for Commander of Zero5/11/2013 c4 reader
just some wild guesses...
the 'someone' might be
a) a rouge imperial psionic soldier like Yuriko Omega
or
b) a rouge imperial commander with his/her own MCV
or
c) a rouge soviet commander with his/her own MCV
or
I DON'T KNOW WHO IS THIS 'SOMEONE'!
just to remind again, it just some wild guesses.
just some wild guesses...
the 'someone' might be
a) a rouge imperial psionic soldier like Yuriko Omega
or
b) a rouge imperial commander with his/her own MCV
or
c) a rouge soviet commander with his/her own MCV
or
I DON'T KNOW WHO IS THIS 'SOMEONE'!
just to remind again, it just some wild guesses.
5/11/2013 c4 
9Robo Reader 21
Okay, the separation helped but do it right man. Let me give you an example:
"It has been several days since the duel with Guiche and all of the students were put on edge, mostly because of a certain commoner where currently rumors of the origins of the said commoner was running rampant. Some people claimed that he was an elf in disguise, other claimed that he was a fallen noble, and others claim that he was a commoner that somehow stolen magic from nobles.
It had gotten so bad that Blake made a proclamation that if anyone was willing to talk to him as an equal, he would be more than willing to say what is true or not true about him. So far none of the students were willing to take up that offer, probably since they were either scared or were not willing to treat a commoner as an equal."
Couple other correction:
1- Reconquista never claimed to be fighting for the non-mages. Its a movement by nobles, for nobles. Those who believe the royal families, and the current church, is incompetent in carrying out Brimir's will of freeing the Holy Land and wiping out the elves.
2- The princess is gonna marry the Germanian Emperor and the Pope is not involved in any way. Its strictly between the two countries business.
3- The powers of void is not known to any specific details on what they do outside of the church in Romalia. Public just knows glorified crap.
4- Elves ships are pulled by dragons. They also got a sea navy of whale dragons in the south.
5- The people of Halk are of a ploy sort of religion with multiple gods and goddesses. Though they do one god above the rest. And its more Norse based since they reference Valhalla.
9Robo Reader 21Okay, the separation helped but do it right man. Let me give you an example:
"It has been several days since the duel with Guiche and all of the students were put on edge, mostly because of a certain commoner where currently rumors of the origins of the said commoner was running rampant. Some people claimed that he was an elf in disguise, other claimed that he was a fallen noble, and others claim that he was a commoner that somehow stolen magic from nobles.
It had gotten so bad that Blake made a proclamation that if anyone was willing to talk to him as an equal, he would be more than willing to say what is true or not true about him. So far none of the students were willing to take up that offer, probably since they were either scared or were not willing to treat a commoner as an equal."
Couple other correction:
1- Reconquista never claimed to be fighting for the non-mages. Its a movement by nobles, for nobles. Those who believe the royal families, and the current church, is incompetent in carrying out Brimir's will of freeing the Holy Land and wiping out the elves.
2- The princess is gonna marry the Germanian Emperor and the Pope is not involved in any way. Its strictly between the two countries business.
3- The powers of void is not known to any specific details on what they do outside of the church in Romalia. Public just knows glorified crap.
4- Elves ships are pulled by dragons. They also got a sea navy of whale dragons in the south.
5- The people of Halk are of a ploy sort of religion with multiple gods and goddesses. Though they do one god above the rest. And its more Norse based since they reference Valhalla.
5/11/2013 c4 7Frosty Wolf
Interesting explanation for the units and vehicles. You should really do something about your spacing though. It's all just over a line followed by a space.
7Frosty WolfInteresting explanation for the units and vehicles. You should really do something about your spacing though. It's all just over a line followed by a space.
5/10/2013 c3 Mar. Aaron Walker
I suggest that try to improve the writing so it will be easier and fun to read and also don't forget to bring along a couple of modified Tesla Tanks (Or your favorite Tank) for the Great Liberation!
Marshal Belinsky signing out.
I suggest that try to improve the writing so it will be easier and fun to read and also don't forget to bring along a couple of modified Tesla Tanks (Or your favorite Tank) for the Great Liberation!
Marshal Belinsky signing out.
5/7/2013 c2 Guest
Try spacing out your wording so they are not blocked and easier to read.
Apart from that i'm enjoying the fic. Looking forward to seeing the next chapter and upon the nobles' reaction when they see his base of operations.
Chris
Try spacing out your wording so they are not blocked and easier to read.
Apart from that i'm enjoying the fic. Looking forward to seeing the next chapter and upon the nobles' reaction when they see his base of operations.
Chris
5/9/2013 c3 4foldguy24
This story is doing good. However, please try not to create big walls of texts. They're kinda hard to read (something which I realized when others told me when I was doing it in the past).
