for Shattered Blade10/23/2024 c15 Non-Euclidean
Where’d Karasuba go for the later part where Shirou’s grabbing the cargo? I’d think after a Black Key straight to her ‘only thing you’re good for’ like almost suffering an instant defeat she’d never let up on being close to him. Also, is it weird I found her rampage and inner thoughts during it cute or was that intentional? Even now, in this situation she’s in denial, isn’t she?
I was kind of expecting Haihane to break to break from all the rejections eventually, but man she is glorious at destroying things with words here. She keeps having moments that make me go, ‘oh, poor Haihane.’ But then move on without internalizing the emotional hell she’s slowly being put through… ah, poor Haihane…
Moving on, Rin is not going to ever accept this new situation, especially once she realizes what Shirou has failed to grasp about his own part in things. Double especially because of how she got introduced to the other parts of this stupidity. …well, she might come to appreciate Akitzu a little, for keeping the idiot alive at least…
Oh yeah, poor Akitzu too. Keeps working herself to death and barely getting praised for it, let alone anything she really wants. Also, is she outgrowing the others because she’s a scrap or because sekirei have some sort pushing past the limit thing here? Because this is the second time she went to her limit and got stronger for it…
I know Karasuba sort of did too from the notes, but that felt like something she was already capable of. Oh, wait! Maybe they get stronger from the emotional trauma/outburst side of things and Haihane gained the power to psychically discover the most damaging thing to insult someone with!
Anyway, I liked it until that end bit in the ship because I was distracted by wondering what happened to Karasuba while Shirou found/got exploded by Combustion Man. Oh, and the part after it was done well too. Obviously not as good as the apartment scene but still a pretty good and in character reveal/scheme.
Keep it up!
Where’d Karasuba go for the later part where Shirou’s grabbing the cargo? I’d think after a Black Key straight to her ‘only thing you’re good for’ like almost suffering an instant defeat she’d never let up on being close to him. Also, is it weird I found her rampage and inner thoughts during it cute or was that intentional? Even now, in this situation she’s in denial, isn’t she?
I was kind of expecting Haihane to break to break from all the rejections eventually, but man she is glorious at destroying things with words here. She keeps having moments that make me go, ‘oh, poor Haihane.’ But then move on without internalizing the emotional hell she’s slowly being put through… ah, poor Haihane…
Moving on, Rin is not going to ever accept this new situation, especially once she realizes what Shirou has failed to grasp about his own part in things. Double especially because of how she got introduced to the other parts of this stupidity. …well, she might come to appreciate Akitzu a little, for keeping the idiot alive at least…
Oh yeah, poor Akitzu too. Keeps working herself to death and barely getting praised for it, let alone anything she really wants. Also, is she outgrowing the others because she’s a scrap or because sekirei have some sort pushing past the limit thing here? Because this is the second time she went to her limit and got stronger for it…
I know Karasuba sort of did too from the notes, but that felt like something she was already capable of. Oh, wait! Maybe they get stronger from the emotional trauma/outburst side of things and Haihane gained the power to psychically discover the most damaging thing to insult someone with!
Anyway, I liked it until that end bit in the ship because I was distracted by wondering what happened to Karasuba while Shirou found/got exploded by Combustion Man. Oh, and the part after it was done well too. Obviously not as good as the apartment scene but still a pretty good and in character reveal/scheme.
Keep it up!
10/23/2024 c15 Of the Worst 3
The line of Emiya is cursed by cruel fate...
The line of Emiya is cursed by cruel fate...
10/23/2024 c15 Guest
Great chapter! The only other feedback I have is that I lost track of Karasuba at the end (was she silent and near Shirou, was she covering the exit of the cargo hold, did they split up, etc.).
Great chapter! The only other feedback I have is that I lost track of Karasuba at the end (was she silent and near Shirou, was she covering the exit of the cargo hold, did they split up, etc.).
