for Snow Daze1/11/2014 c10 
6Winter Coma
I'm your biggest supporter? Never been called that before...Feel pretty happy, though.
As for that chapter, well, there's not much to say. I like the ending where they all go out for a teenage hangout. A nice, relaxing chapter that delves away from the drama is always a breath of fresh air.
Though the only problem I have is the introduction of Sophie's brother. You never alluded to Michael; you didn't even show that there was another person worried about Sophie during her three month disappearance except Willow. And Jenna being glued to Sophie's hip? You didn't allude to Sophie being close to anyone at the orphanage, though that I can ignore because, hey, orphanages aren't usually depicted as happy homes. But the Michael thing does irk me.
Well, whatever. Please update soon.
6Winter ComaI'm your biggest supporter? Never been called that before...Feel pretty happy, though.
As for that chapter, well, there's not much to say. I like the ending where they all go out for a teenage hangout. A nice, relaxing chapter that delves away from the drama is always a breath of fresh air.
Though the only problem I have is the introduction of Sophie's brother. You never alluded to Michael; you didn't even show that there was another person worried about Sophie during her three month disappearance except Willow. And Jenna being glued to Sophie's hip? You didn't allude to Sophie being close to anyone at the orphanage, though that I can ignore because, hey, orphanages aren't usually depicted as happy homes. But the Michael thing does irk me.
Well, whatever. Please update soon.
1/2/2014 c9 Guest
(This is Winter Coma, reviewing in the middle of the school day.) I would be doing this on my account, but my school's computer system won't let me log in. ): It's weird, because I read the last few chapters of this story at school with no problems...
Anyway, with the horrid events from last chapter, you did a really good job of expressing the grief Danny and Sophie must be feeling. Sophie would obviously be devastated and angry at herself for freezing in the crisis-even though being in shock during such an event is totally excusable. And Danny feeling detached is another common aftereffect, especially when facing death. And how the two of them interacted after the event was extremely believable and realistic, or as realistic as it can get with two halfas.
All in all, another great chapter.
(This is Winter Coma, reviewing in the middle of the school day.) I would be doing this on my account, but my school's computer system won't let me log in. ): It's weird, because I read the last few chapters of this story at school with no problems...
Anyway, with the horrid events from last chapter, you did a really good job of expressing the grief Danny and Sophie must be feeling. Sophie would obviously be devastated and angry at herself for freezing in the crisis-even though being in shock during such an event is totally excusable. And Danny feeling detached is another common aftereffect, especially when facing death. And how the two of them interacted after the event was extremely believable and realistic, or as realistic as it can get with two halfas.
All in all, another great chapter.
5/25/2013 c4 6Winter Coma
I can sort of see Sam acting like this, and yet I can't. It's hard to explain. Yes, Sam would get annoyed after Willow badgering them for months and then finally snap, but the way she talked to Danny was a little uncalled for. Yes, I am a bit of a DxS fan, so my opinion may seem a little biased, but I can spot unfairness from a mile away.
Anyway, good chapter and update soon.
6Winter ComaI can sort of see Sam acting like this, and yet I can't. It's hard to explain. Yes, Sam would get annoyed after Willow badgering them for months and then finally snap, but the way she talked to Danny was a little uncalled for. Yes, I am a bit of a DxS fan, so my opinion may seem a little biased, but I can spot unfairness from a mile away.
Anyway, good chapter and update soon.
5/23/2013 c3 Winter Coma
I like Sophie's sense of humor. A little shy but totally honest. Compared to the witty one-liners other OCs have, it's rather fresh.
Willow has mostly redeemed herself in my eyes. Caring so much for a friend and even bugging Danny for two months for not rescuing her is pretty damn loyal. But I wonder how Sophie will react when she finds out that Willow was in on the prank.
Update soon!
I like Sophie's sense of humor. A little shy but totally honest. Compared to the witty one-liners other OCs have, it's rather fresh.
Willow has mostly redeemed herself in my eyes. Caring so much for a friend and even bugging Danny for two months for not rescuing her is pretty damn loyal. But I wonder how Sophie will react when she finds out that Willow was in on the prank.
Update soon!
5/21/2013 c1 PrennCooder
you might want to mention more about what's going on with danny in the summary, thank you :)
you might want to mention more about what's going on with danny in the summary, thank you :)
5/21/2013 c2 6Winter Coma
So Willow was in on the joke. Methinks she's not a very good friend, though she did make up for it by freaking out and looking for her later.
So Sophie has to kill Danny Phantom; now that's interesting. Okay, I'm hooked. Please update soon!
6Winter ComaSo Willow was in on the joke. Methinks she's not a very good friend, though she did make up for it by freaking out and looking for her later.
So Sophie has to kill Danny Phantom; now that's interesting. Okay, I'm hooked. Please update soon!
5/20/2013 c1 howls-spirited-lab rat
This is a really great story! I love it alot! Please keep writing!
This is a really great story! I love it alot! Please keep writing!
5/20/2013 c1 6Winter Coma
Okay, this is a really good first chapter. OC has a crush on Danny, but I can deal with that. Also, she's a wallflower, which makes me like her. This I can deal with.
My only problem is your use of "raven-haired." This is actually bad grammar; the proper forms would be "hair like a raven" or "hair as dark as raven feathers" or something along those lines. Oh, and just in case: do not use the word "orbs" when describing eyes. Orbs are plants or spheres. Eyes are not.
All in all, decent chapter. I'll stick with this, see where it goes.
6Winter ComaOkay, this is a really good first chapter. OC has a crush on Danny, but I can deal with that. Also, she's a wallflower, which makes me like her. This I can deal with.
My only problem is your use of "raven-haired." This is actually bad grammar; the proper forms would be "hair like a raven" or "hair as dark as raven feathers" or something along those lines. Oh, and just in case: do not use the word "orbs" when describing eyes. Orbs are plants or spheres. Eyes are not.
All in all, decent chapter. I'll stick with this, see where it goes.