for Carrot Top8/18/2016 c1 
11The-Red-Lip
Just a few things:
1)This is against the site's regulations.
2)Zayn is no longer part of one-direction
3)Your spacing is out-of-whack
4)The P.O.V's are confusing
5)This story sucks
11The-Red-LipJust a few things:
1)This is against the site's regulations.
2)Zayn is no longer part of one-direction
3)Your spacing is out-of-whack
4)The P.O.V's are confusing
5)This story sucks