Anyways, as for this story. I just have one thing to ask. Are all of Blake's units (like the Mirage Tank) manned by a human personnel? Based on what I read on chapter 1, he seems to be the only human in the chronosphere ride to ZnT save for his AI Athena (He could recruit commoners, possibly the kitchen staff, but I doubt those guys can learn fast enough how to drive things like the Prospector in a few days let alone an Apocalypse tank). Second, does he have access to the entire Allied and Soviet tech structures and arsenals (since he got both the Allied and Soviet MCVs to begin with? And lastly, where can he get ore? As far as I know ZnT doesn't have ores or any minerals comparable to ore seen in CnC: Red Alert series.
Oh yeah, when I was planning a CnCxZnT crossover, my first CnC franchise choice was Red Alert but I decided against it because if you pair up Time Travel with Chrono Technology it will become an OP voidhax killer. Why? Well, just simply send in a Chrono Legionnaire in Brimir's time via the time machine and have that Chrono Legionnaire shoot Brimir with his Chrono Rifle and that sucker won't be a bother anymore since no Brimir results in no Void. Alternatively, just send in a large group of CLs and simply erase Brimir's tribe for good measure (one CL per one of Brimir's tribesmen).
It's also a good thing your CnC side isn't CnC: Tiberium. If it is, whoever the commander of the CnC Tiberium faction is will simply fling out Tiberium like candy right at the ZnT nobles. No need for weapons and anything... just those green glowing rocks. Just a single Tiberium ore the size of something like the largest flatscreen TV is enough to screw ZnTverse.
Finally, that's how I chose CnC: Generals for my ZnT crossover. Mundane with just some wacky mods on it. On another plus side, no important characters to use or turn into OOCs (save for the generals in ZH) so liberal use of OCs won't be too much questioned.
Anyways, update ASAP.
4foldguy24This story is doing good. However, please try not to create big walls of texts. They're kinda hard to read (something which I realized when others told me when I was doing it in the past).
Anyways, as for this story. I just have one thing to ask. Are all of Blake's units (like the Mirage Tank) manned by a human personnel? Based on what I read on chapter 1, he seems to be the only human in the chronosphere ride to ZnT save for his AI Athena (He could recruit commoners, possibly the kitchen staff, but I doubt those guys can learn fast enough how to drive things like the Prospector in a few days let alone an Apocalypse tank). Second, does he have access to the entire Allied and Soviet tech structures and arsenals (since he got both the Allied and Soviet MCVs to begin with? And lastly, where can he get ore? As far as I know ZnT doesn't have ores or any minerals comparable to ore seen in CnC: Red Alert series.
Oh yeah, when I was planning a CnCxZnT crossover, my first CnC franchise choice was Red Alert but I decided against it because if you pair up Time Travel with Chrono Technology it will become an OP voidhax killer. Why? Well, just simply send in a Chrono Legionnaire in Brimir's time via the time machine and have that Chrono Legionnaire shoot Brimir with his Chrono Rifle and that sucker won't be a bother anymore since no Brimir results in no Void. Alternatively, just send in a large group of CLs and simply erase Brimir's tribe for good measure (one CL per one of Brimir's tribesmen).
It's also a good thing your CnC side isn't CnC: Tiberium. If it is, whoever the commander of the CnC Tiberium faction is will simply fling out Tiberium like candy right at the ZnT nobles. No need for weapons and anything... just those green glowing rocks. Just a single Tiberium ore the size of something like the largest flatscreen TV is enough to screw ZnTverse.
Finally, that's how I chose CnC: Generals for my ZnT crossover. Mundane with just some wacky mods on it. On another plus side, no important characters to use or turn into OOCs (save for the generals in ZH) so liberal use of OCs won't be too much questioned.
Anyways, update ASAP.
5/6/2013 c2 reader
can you change Allied peacekeeper weapon from shotgun to assault rifle( M16/car15 ) with masterkey attachment?
Cause using shotguns in open place surely not suitable for the ranged combat
you can also use variety of weapons such as mp5 or GPMG, not just shotgun, right?
can you change Allied peacekeeper weapon from shotgun to assault rifle( M16/car15 ) with masterkey attachment?
Cause using shotguns in open place surely not suitable for the ranged combat
you can also use variety of weapons such as mp5 or GPMG, not just shotgun, right?
5/6/2013 c2 george
This awesome going to be awesome.
This awesome going to be awesome.
5/7/2013 c3 mega1987
lemme make a wild guess...
Seista is a descendant of Yuriko or some rising sun psychic experiment...
lemme make a wild guess...
Seista is a descendant of Yuriko or some rising sun psychic experiment...
5/7/2013 c3 9Robo Reader 21
I gotta say the line were Blake says they're too magic-centric and narrow minded is exactly what I would say and write.
9Robo Reader 21I gotta say the line were Blake says they're too magic-centric and narrow minded is exactly what I would say and write.
5/5/2013 c1 BeanCorn
Interesting start, but remember to avoid walls of text.
Need an MCV IMO :-)
Interesting start, but remember to avoid walls of text.
Need an MCV IMO :-)