for The Art of Charlie8/8/2020 c5 Guest
Update.
Please.
Update.
Please.
9/13/2019 c5 
3Eldritch.screech
This is possibly my favourite charmione piece on this site - effortlessly sensual and hot, superb on elegant characterization and romantic just enough!
3Eldritch.screechThis is possibly my favourite charmione piece on this site - effortlessly sensual and hot, superb on elegant characterization and romantic just enough!
7/16/2017 c5 Guest
Sad that it's not finished
Sad that it's not finished
12/15/2016 c5 7Hanable-13
id of hit ginny by now.. its jsut weird. and annoying.
nice story so far though, plzz continue
H }:)
7Hanable-13id of hit ginny by now.. its jsut weird. and annoying.
nice story so far though, plzz continue
H }:)
10/25/2014 c5 key
This is a great story but i wish that it had been continued :) x
This is a great story but i wish that it had been continued :) x
9/4/2014 c1 Guest
Just a reminder... PLEASE UPDATE THIS SOON.
Sorry but were all getting anxious for a new chapter. XD
Just a reminder... PLEASE UPDATE THIS SOON.
Sorry but were all getting anxious for a new chapter. XD
6/26/2014 c5 17Ms. Anthrop
What a lovely start to an interesting story. This is not a pairing that I normally read, and so it was nice to have a departure from what I'm used to. There are several things that I enjoy about this piece- I think that Hermione's voice is authentic, and young with being annoying or too innocent. You've written a girl turning into a sexual woman well. I also think that your characters have good chemistry, and I really like how Charlie's drawings are a gateway into other conversations... and events. This story from a mechanics perspective is also well done and easy to read.
That all being said, there are a couple of things that stand out to me. The first is the when- when is story taking place? How does it fit into the overall story arc of HP? You say that it's a worry free summer, but does that mean that Sir Voldibutt has been defeated? Were Ron and Hermione ever a couple? When departing from cannon, make sure set the stage so that we can slide into your story without worrying about the details.
Secondly, the story progressed a little fast for me- I think that you could have teased the chemistry out longer by stopping with them kissing (with lots of feels!) rather than just about going all the way the very first time anything happens. I'm not prude (I do enjoy a good PWP) by given Hermione's nature, I just don't see her jumping straight into things without worrying about consequences- both to the group dynamics, and for what it might mean for her personally. I like that you get Ginny's reaction to things (and yay for her not getting all freaked out by it) but is Hermione concerned with how Harry or Ron might react? Is she just looking for a summer fling, or Charlie BF material? There needs to be some more introspection for me to buy into her actions. It's Hermione's nature to be a worrier after all!
Bear in mind that I tend to write messy, emotionally dark stories, so that always plays into my reading of things. :) You may be aiming for something completely different style-wise! As I said, I think that overall, this piece is a very strong start, and I look forward to seeing where you go with it!
17Ms. AnthropWhat a lovely start to an interesting story. This is not a pairing that I normally read, and so it was nice to have a departure from what I'm used to. There are several things that I enjoy about this piece- I think that Hermione's voice is authentic, and young with being annoying or too innocent. You've written a girl turning into a sexual woman well. I also think that your characters have good chemistry, and I really like how Charlie's drawings are a gateway into other conversations... and events. This story from a mechanics perspective is also well done and easy to read.
That all being said, there are a couple of things that stand out to me. The first is the when- when is story taking place? How does it fit into the overall story arc of HP? You say that it's a worry free summer, but does that mean that Sir Voldibutt has been defeated? Were Ron and Hermione ever a couple? When departing from cannon, make sure set the stage so that we can slide into your story without worrying about the details.
Secondly, the story progressed a little fast for me- I think that you could have teased the chemistry out longer by stopping with them kissing (with lots of feels!) rather than just about going all the way the very first time anything happens. I'm not prude (I do enjoy a good PWP) by given Hermione's nature, I just don't see her jumping straight into things without worrying about consequences- both to the group dynamics, and for what it might mean for her personally. I like that you get Ginny's reaction to things (and yay for her not getting all freaked out by it) but is Hermione concerned with how Harry or Ron might react? Is she just looking for a summer fling, or Charlie BF material? There needs to be some more introspection for me to buy into her actions. It's Hermione's nature to be a worrier after all!
Bear in mind that I tend to write messy, emotionally dark stories, so that always plays into my reading of things. :) You may be aiming for something completely different style-wise! As I said, I think that overall, this piece is a very strong start, and I look forward to seeing where you go with it!
3/19/2014 c5 Guest
Please continue, very different to anything else I've read so far. I'm really enjoying it :)
Please continue, very different to anything else I've read so far. I'm really enjoying it :)
12/29/2013 c5 Edward's Life
Hey Black Boxed,
Just wanted to say "Hi!" And let you know that I found your story The Art of Charlie this morning. I'm loving it so far & can't wait to read more. While I'm waiting for you to post another chapter of this story I'll be checking out your profile. I want to see what other stories you have posted to it. I'm looking forward to reading other stories that you've written.
I hope you are able to post more of The Art of Charlie soon. But I completely understand that you have a real life to concentrate on & that you will update your stories as soon you can. Thank you for sharing your stories with the readers on . I hope you have a great week.
I am,
Edward's Life
Hey Black Boxed,
Just wanted to say "Hi!" And let you know that I found your story The Art of Charlie this morning. I'm loving it so far & can't wait to read more. While I'm waiting for you to post another chapter of this story I'll be checking out your profile. I want to see what other stories you have posted to it. I'm looking forward to reading other stories that you've written.
I hope you are able to post more of The Art of Charlie soon. But I completely understand that you have a real life to concentrate on & that you will update your stories as soon you can. Thank you for sharing your stories with the readers on . I hope you have a great week.
I am,
Edward's Life