for Survival of the Fittest2/22/2018 c1 
199NeonZangetsu
*Blinks*
A cock Tsukune? THANK THE GODS! I'm so sick of his wimpy behavior that this feels like a breath of fresh air! I'll be watching this closely!
Warm regards,
~Nz
199NeonZangetsu*Blinks*
A cock Tsukune? THANK THE GODS! I'm so sick of his wimpy behavior that this feels like a breath of fresh air! I'll be watching this closely!
Warm regards,
~Nz
12/27/2017 c9 Guest
Your story is okay... But it needs alot of Improvements.
1: there is too many cliches that we always see in Naruto and pokemon Fanfics where the Author insert themselves into the main characters
2: Harems are not necessary. The Manga deconstructed Harems.
3: Major OOC Moments for No valid or creative Reasons.
4: Bad Lemons...The Main chracters treats the Woman like a Piece of meat while they have sex... The Lemon scenes themselves are not relatable at all
Your story is okay... But it needs alot of Improvements.
1: there is too many cliches that we always see in Naruto and pokemon Fanfics where the Author insert themselves into the main characters
2: Harems are not necessary. The Manga deconstructed Harems.
3: Major OOC Moments for No valid or creative Reasons.
4: Bad Lemons...The Main chracters treats the Woman like a Piece of meat while they have sex... The Lemon scenes themselves are not relatable at all
9/25/2016 c9 chris
keep up the great work up i would like to see a few more chapters
keep up the great work up i would like to see a few more chapters
1/12/2016 c9 Guest
You should report Argos29 for constantly deleting reviews that hold constructive cristism of guests and calling us retarded trolls.
You should report Argos29 for constantly deleting reviews that hold constructive cristism of guests and calling us retarded trolls.
12/7/2014 c9 Guest
Finish what you started
Finish what you started
11/24/2014 c9 yes
MORE!
MORE!
11/23/2014 c9 Guest
One on One Lemon Scenes are better than Threesomes because they are more Focused..
Personally i Think you need to redo this Fanfic due toit being so outdated and old this story needs a imoroved Plot. Why make a Dragonball Z Crossover of it. Taking place hundreds of Years after battle of the Gods(Gt is not Canon).
Tsukune is The Desdandant of Goten.
A Orphan Who Fought daily to survive. He was then taken in by a Martial Arts Master that saw potential in the boy. The Master Was acually a Demon in Human Form. Hint He is a Former or Current Demon lord that Goku fought in the past
One on One Lemon Scenes are better than Threesomes because they are more Focused..
Personally i Think you need to redo this Fanfic due toit being so outdated and old this story needs a imoroved Plot. Why make a Dragonball Z Crossover of it. Taking place hundreds of Years after battle of the Gods(Gt is not Canon).
Tsukune is The Desdandant of Goten.
A Orphan Who Fought daily to survive. He was then taken in by a Martial Arts Master that saw potential in the boy. The Master Was acually a Demon in Human Form. Hint He is a Former or Current Demon lord that Goku fought in the past
11/19/2014 c9 cerberus328
awesome update but I thought the relationship with the girls were a bit fast
awesome update but I thought the relationship with the girls were a bit fast
11/19/2014 c9 Guest
I Belive a rewrite is due.
Maybe have Tsukune a Dessdanant of a Goku
Main Ability is Zenkai and also he get stronger amd skilled after each battle.
I Belive a rewrite is due.
Maybe have Tsukune a Dessdanant of a Goku
Main Ability is Zenkai and also he get stronger amd skilled after each battle.
11/19/2014 c9 Guest
That was a Horrible Lemon Scene. And chapter seemed Half baked.
That was a Horrible Lemon Scene. And chapter seemed Half baked.
11/18/2014 c9 1SaiyanIncubus
The lemon could use more length, detail, and spread out between time but the story still just as good. If your looking for inspiration then I would suggest getting Netflix and watching the anime's Hunter X Hunter, Magi, and Fairy Tail, then read Fairy Tail as a Manga as it is exactly the same unlike most manga's and anime. Also try the manga "The Game", I think it's actually from Korea as it's based there, but it's really cool and filled with ideas.
1SaiyanIncubusThe lemon could use more length, detail, and spread out between time but the story still just as good. If your looking for inspiration then I would suggest getting Netflix and watching the anime's Hunter X Hunter, Magi, and Fairy Tail, then read Fairy Tail as a Manga as it is exactly the same unlike most manga's and anime. Also try the manga "The Game", I think it's actually from Korea as it's based there, but it's really cool and filled with ideas.
11/18/2014 c5 darkheart66
the norse dragon of the underworld name is nidhogg (need*hog) and the thing u called an anubite is called an anubis a half man half jakel from egyptian mythology in service to osirus the egyptian death god whose army is made up of anubi i dont think your dumb but dude know your shit if you want i can help u there just ask
the norse dragon of the underworld name is nidhogg (need*hog) and the thing u called an anubite is called an anubis a half man half jakel from egyptian mythology in service to osirus the egyptian death god whose army is made up of anubi i dont think your dumb but dude know your shit if you want i can help u there just ask