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11/9/2013 c5 27NeverDreamsOfMe
Oh, I loved how you trained Michael in the last chapter. It felt just like the game :3

Much better in this chapter, in breaking up your paragraphs.

Keep it up! I look forward to the next chapter :3

- Dreams
10/10/2013 c3 NeverDreamsOfMe
Interesting story you have so far! It's more important than ever for the Assassins to work in secret here, and you've captured their cautiousness and the world of 1984 perfectly. Michael's developed well already, and your other characters are great.

You've got multiple misspellings throughout your story; make sure you go through spell-check or maybe have someone go over it and help you edit. Remember to also start a new paragraph every time someone new speaks.

I can't wait to see where you go with this; I hope you update soon!

- Dreams
5/27/2013 c1 3Aperture Science Turret
This is starting off really well, I love the story idea so far and look forward to the next chapters. I just suggest rereading your work a day after you've wrote it in order to catch any spelling mistakes, it helps.

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