for Marcel Bonin lost in time6/6/2013 c8 Guest
just keeps getting better update soon
just keeps getting better update soon
6/6/2013 c7 Guest
best chapter yet
best chapter yet
6/4/2013 c7 Theresa Moller
You did a wounderful job with this chapter. Being a critic again: Ch,7 Paragraph 9: I'm ashamed about (not but) last night but I got side-tracked.. Ch. 7 Paragraph 100: Marcel took a spoonfull of the soup and popped it into her mouth. Marcel's eyes got _(got what) and she mumbled
You did a wounderful job with this chapter. Being a critic again: Ch,7 Paragraph 9: I'm ashamed about (not but) last night but I got side-tracked.. Ch. 7 Paragraph 100: Marcel took a spoonfull of the soup and popped it into her mouth. Marcel's eyes got _(got what) and she mumbled
6/6/2013 c6 Guest
very good
very good
6/6/2013 c5 Guest
love it
love it
6/6/2013 c4 Guest
interesting story
interesting story
6/6/2013 c3 Guest
oh wow fantastic
oh wow fantastic
6/6/2013 c2 Guest
getting better
getting better
6/6/2013 c1 Guest
good start
good start
6/4/2013 c6 Theresa Moller
Very good story... Being a critic: Ch.6 paragraph 16
Why haven't I ever heard anything about this war (instead of: why haven't she never heard of this war) Using haven't and never in the same sentence (which is two negatives) is saying that she knows about the war.
Very good story... Being a critic: Ch.6 paragraph 16
Why haven't I ever heard anything about this war (instead of: why haven't she never heard of this war) Using haven't and never in the same sentence (which is two negatives) is saying that she knows about the war.
6/4/2013 c5 Theresa Moller
on to chapter 6... ch. 5 was awsome
on to chapter 6... ch. 5 was awsome
6/6/2013 c8 Katidbsh
OH my god this was such a good chapter! Keep updating, this is my favourite fic! :D
OH my god this was such a good chapter! Keep updating, this is my favourite fic! :D
6/2/2013 c4 Theresa Moller
Very well done Cheryl... on to chpter 5...
Very well done Cheryl... on to chpter 5...
6/2/2013 c3 Theresa Moller
Ahhhh... no time for review (other than love it!)... gotta go to the next chapter
Ahhhh... no time for review (other than love it!)... gotta go to the next chapter
6/2/2013 c2 Theresa Moller
Oh yeah, keep it coming... good good...
Oh yeah, keep it coming... good good...