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5/17/2013 c5 12Dixxy
Ah ah, nice physical moment bw Sam & Danny ! Although i prefer when they were doing... hum, "P.E." in my own story ! XD

Also, nice lil' embarrassing moment bw Chris & Dan' at the end... a romance on the way ? Well, Danny blushes wz Sam & holds Chris's hand : is he bi, somehow ? XD

And that Nyia... a real B.I.T.C.H., yeah ! :( Hopes she gets electrocuted as well, her moron !

Nice going, Shim' ! Go on !
5/14/2013 c4 Dixxy
Action ! Great ! I like action ! Maybe less than Blood-of-Silver, though... ;)

You're fond of the terms "males" and "females", uh ? Well, Y not after all ?
Eh eh, in French, we use them only
for animals, never for humans. Again,
Y not ?

Funny dialog bw C & D at the end !
These 2 are meant to get along. XD

i hope M will be fine and not suffer
too much from her wounds.

Oh, and looking forward to hv Cathy
in the story as well.

Go on publishing, young black female ! XD

xxxx
5/14/2013 c3 1Emmyrulz4ever
EWWWW IT POOPED IN THE BED OR DID IT PEE
5/14/2013 c3 12Dixxy
Ah ah, nice lil' fighting moment bw Sam & Dan' ! And also that cute blushing moment ! These two always have sth to do wz each other, either to quarrel or sometimes to be attracted.

The final scene wz Maria getting mad at the puppy when she sees how it has been messing up the room (and her bed... ;) is also very funny !

I like the name Kamoon, btw. And i sense that dog will play some important role in the story.
I may be wrong but... anyway, wait & C !

Keep posting, Shim', keep posting ! :)

Nice work !
5/13/2013 c2 1Emmyrulz4ever
OMG POOR CHRIS AGAIN WHY IS HE GETTING BAD LUCK LIKE HE DOESN'T DESERVE IT LIKE NAH . But this was AWESOME PLZ KEEP WRITING BESTIE
5/13/2013 c1 Emmyrulz4ever
OMG THAT'S WAS AWESOME . Poor Chris WHAT'S WRONG I hope he's ok
5/13/2013 c2 12Dixxy
Hey !

I may be wrong, but could this story have personal elements in it ? Just wondering...

Funny, Danny wants Nyia who wants Maria, but Maria doesn't want Nyia who doesn't
want Danny. The reverse negation. Really funny.

Now, what could have happened to Chris, wz that electric shock ?

It seems a good start. We'll see where ya go from there.

Ya got my support, and oh, happy to see ya back on FF ! ;)

Hugsies !

L.
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