for Lapse of Attention2/28/2017 c1 Guest
Post more chapters of lapse of attention?
Post more chapters of lapse of attention?
6/15/2013 c1 
4Ella-whispers-what
Oho, Kili you little brat! Though really they're both as bad as each other. I love the way they throw each other around and fight to be in control, then get really sweet, like when Fili goes slow cos he's waiting for Kili to relax. You definitely didn't butcher it, it's really hot and fun :) My only complaint is there are quite a few spelling mistakes which gets a bit distracting - but then I am a total geek for that (sorry, I can't help it!) But it's great, I loved it - I hope you write more!
4Ella-whispers-whatOho, Kili you little brat! Though really they're both as bad as each other. I love the way they throw each other around and fight to be in control, then get really sweet, like when Fili goes slow cos he's waiting for Kili to relax. You definitely didn't butcher it, it's really hot and fun :) My only complaint is there are quite a few spelling mistakes which gets a bit distracting - but then I am a total geek for that (sorry, I can't help it!) But it's great, I loved it - I hope you write more!
6/11/2013 c1 12greensorceress
I thought this story was great! I loved how they were "fighting" over who was in control, and how Kili couldn't wait! Very funny and hot!
12greensorceressI thought this story was great! I loved how they were "fighting" over who was in control, and how Kili couldn't wait! Very funny and hot!
6/9/2013 c1 KillerKadoogan
Not butchered at all! Really quite deliciously HOT! Loved your take on the brothers watching the ponies scene - explains a lot, lol! ;) *sigh* Durincest is so wrong but so wonderful to read! What is it about these two?! Great job, and I would love to read more of your work, especially if it was about our favorite dwarf brothers! Happy writing!
Not butchered at all! Really quite deliciously HOT! Loved your take on the brothers watching the ponies scene - explains a lot, lol! ;) *sigh* Durincest is so wrong but so wonderful to read! What is it about these two?! Great job, and I would love to read more of your work, especially if it was about our favorite dwarf brothers! Happy writing!