for A Demon in the Shadows6/9/2013 c4 Delta3950
I'm no judge on translations since English is my prime language with very little words in other languages. Might I suggest finding people who enjoy righting lemons and get their assistance with the Lemon plus no offense but don't you think that a Lemon between two 13 year olds is a bit "loli"?
I'm no judge on translations since English is my prime language with very little words in other languages. Might I suggest finding people who enjoy righting lemons and get their assistance with the Lemon plus no offense but don't you think that a Lemon between two 13 year olds is a bit "loli"?
6/9/2013 c3 Delta3950
I got a crazy suggestion for this story it's something I'll be doing in my own story later on. An OC of mine has a unique ability that allows him to watch a targets memories(same glowing hand trick as Akado Yoroi when he draws the chakra from his victims, the only difference are the coloration instead of blue chakra it's pale red almost a pink when he's drawing the memories and he can share said memories or his own the same way only the chakra color is white instead. Well my suggestion is using a sealing array that will paralyze the victim, while a second array is on the attackers hand, this second array will do two things first it absorbs the victims chakra slowly expanding the users chakra, and the second thing is that it steals their knowledge, jutsu etc. and in Kurama's case, well it'll enable him to take all of his chakra back.
I got a crazy suggestion for this story it's something I'll be doing in my own story later on. An OC of mine has a unique ability that allows him to watch a targets memories(same glowing hand trick as Akado Yoroi when he draws the chakra from his victims, the only difference are the coloration instead of blue chakra it's pale red almost a pink when he's drawing the memories and he can share said memories or his own the same way only the chakra color is white instead. Well my suggestion is using a sealing array that will paralyze the victim, while a second array is on the attackers hand, this second array will do two things first it absorbs the victims chakra slowly expanding the users chakra, and the second thing is that it steals their knowledge, jutsu etc. and in Kurama's case, well it'll enable him to take all of his chakra back.
6/1/2013 c1 
1God-ShadowEx100
i hope you realize that if you claim Naruto is Dark and Evil and will kill everyone in the village and then destroy said village then you had better make it happen.
if Naruto does not destroy said village and kill every man, woman, and child within the village then this story is not a real Dark Naruto story.
i refuse to read a piece of trash story were claims that he will kill everyone but ends up only being a limp dick little pussy ass bitch who can't back up words with actions, i refuse to read this story if Naruto becomes a weapon or end s up forgiven people who deserve to be killed.
1God-ShadowEx100i hope you realize that if you claim Naruto is Dark and Evil and will kill everyone in the village and then destroy said village then you had better make it happen.
if Naruto does not destroy said village and kill every man, woman, and child within the village then this story is not a real Dark Naruto story.
i refuse to read a piece of trash story were claims that he will kill everyone but ends up only being a limp dick little pussy ass bitch who can't back up words with actions, i refuse to read this story if Naruto becomes a weapon or end s up forgiven people who deserve to be killed.
5/31/2013 c3 GreyMan19
They are just digging themselves a larger grave for Naruto. Hopefully he'll lighten up with non-Konoha people. It would be interesting to have Kushina, if she ever comes back, in the harem just to spite Minato and what he did. Wonder how Itachi will react wether he knows the truth or not of the massacre. Any idea and age when shit hits the fan for Konoha?
They are just digging themselves a larger grave for Naruto. Hopefully he'll lighten up with non-Konoha people. It would be interesting to have Kushina, if she ever comes back, in the harem just to spite Minato and what he did. Wonder how Itachi will react wether he knows the truth or not of the massacre. Any idea and age when shit hits the fan for Konoha?
5/31/2013 c3 aascdvfvifrbpgrfbr
Title: A Demon in the Shadows.
Summary: Just one bad decision... Just one left Naruto hated. It also left him prey to the Roots that lurked within the shadows. Dark/Root/Rin'negan Naruto Harem (No Hinata or Sakura), Sasuka Bashing and possibly lemons.
*You summary has Naruto's name about five times I think.
There you go. A better summary and corrected title for free to help you attract a few more readers :)
Also ANBU, Demon Brat, Root are all titles and so they should have capital letters.
Every little helps.
Title: A Demon in the Shadows.
Summary: Just one bad decision... Just one left Naruto hated. It also left him prey to the Roots that lurked within the shadows. Dark/Root/Rin'negan Naruto Harem (No Hinata or Sakura), Sasuka Bashing and possibly lemons.
*You summary has Naruto's name about five times I think.
There you go. A better summary and corrected title for free to help you attract a few more readers :)
Also ANBU, Demon Brat, Root are all titles and so they should have capital letters.
Every little helps.
5/24/2013 c2 dark
Have Mikoto, Kushina, Hinata, and Konan in the harem.
Have Mikoto, Kushina, Hinata, and Konan in the harem.
5/24/2013 c2 Guest
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5/24/2013 c2 ChibakuNaruto
great story. i always like Dark Naruto and to be train in Root (danzo). having him doing the Uchiha Massacre is a bonus. keep it up. update soon
great story. i always like Dark Naruto and to be train in Root (danzo). having him doing the Uchiha Massacre is a bonus. keep it up. update soon