for Shattered Blade6/12/2013 c3 
3Bigreader in The Omniverse
as I let it. let it what? fly is the missing word hear.
Good tastes she says. Good taste not tastes
ect me, I think. Maybe she was actin gin her own defense?
Ichimaru Gin? what are you doing in this series? this isn't a bleach crossover.
acting in her own defense?
This chapter wasn't so bad. It maybe could have flowed smoother, some of the language was phrased in a awkward or strange way but other than that it was mostly good.
3Bigreader in The Omniverseas I let it. let it what? fly is the missing word hear.
Good tastes she says. Good taste not tastes
ect me, I think. Maybe she was actin gin her own defense?
Ichimaru Gin? what are you doing in this series? this isn't a bleach crossover.
acting in her own defense?
This chapter wasn't so bad. It maybe could have flowed smoother, some of the language was phrased in a awkward or strange way but other than that it was mostly good.
6/12/2013 c3 lazyguy90
Cool.
Glad Shirou managed to find Akitsu first.
I quite liked the chapter. Sure it's close to In Flight, but it's already different enough to stand on its own.
Keep up the good work.
Cool.
Glad Shirou managed to find Akitsu first.
I quite liked the chapter. Sure it's close to In Flight, but it's already different enough to stand on its own.
Keep up the good work.
6/12/2013 c2 5Orchamus
I rather enjoy Shirou and Kara's interaction, seems rather friendly in an exasperating sort of way.
5OrchamusI rather enjoy Shirou and Kara's interaction, seems rather friendly in an exasperating sort of way.
6/10/2013 c2 the one
love this good work
love this good work
6/11/2013 c2 FallDownYourMind
in just two chapters you've set things up really well, I am really looking forward to reading the next chapter, just curious, will karasuba be shirou's sekirei? because that would be an interesting partnership to witness.
in just two chapters you've set things up really well, I am really looking forward to reading the next chapter, just curious, will karasuba be shirou's sekirei? because that would be an interesting partnership to witness.
6/8/2013 c2 darklord
good god i love this give me more
all so i like your karasuba shes hard to do well
good god i love this give me more
all so i like your karasuba shes hard to do well
6/9/2013 c2 Wargamer08
I'd like to see more of this. Shirou as an outsider looking in could be very interesting.
I'd like to see more of this. Shirou as an outsider looking in could be very interesting.
6/8/2013 c2 voidblade6
awesome! anyways like I said at least as good as in flight though I like the premise better... Your writing is better and you seem to be able to move the plot along with each chapter... Anyways please update soon!
awesome! anyways like I said at least as good as in flight though I like the premise better... Your writing is better and you seem to be able to move the plot along with each chapter... Anyways please update soon!
6/6/2013 c2 Skullders
Nice chapter.
Nice chapter.
6/5/2013 c2 Guest
Good so far.
So, who is Shirou going to wing?
Good so far.
So, who is Shirou going to wing?