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12/2/2013 c14 7Eagle12
Damn and it was just getting good, can't wait to see Minato get whats comin to him.
12/2/2013 c14 12Gold Testament
*bonks with Mallet* Naruto makes women AND men want him.
12/1/2013 c13 Guest
Your a Horny little fucker arent you? Geez. I just skimed over the story and saw so many sex scenes. Seriously stop watching so much porn.
Oh and the story isnt bad. A little to dark for my tastes. That and you haveing naruto bang ALL the girls. Thats just to much. specialy when the sex scenes are not even written well.
11/25/2013 c13 Justin
Interesting
11/25/2013 c7 Guest
Great Story so far!
11/25/2013 c5 Saligia666
no
11/17/2013 c13 GetRektNuub
damn I wanna see an update hehe great chapter and can't wait to see minato get his ass handed to him by naruto
11/14/2013 c4 T-B-R
Nooooo, I like Naruto's Red hair, make it go back!
11/11/2013 c2 6IncandescentOne
OK, I'm looking forward to reading more of this and it's generally well written... BUT

Consciousness - the mind
Conscience - a sense of right or wrong

Why time skip 2 years forward, then flashback 1 year backwards 100 words later?
Why not... skip 1 year, then skip another 1 year? In order!

This is a pet hate of mine but this is the worst example of it I've seen for a long time.. O_o

Still, on the whole very well written XD
11/10/2013 c8 1AscendedHumanity
not that i have an issue with multiple lovers i have read enough o that stuff, the development is just way to fast with no explanation, if you gave some explanation for the quick attraction maybe
11/8/2013 c13 ImDarthVaderModaFuka
Great Chapter. But Minato is an ass, I hope he dies soon!
11/1/2013 c13 Prime Sedarys
Cool story
10/31/2013 c13 randomperson5
to be honest, i dont think this story should become a massive harem. In my opinion it is a distraction from the actual story when a harem gets to big.
10/31/2013 c13 Ints
Hopefully you wont take the rote many fic authors that try to write 'dark naruto' story fall for. That being completely ignoring the abuse suffered during a persons most formative years and turning Naruto into saint like martyr the first instance sorry is heard from former tormentors. Those kind of stories really rub me the wrong way.

As far as the harem is concerned, the smaller the better since too big of a harem serves only to muddle up the story.
10/30/2013 c5 1Vengeful Astartes
Thankyou for clarifying some thing about "Dark Naruto" with your AN at the end of this chapter, cleared a few things up for me. Loved the lemons in this chapter, looking forward to seeing more of that lol XD

Dark naruto is pretty awesome in this story, howecer im wondering how and when he is going to leave the village that he hates.
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