
9/20/2013 c6 screenfun2312
Either get a Beta, or stop writing this crap. Reading this story gives me brain cancer. Seriously.
If you want to improve your English, fine, take lessons, but dont hurt the world with your story.
Either get a Beta, or stop writing this crap. Reading this story gives me brain cancer. Seriously.
If you want to improve your English, fine, take lessons, but dont hurt the world with your story.
9/19/2013 c11 ImDarthVaderModaFuka
I really enjoyed this chapter. The lemon was great, and more what the girls did to have sex with Naruto.
The organization of Naruto was a cool and original idea. Keep it up. Until the next update.
I really enjoyed this chapter. The lemon was great, and more what the girls did to have sex with Naruto.
The organization of Naruto was a cool and original idea. Keep it up. Until the next update.
9/19/2013 c11 Guest
Awesome update. Nice lemon.
And Gato is a pussy. Oh yeah, i can't wait to see what happens in Uzu.
Awesome update. Nice lemon.
And Gato is a pussy. Oh yeah, i can't wait to see what happens in Uzu.
9/19/2013 c11 AnimeA55Kicker
Awesome translation with very few errors for a not betaed story. Can't wait for kushina to come back to life. Minato is a dead man.
Awesome translation with very few errors for a not betaed story. Can't wait for kushina to come back to life. Minato is a dead man.
9/19/2013 c11
1firetemplar415
Yep add tsunade...but make it believable...pls.
Lol gato is such a boot licker.

Yep add tsunade...but make it believable...pls.
Lol gato is such a boot licker.
9/19/2013 c11 sabery
What can you tell more about his organization and what him want to use his organization . Well Tsunade would be a great asseat to his harem and plans
What can you tell more about his organization and what him want to use his organization . Well Tsunade would be a great asseat to his harem and plans
9/17/2013 c10
2Ashabird
...love it.
So realistic, so detailed that its almost like its a part of the real story, not a fanfic. Please keep updating I can't wait to see what happens when naruto meets garra

...love it.
So realistic, so detailed that its almost like its a part of the real story, not a fanfic. Please keep updating I can't wait to see what happens when naruto meets garra
9/14/2013 c7 Guest
I swear that if Naruto is forced to forgive that son of a...
Btw, you translated your story ? Damn, that's a good job.
I swear that if Naruto is forced to forgive that son of a...
Btw, you translated your story ? Damn, that's a good job.
9/13/2013 c10 ImDarthVaderModaFuka
Cool Chapter. Waiting for the next one, and tell to your beta reader to recover soon.
Cool Chapter. Waiting for the next one, and tell to your beta reader to recover soon.
9/12/2013 c9 Ski-en
Awesome story though some of your lines are abit confusing and incomplete, seriously I don't know if you review your work or not cause you need to see if the sentences make sense or not.. And in chapter 4 during Naruto and Lee's fight when Lee removed his weights, Naruto's surprised by his speed and say's that even he's not that fast; first of all its known that Lee with weight off his speed is around Mid-High Jounin and when he opened his Gates even the Jounin's have a hard time, so saying that Naruto wasn't that fast was kind of disappointing I know Naruto's been ignoring his Taijutsu's but he should have been able to match that..
Awesome story though some of your lines are abit confusing and incomplete, seriously I don't know if you review your work or not cause you need to see if the sentences make sense or not.. And in chapter 4 during Naruto and Lee's fight when Lee removed his weights, Naruto's surprised by his speed and say's that even he's not that fast; first of all its known that Lee with weight off his speed is around Mid-High Jounin and when he opened his Gates even the Jounin's have a hard time, so saying that Naruto wasn't that fast was kind of disappointing I know Naruto's been ignoring his Taijutsu's but he should have been able to match that..
9/9/2013 c10
1RINNESHARINGAN
awesome cchapter man...read the story again...i would love to see how naruto learns to use sub elements and which all can he use?

awesome cchapter man...read the story again...i would love to see how naruto learns to use sub elements and which all can he use?
9/9/2013 c10 Delta3950
Tell your Beta I hope she gets better I know what it's like having a broken limb(except in my case I was doing this stamina exercise Killers I think is what they're called, in case I've got the name wrong the exercise starts like this with a group of ten the one in back races to the front and sets a pace that the others have to follow while the next one in back has to rush to the front of the line and so on and so forth. I was in the middle of said exercise when the jerk behind me deliberately gave me a "flat Tire" I've always believed I had a fractured wrist but since my arm up to inches or so above my elbow had to be in a cast it's possible my forearm {Ulna I think is the bones name} is what got fractured{I'm told a fracture is still a break so yea} and they are no bloody fun not in the least.
Tell your Beta I hope she gets better I know what it's like having a broken limb(except in my case I was doing this stamina exercise Killers I think is what they're called, in case I've got the name wrong the exercise starts like this with a group of ten the one in back races to the front and sets a pace that the others have to follow while the next one in back has to rush to the front of the line and so on and so forth. I was in the middle of said exercise when the jerk behind me deliberately gave me a "flat Tire" I've always believed I had a fractured wrist but since my arm up to inches or so above my elbow had to be in a cast it's possible my forearm {Ulna I think is the bones name} is what got fractured{I'm told a fracture is still a break so yea} and they are no bloody fun not in the least.
9/8/2013 c10
6The Faceless Wordsmith
I love it Naruto the saboteur now? A perfect way to end the chapter with the clone insubordination with another in comical fear. Ready for the next chapter.

I love it Naruto the saboteur now? A perfect way to end the chapter with the clone insubordination with another in comical fear. Ready for the next chapter.