10/24/2024 c15 
7NightBringer325
I feel both Minaka and the unnamed Magus are not giving Shirou enough credit when it comes to digging himself into trouble and the dude should have destroyed the crate cause now he's going to be on the warpath in MBI especially as they went after something very closely related to the Grail War as far as he's concerned.
7NightBringer325I feel both Minaka and the unnamed Magus are not giving Shirou enough credit when it comes to digging himself into trouble and the dude should have destroyed the crate cause now he's going to be on the warpath in MBI especially as they went after something very closely related to the Grail War as far as he's concerned.
10/24/2024 c15 ImNotAWeeb64101
Ive been loving this story so much! I loved the squabble Rin had with the girls and hope she makes an appearance at some point. Cant wait to see what happens next!
Ive been loving this story so much! I loved the squabble Rin had with the girls and hope she makes an appearance at some point. Cant wait to see what happens next!
10/22/2024 c15 E
Dope chapter.
I await more, as always.
Dope chapter.
I await more, as always.
10/23/2024 c15 kyurega
Great chapter. However, I am concerned about the rewrite project going on rn. So you’re making a rewrite at the same time that you update the original? How’s that work? Are you writing these chapters with the rewrite in mind? Are you gonna end up rewriting even these more recent chapters? Are these chapters just gonna get folded into the rewrite fic?
Great chapter. However, I am concerned about the rewrite project going on rn. So you’re making a rewrite at the same time that you update the original? How’s that work? Are you writing these chapters with the rewrite in mind? Are you gonna end up rewriting even these more recent chapters? Are these chapters just gonna get folded into the rewrite fic?
10/23/2024 c15 Temsen
"That was… less than ideal, but I could salvage this."
He could fuel a new Reality Marble with that with that delusion, lol.
Things are.. happening. And Shirou's got only scraps of information it feels like.
"That was… less than ideal, but I could salvage this."
He could fuel a new Reality Marble with that with that delusion, lol.
Things are.. happening. And Shirou's got only scraps of information it feels like.
10/22/2024 c15 ArashiNokitsune
safe to say things got more worse and more complicated and considering the Fate series how long before something to do with magic backfires and something borderline apocalyptic drags everyone in...
safe to say things got more worse and more complicated and considering the Fate series how long before something to do with magic backfires and something borderline apocalyptic drags everyone in...
10/22/2024 c15 1SentinalSlice
Why didn’t Shirou take the Zouken book? I imagine he was one of the ones who dismantled the place in Fuyuki.
The binding to oneself mechanic probably has some interesting effect when combined with the fact that Sekirei bind themselves to their Ashikabi via a kiss. Is he planning on getting Sekirei or something?
Its also a bit similar to how the Matou required Sakura to get Bodily fluids to survive as well.
I think it’s funny that they don’t think Shirou’s “magic”/magecraft is real. When’s he’s now just revealed to them that Vampires exist too. But they are thinking too condescendingly, that all the strangeness on Earth had to come from them, when they are completely wrong.
It’s interesting that this magus seemed to think that he could take on Shirou, I guess it just goes to show that UBW is still hidden from everyone.
I was really happy to see Rin actually get some time in this chapter.
1SentinalSliceWhy didn’t Shirou take the Zouken book? I imagine he was one of the ones who dismantled the place in Fuyuki.
The binding to oneself mechanic probably has some interesting effect when combined with the fact that Sekirei bind themselves to their Ashikabi via a kiss. Is he planning on getting Sekirei or something?
Its also a bit similar to how the Matou required Sakura to get Bodily fluids to survive as well.
I think it’s funny that they don’t think Shirou’s “magic”/magecraft is real. When’s he’s now just revealed to them that Vampires exist too. But they are thinking too condescendingly, that all the strangeness on Earth had to come from them, when they are completely wrong.
It’s interesting that this magus seemed to think that he could take on Shirou, I guess it just goes to show that UBW is still hidden from everyone.
I was really happy to see Rin actually get some time in this chapter.