for Naruto On Board12/20/2020 c2 Dissapointed
What is this shit?
So the MC is basically just an unimportant observer who saves the crew when they are in a pinch but don't really fight?
What is this shit about honor? Letting your enemy regain his bearing and wait for him to 'get a second wind'? Complaining about Arlong trying to throw Luffy into the water...
Author, I know that brain cells are fresh out of stock but... Naruto is a NINJA, ya know? I hope you are not retarded to a degree you don't comprehend what that means.
Ridiculous shit, this story.
What is this shit?
So the MC is basically just an unimportant observer who saves the crew when they are in a pinch but don't really fight?
What is this shit about honor? Letting your enemy regain his bearing and wait for him to 'get a second wind'? Complaining about Arlong trying to throw Luffy into the water...
Author, I know that brain cells are fresh out of stock but... Naruto is a NINJA, ya know? I hope you are not retarded to a degree you don't comprehend what that means.
Ridiculous shit, this story.
12/6/2020 c2 ChaseTheSoul
so you basically want to nerf him, so he isn't really naruto. he's an original character resembling naruto
so you basically want to nerf him, so he isn't really naruto. he's an original character resembling naruto
11/6/2020 c3 luffy1996
Making Naruto already have a fight against Jimbei under his belt doesn't make much sense in your lore of him combined with your Author notes. You revealed him as the Greatest bounty hunter in the East Blue (used to be Zoro's title but whatever), but then you have him challenge one of the most notorious Pirates in the Grandline who was considered a 250 million belli bounty before becoming a Warlord. Naruto getting a few hits in would be shocking enough as you said preAlabasta is fodder to him, but actually managing to put up a fight would mean Naruto's potential threat level is atleast 200 million belli.
Making Naruto already have a fight against Jimbei under his belt doesn't make much sense in your lore of him combined with your Author notes. You revealed him as the Greatest bounty hunter in the East Blue (used to be Zoro's title but whatever), but then you have him challenge one of the most notorious Pirates in the Grandline who was considered a 250 million belli bounty before becoming a Warlord. Naruto getting a few hits in would be shocking enough as you said preAlabasta is fodder to him, but actually managing to put up a fight would mean Naruto's potential threat level is atleast 200 million belli.
11/3/2020 c24 
8Cloud Narukami
I know this and the chapters leading up to this and the foreseeable future were written years ago but the whole pacing is so off things just happen really fast and it doesn't feel like the characters even acknowledge things happen because things just happen and they quickly move on
8Cloud NarukamiI know this and the chapters leading up to this and the foreseeable future were written years ago but the whole pacing is so off things just happen really fast and it doesn't feel like the characters even acknowledge things happen because things just happen and they quickly move on
11/1/2020 c77 4hallowmask123
I only have one concern about this entire chapter and that's the entire lack of Naruto even being there you only mentioned him in the recap so where is he during this entire thing cuz you put him in the book prison but you don't write him there
4hallowmask123I only have one concern about this entire chapter and that's the entire lack of Naruto even being there you only mentioned him in the recap so where is he during this entire thing cuz you put him in the book prison but you don't write him there
10/28/2020 c77 7Power of Magic
A good chapter, and I look forward to seeing how things go in the next one
7Power of MagicA good chapter, and I look forward to seeing how things go in the next one
10/28/2020 c77 Samuel Santillan
I'm glad I'll be waiting for the next one and you didn't mention Naruto in the chapter.
I'm glad I'll be waiting for the next one and you didn't mention Naruto in the chapter.
10/15/2020 c52 VixEveningShade
You're asking about bounty eh? If you ask me That Naruto should not EXIST in this fic in the first place... That OC of yours is an insult to the name "Naruto"
You're asking about bounty eh? If you ask me That Naruto should not EXIST in this fic in the first place... That OC of yours is an insult to the name "Naruto"
10/15/2020 c34 VixEveningShade
Ok I honestly didn't want to review but enough is enough! This shit isn't even Naruto. You're writing some kind of OC with the name Naruto... Please just please make it OC, I really don't want to see a Naruto more pathetic than the one in original... And you're on your way to over achieve it
Ok I honestly didn't want to review but enough is enough! This shit isn't even Naruto. You're writing some kind of OC with the name Naruto... Please just please make it OC, I really don't want to see a Naruto more pathetic than the one in original... And you're on your way to over achieve it