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6JogreMyOgre
I read that acronym ten times over before moving on. With that one line alone I could determine that this is peak fiction.
6JogreMyOgreI read that acronym ten times over before moving on. With that one line alone I could determine that this is peak fiction.
5/31/2018 c14 10Naite-Laef
wow, I loved this. I'm happy you at least did give us some closure on how the story ends, and it honestly almost brought me to tears just visualizing the ending! great job!
10Naite-Laefwow, I loved this. I'm happy you at least did give us some closure on how the story ends, and it honestly almost brought me to tears just visualizing the ending! great job!
7/23/2015 c14 BrokenHeartTotes
:( that would've been epic ...
:( that would've been epic ...
7/23/2015 c14 16pir84lyf
That would have been epic. Sad that is going to remain as such but it would have been for a wonderful read. Thank you for closing it out the way you did
16pir84lyfThat would have been epic. Sad that is going to remain as such but it would have been for a wonderful read. Thank you for closing it out the way you did
7/23/2015 c14 dcp1992
Man, that sucks. This would of been a great story with the outline you pointed out. Just last night I also read that new story of yours where Videl was waiting for Gohan to show he has feeling for her, I also liked that story and was going to review it but it was deleted while I was reading it.
But I can understand you not wanting to write anymore, it's your choice. Who knows, you might want to at least finish your stories sometime if the future, but it not, it's been a good ride reading your G/V stories.
Man, that sucks. This would of been a great story with the outline you pointed out. Just last night I also read that new story of yours where Videl was waiting for Gohan to show he has feeling for her, I also liked that story and was going to review it but it was deleted while I was reading it.
But I can understand you not wanting to write anymore, it's your choice. Who knows, you might want to at least finish your stories sometime if the future, but it not, it's been a good ride reading your G/V stories.
7/23/2015 c14 1LegendOfTomorrow
Well, it had been one hell of a reading adventure for me, it's sad you're ending. The plot you give away today would have been perfect if it had actually been utilised. Anyway, who knows, someday you may decide to jump back in and continue writing it after all.
1LegendOfTomorrowWell, it had been one hell of a reading adventure for me, it's sad you're ending. The plot you give away today would have been perfect if it had actually been utilised. Anyway, who knows, someday you may decide to jump back in and continue writing it after all.
7/23/2015 c14 19Darkswordsman Kirito
Well I think if you had continued this would have been amazing, especially the ending, cause I'm pretty sure that would have brought tears to my eyes. So anyway, plot was interesting, obviously original but I feel like it was rushed slightly. I think Bulma discovering a bit of Gohans past slowly through each chapter would have been better instead of, talk to Erasa get diary, but then again that is my opinion. Um your writing is pretty good, it flows well and its easy to understand, however maybe a bit more description could have been better. I liked the idea about Gohans past, where he bases the name, how Videl died (though I expected that she had died, too easy to tell unless you were purposely making it that way) etc...what I don't understand is how Videl lived? Cause from the looks of it, she died naturally and the dragonballs can't revive someone naturally. Also does the android look like Videl when she died? Or does she look the same age as Gohan? If it's the latter and she looks like a teenager for all eternity I think it would be kinda cute, I mean with the never ageing Saiyans etc...so yeah, it was an interesting read but if I had to go with a score I think I'm stuck between a 7/10 or 8/10...but this score is based on what I have read so far.
19Darkswordsman KiritoWell I think if you had continued this would have been amazing, especially the ending, cause I'm pretty sure that would have brought tears to my eyes. So anyway, plot was interesting, obviously original but I feel like it was rushed slightly. I think Bulma discovering a bit of Gohans past slowly through each chapter would have been better instead of, talk to Erasa get diary, but then again that is my opinion. Um your writing is pretty good, it flows well and its easy to understand, however maybe a bit more description could have been better. I liked the idea about Gohans past, where he bases the name, how Videl died (though I expected that she had died, too easy to tell unless you were purposely making it that way) etc...what I don't understand is how Videl lived? Cause from the looks of it, she died naturally and the dragonballs can't revive someone naturally. Also does the android look like Videl when she died? Or does she look the same age as Gohan? If it's the latter and she looks like a teenager for all eternity I think it would be kinda cute, I mean with the never ageing Saiyans etc...so yeah, it was an interesting read but if I had to go with a score I think I'm stuck between a 7/10 or 8/10...but this score is based on what I have read so far.
5/17/2015 c13 Guest
Can you plz update soon i really love your story thank you
Can you plz update soon i really love your story thank you
5/7/2015 c13 3This One Writer
Wow! This story is really good! It's such an original and creative idea! It's nothing like anything I've ever read before! And it's funny too! I really like this story! :D Keep up the good work! I can't wait to see where this will go! :)
3This One WriterWow! This story is really good! It's such an original and creative idea! It's nothing like anything I've ever read before! And it's funny too! I really like this story! :D Keep up the good work! I can't wait to see where this will go! :)
5/3/2015 c13 MaxPain32
I do like your story, this chapter was pretty short though. Don't wanna tell ya, how to do your stuff, but still...
Anyway, hope you keep on writing this story.
I do like your story, this chapter was pretty short though. Don't wanna tell ya, how to do your stuff, but still...
Anyway, hope you keep on writing this story.
5/3/2015 c13 Guest
I really love the story thanks for writing it.
I really love the story thanks for writing it.
4/5/2015 c12 11Starfire Grace
Oh Vegeta you're so mean! _
I'm wondering why Goten doesn't remember any of the visits. I would think seeing VIDEL would trigger a memory or something.
I hope Gohan gets the diary if not from Vegeta than at least Bulma finds it and gives it to him.
11Starfire GraceOh Vegeta you're so mean! _
I'm wondering why Goten doesn't remember any of the visits. I would think seeing VIDEL would trigger a memory or something.
I hope Gohan gets the diary if not from Vegeta than at least Bulma finds it and gives it to him.
4/2/2015 c12 1LiquidFang
Okay i think you should make this chapter longer and is it going to take months for the next chapter oh and what about that trip to the mall man im so happy you decided to post the next chapter i honestly have a few ideas of what to expect for the next one alright till next chppie
1LiquidFangOkay i think you should make this chapter longer and is it going to take months for the next chapter oh and what about that trip to the mall man im so happy you decided to post the next chapter i honestly have a few ideas of what to expect for the next one alright till next chppie
4/2/2015 c12 MaxPain32
Well, I can't say, I didn't expect what Vegeta did. xD
I hope you update soon, 'cause this story is getting more interesting by the chapter.
Well, I can't say, I didn't expect what Vegeta did. xD
I hope you update soon, 'cause this story is getting more interesting by the chapter.