Just In
Community
Forum
V
More
for The Lonely Barricade

7/3/2013 c1 80JackieStarSister
This is nicely done!

This was my favorite part, I think the most well-written part: "The pavement was wet with slick crimson blood and the walls of the nearby buildings were splattered with it. Paris, having witnessed the deaths of the valiant revolutionaries, openly wept for them. Her tears washed away the blood, sending it deep into the Parisian underground, and leaving only a few puddles of crimson. The rain washed the dried blood from the revolutionaries' faces."

I feel like it could have ended better; the last few sentences seem kind of weak.
6/6/2013 c1 7judybear236
You forgot the ending...

They were dead. All of them.

But their ideas of freedom would live on,

Until one day the people of France would be free.

Desktop Mode . Twitter . Help . Sign Up . Cookies . Privacy . Terms of Service