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6/14/2013 c2 Chiga
Damn, Luka, don’t you seem nice.
I agree with Rin on this, Len is weird, though in a good way. I also like Rin’s personality, it’s interesting.
Kaito gives me the pedobear vibe for some reason.

x: Anyway, you could use some more description between dialogues. And I think the story is moving a bit fast in the romance department, either that or Len is just bold and Rin doesn’t mind it. You can put a – between the name and the honorific: Len-kun, Kaito-san. Other than that, and a few minor errors, the story is interesting, and I do want to see more.

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