for A Demon in the Shadows6/25/2013 c6 Delta3950
Can you think of any bashing names for Sakura? While I like her a little(namely her exotic hair) she is nothing more than a bitch who'd more than likely spread her legs if the Uchiha wanted her to. Well Sasuke is called Sasgay in most stories , while Sakura is called the Pink Haired Banshee while her mom is called Banshee Queen, I doubt calling Sakura "Suckura" would sound very catchy and Forehead and Billboard Brow are over used maybe Skankura since she basically is such.
As for this story with Lee I can honestly say that it was interesting and Lee is too nice a guy same with Naruto in the Canon(course Naruto's such an idiot too) I mean seriously look at how he spams the Shadow Clone jutsu and he didn't even learn of its unique capabilities till around the Sora Ark I mean seriously come on. And Lee well I don't really blame him for being so Bubbly maybe change him a little more during the Chunin Exams allowing him to have his first kill(preferably Dosu). While Choji fights Zaku, and Ino fights Kin, actually no let Sakura fight Kin since it'll be one sided again. As for Ino I'm torn between suggesting her to fight Tenten, or Temari.
While I am jumping the gun pretty seriously by thinking about the Chunin Exams I can't help it but I came up with a way for Naruto and Kurama to take back his chakra from Arashi, you know those Chakra Leeches Akado Yoroi and then lard ass Jirobo? Well if Naruto can create a seal that when utilized with a little Kurama's chakra will make a kind a skill steal seal allowing the theft of certain techniques as long as they're not Kekkei Genkai.
Can you think of any bashing names for Sakura? While I like her a little(namely her exotic hair) she is nothing more than a bitch who'd more than likely spread her legs if the Uchiha wanted her to. Well Sasuke is called Sasgay in most stories , while Sakura is called the Pink Haired Banshee while her mom is called Banshee Queen, I doubt calling Sakura "Suckura" would sound very catchy and Forehead and Billboard Brow are over used maybe Skankura since she basically is such.
As for this story with Lee I can honestly say that it was interesting and Lee is too nice a guy same with Naruto in the Canon(course Naruto's such an idiot too) I mean seriously look at how he spams the Shadow Clone jutsu and he didn't even learn of its unique capabilities till around the Sora Ark I mean seriously come on. And Lee well I don't really blame him for being so Bubbly maybe change him a little more during the Chunin Exams allowing him to have his first kill(preferably Dosu). While Choji fights Zaku, and Ino fights Kin, actually no let Sakura fight Kin since it'll be one sided again. As for Ino I'm torn between suggesting her to fight Tenten, or Temari.
While I am jumping the gun pretty seriously by thinking about the Chunin Exams I can't help it but I came up with a way for Naruto and Kurama to take back his chakra from Arashi, you know those Chakra Leeches Akado Yoroi and then lard ass Jirobo? Well if Naruto can create a seal that when utilized with a little Kurama's chakra will make a kind a skill steal seal allowing the theft of certain techniques as long as they're not Kekkei Genkai.
6/24/2013 c6 KHARAKI TAKAN
Nice story.
The Rinnegan is always active you don't turn it on and off.
Kushina can't be in the harem because she is dead.
Nice story.
The Rinnegan is always active you don't turn it on and off.
Kushina can't be in the harem because she is dead.
6/24/2013 c6 DemonOfThePlains
alright... this is a pretty good story... but your translation isn't all that great. i would like to offer my assistance in correcting your english. if you are interested in having me assist with your english spelling and grammar pm me.(my native language is english so conversation in that would be preferred however i can use a translator to communicate in spanish for you)
bien ... esta es una historia bastante buena ... pero la traducción no es tan grande. me gustaría ofrecer mi ayuda en la corrección de su Inglés. si usted está interesado en que me ayudo con la ortografía y la gramática Inglés pm me (mi lengua materna es el Inglés para conversación en la que se prefería sin embargo, puedo usar un traductor para comunicarse en español para ti).
alright... this is a pretty good story... but your translation isn't all that great. i would like to offer my assistance in correcting your english. if you are interested in having me assist with your english spelling and grammar pm me.(my native language is english so conversation in that would be preferred however i can use a translator to communicate in spanish for you)
bien ... esta es una historia bastante buena ... pero la traducción no es tan grande. me gustaría ofrecer mi ayuda en la corrección de su Inglés. si usted está interesado en que me ayudo con la ortografía y la gramática Inglés pm me (mi lengua materna es el Inglés para conversación en la que se prefería sin embargo, puedo usar un traductor para comunicarse en español para ti).
6/24/2013 c6 Guest
Have naruto secretly keep mikito alive and make him rape her every so often.
Have naruto secretly keep mikito alive and make him rape her every so often.
6/24/2013 c6 
1firetemplar415
Me gusta su cuento.
Si necesitas un traductor o beta reader yo te pudiera ayudar si usted quisiera.
Sigua con este cuento fabuloso.
1firetemplar415Me gusta su cuento.
Si necesitas un traductor o beta reader yo te pudiera ayudar si usted quisiera.
Sigua con este cuento fabuloso.
6/24/2013 c6 Guest
supert history
supert history
6/24/2013 c3 Guest
Are you goung to make mikoto uchia sex slave to naruto?
Are you goung to make mikoto uchia sex slave to naruto?
6/24/2013 c1 Guest
Minato is such a idiot. Bash him hard
Minato is such a idiot. Bash him hard
6/24/2013 c1 OnlineImhotep
This is good for a person who didn't grow up with the language.
It's actually better than most people who do grow up with the language.
This is good for a person who didn't grow up with the language.
It's actually better than most people who do grow up with the language.
6/18/2013 c5 Delta3950
No, I don't mind I think that would be very hot indeed and also with Kushina in this story assuming Naruto can perfect the Kuchiose: Edo Tensei he can use it during his 2.5-3 year training trip to revive his mother, hell he can even revive Mito(and assuming she was a good person I don't remember, Mikoto as well), hey here's a though revive Rin as well as Neji's dad Hizashi and maybe Hinata's mother too. There's a lot of people who can be revived in this story.
No, I don't mind I think that would be very hot indeed and also with Kushina in this story assuming Naruto can perfect the Kuchiose: Edo Tensei he can use it during his 2.5-3 year training trip to revive his mother, hell he can even revive Mito(and assuming she was a good person I don't remember, Mikoto as well), hey here's a though revive Rin as well as Neji's dad Hizashi and maybe Hinata's mother too. There's a lot of people who can be revived in this story.
6/17/2013 c5 1Ashcoort the Ash Creator
i dont really mind if you make a yuri scene in your future parts or not this story is anyway awesome and lemons are just a little special for me if it is a nice story and i love darc naruto fanfics so keep on going with your story and it would be awesome if you would make another dark naruto story!
1Ashcoort the Ash Creatori dont really mind if you make a yuri scene in your future parts or not this story is anyway awesome and lemons are just a little special for me if it is a nice story and i love darc naruto fanfics so keep on going with your story and it would be awesome if you would make another dark naruto story!
6/17/2013 c5 Kincadame
I vote "no", I also think that Kushi-chan should also be in the btw who else is going to be in the harem? I think this naruto would get along very well with some of the sound girls like Tayuya, Kin, maybe even Karin. Anyway good story man and keep up the good work
I vote "no", I also think that Kushi-chan should also be in the btw who else is going to be in the harem? I think this naruto would get along very well with some of the sound girls like Tayuya, Kin, maybe even Karin. Anyway good story man and keep up the good work