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9/21/2013 c1 c0pypa5ted3lete
Wow I love this story! It's very interesting. There are a few things I would like to point out though:

1) I would just alter the title a little bit. I think you meant "Wrath" instead of "Warth". Good first impressions make all the difference!
2) I love the idea that Vampires are "infected" Glacians, however I think that this point would look better explained in your own words rather than through the words of a character. Making it into a long description would seem more well thought out and not just a dropped point.
3) Speaking of characters, I would develop Fate and Chica more in the beginning of the story. How long had Mimiko known them? Why haven't people discussed their Glacian background? What do they look like?

So hopefully, you will continue with this. I'm so curious to see what happens. It has so much potential and I would hate to see you discouraged by the lack of reviews! Sometimes I feel that is what makes the difference between one chapter and many.
I can't wait to see what else you have cooked up for us readers! :)
6/11/2013 c1 ArtsyWoods
I LOVED IT UPDATE SOON! MEOW...im a kitty cat.
6/3/2013 c1 R2019
love it update soon please
5/23/2013 c1 5HeavyMetalRose
CONTINUE!CONTINUE!
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