward to learning more about Kat and Tai, and seeing what's up with Takeru and Hikari :D :D :D Thanks for writing!