7/7/2019 c2 BowmanW
Feels rushed, disappointing that the author takes the easy route of just giving out a character profile. Even if it's requested, it's a poor writer's tactic. We should learn more about the character's past through the story, not some silly character summary.
The argument between Louise and this Blake character was summed up in a time skip, felt rushed, and poorly handled.
Blake just generally feels like an arrogant and annoying character overall. 'He thought darkly.' Why though? I assume he asked Guiche, and Guiche responded in a relatively normal way, and gave a relatively normal answer, yet Blake is described as 'gritting his teeth' and 'thinking darkly'. I cannot sympathize or connect with the character, at all, because he just seems to be some angry child. His anger at Louise is somewhat justified, his unexplained anger at everything around him, isn't.
Feels rushed, disappointing that the author takes the easy route of just giving out a character profile. Even if it's requested, it's a poor writer's tactic. We should learn more about the character's past through the story, not some silly character summary.
The argument between Louise and this Blake character was summed up in a time skip, felt rushed, and poorly handled.
Blake just generally feels like an arrogant and annoying character overall. 'He thought darkly.' Why though? I assume he asked Guiche, and Guiche responded in a relatively normal way, and gave a relatively normal answer, yet Blake is described as 'gritting his teeth' and 'thinking darkly'. I cannot sympathize or connect with the character, at all, because he just seems to be some angry child. His anger at Louise is somewhat justified, his unexplained anger at everything around him, isn't.
8/13/2017 c4 AkaliMidLaner
dude can you bring back the giant squid also if you dont mind is there gonna be a Blake x Maldita? if so it will nice.
oh one more thing is he gonna build the vaccum imploder and the proton collider the wreck the crap outta the country?
dude can you bring back the giant squid also if you dont mind is there gonna be a Blake x Maldita? if so it will nice.
oh one more thing is he gonna build the vaccum imploder and the proton collider the wreck the crap outta the country?
1/20/2017 c7 Guest
Please continue this story. I find it interesting
Please continue this story. I find it interesting
8/21/2016 c1 Guest
I am hoping for you to continue and finish your story regardless of the reviews they gave you, I simply appreciated it if you complete the story, mistakes do happen but that does not mean that you can't finish what have you started, I hope my review help you and I'm also Command and Conquer fans as well XD
I am hoping for you to continue and finish your story regardless of the reviews they gave you, I simply appreciated it if you complete the story, mistakes do happen but that does not mean that you can't finish what have you started, I hope my review help you and I'm also Command and Conquer fans as well XD
5/4/2016 c7 shintablack
awwww. despite ts flaws. it was an interesting story and a rare xover. hope you continue this soon
awwww. despite ts flaws. it was an interesting story and a rare xover. hope you continue this soon
4/26/2016 c7 Guest
I was not dissatisfied in the last. Please do continue.
I was not dissatisfied in the last. Please do continue.
1/26/2016 c7 3Paktu
Im no command and conquer red alert player, but im really enjoying your fanfiction, you seems to be able to keep it simple and it is a very user friendly read apart from the beginning. Story wise good, I allwasy want to read a fiction where humans with tecnology is wrecking havoc in a magical dominated fantasy world. so thumbs up :D
Im no command and conquer red alert player, but im really enjoying your fanfiction, you seems to be able to keep it simple and it is a very user friendly read apart from the beginning. Story wise good, I allwasy want to read a fiction where humans with tecnology is wrecking havoc in a magical dominated fantasy world. so thumbs up :D
7/8/2015 c7 Guest
OMG you give this story to LZW ive seen his storys he never finishes them in years he cant do shit ive read hes storys there fucking awful what were you thinking.
OMG you give this story to LZW ive seen his storys he never finishes them in years he cant do shit ive read hes storys there fucking awful what were you thinking.
7/7/2015 c7 3Neoxis1123
LZW... I saw that name many times in some stories that is getting adopted, who is he?
LZW... I saw that name many times in some stories that is getting adopted, who is he?