6/8/2014 c1 54Starfire201
You know, I think if Raph had known that Don had known who called and ignored it, he would have killed him for the embarrassment. Loved this. :)
You know, I think if Raph had known that Don had known who called and ignored it, he would have killed him for the embarrassment. Loved this. :)
3/12/2014 c1 Juanita27
That story was very different and very cool- quite refreshing. And I loved your portrayal of Raph.
That story was very different and very cool- quite refreshing. And I loved your portrayal of Raph.
9/14/2013 c1 6LittleKy
"And if he fell off a roof on the way?
Well... at least then he'd be put out of his misery."
Just- hahahahahaha! Poor Raph! This was brilliant and hilarious. Everyone was so perfectly in character too. I just loved your Raph to pieces. Good work :D
"And if he fell off a roof on the way?
Well... at least then he'd be put out of his misery."
Just- hahahahahaha! Poor Raph! This was brilliant and hilarious. Everyone was so perfectly in character too. I just loved your Raph to pieces. Good work :D
7/10/2013 c1 Kqmagicgirl
what a great story :). great grammar, you have the characters povs down, and I lol'd at the "wrong brand" joke. :)
what a great story :). great grammar, you have the characters povs down, and I lol'd at the "wrong brand" joke. :)
6/20/2013 c1 8Lariimaar
Omg you have done it again! This was so unexpected yet hilariously perfect! From April's and Raph's attitude to the flawless way the events unfolded. So much fun to read! The mental picture of Raph standing in a "Sanitary Napkin" aisle will forever make me smile :o)
Omg you have done it again! This was so unexpected yet hilariously perfect! From April's and Raph's attitude to the flawless way the events unfolded. So much fun to read! The mental picture of Raph standing in a "Sanitary Napkin" aisle will forever make me smile :o)
6/19/2013 c1 203BubblyShell22
Wow. That was hilarious. Poor Raph having to go through that. Yeah, I agree about the mood swings though. Definitely sounds like something that would make me wonder if Raph's a girl, too. Nicely done on this little challenge.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
Wow. That was hilarious. Poor Raph having to go through that. Yeah, I agree about the mood swings though. Definitely sounds like something that would make me wonder if Raph's a girl, too. Nicely done on this little challenge.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
6/18/2013 c1 9TimidBookworm
LOL oh my... all I can manage right now is giggling under a face-palm. It's just sooo... I don't know, but I love it. I feel sorry for Raph and yet, like many other females, I'm baffled and amused by a man's repulsion towards feminine hygiene products. And of course getting the wrong brand, part of me thought that might happen (men when faced with the mountain of different 'kinds' and all), but still the cherry on top right there. There is so much gold in this story I'd have to say your 'tangent' is a rather large success Rebel. Wonderful oneshot!
LOL oh my... all I can manage right now is giggling under a face-palm. It's just sooo... I don't know, but I love it. I feel sorry for Raph and yet, like many other females, I'm baffled and amused by a man's repulsion towards feminine hygiene products. And of course getting the wrong brand, part of me thought that might happen (men when faced with the mountain of different 'kinds' and all), but still the cherry on top right there. There is so much gold in this story I'd have to say your 'tangent' is a rather large success Rebel. Wonderful oneshot!
6/18/2013 c1 4Onlymehere
OH MY FREAKING GOD! YOU NEED TO WRITE THINGS LIKE THIS WAY MORE OFTEN! Ok... calming down... calming down... ok. but seriously, that was one of the funniest things I have EVER read! I love how you decided not to conveniently ignore April's time of the month and relationship troubles between her and Casey. I also LOVE Don's caller ID line... I'm dying over here xD the rediculousness of it all is pure gold, my friend. I DEMAND more! :D
OH MY FREAKING GOD! YOU NEED TO WRITE THINGS LIKE THIS WAY MORE OFTEN! Ok... calming down... calming down... ok. but seriously, that was one of the funniest things I have EVER read! I love how you decided not to conveniently ignore April's time of the month and relationship troubles between her and Casey. I also LOVE Don's caller ID line... I'm dying over here xD the rediculousness of it all is pure gold, my friend. I DEMAND more! :D
6/18/2013 c1 28DuckiePray
That...is fantastic. I don't think I've ever been more irritated with April, or felt as sorry for Raph. That was a heck of a night, and hysterical to boot, up to the point where he got hurt. Then I just felt bad for laughing. :) That chick was something else...scary thing is, there are actually girls out there like that.
Glad he made it home safe, and the ending was perfect. Nice work.
That...is fantastic. I don't think I've ever been more irritated with April, or felt as sorry for Raph. That was a heck of a night, and hysterical to boot, up to the point where he got hurt. Then I just felt bad for laughing. :) That chick was something else...scary thing is, there are actually girls out there like that.
Glad he made it home safe, and the ending was perfect. Nice work.
6/18/2013 c1 Guest
Poor Raph, but I loved it.
Poor Raph, but I loved it.
6/18/2013 c1 82SleepingSeeker
First, let me say, that clear statement of this NOT being a romance in your description was so funny on it's own, then all the references to 'being stood up' and a date for prom just had me cracking up. I wonder if that was subconscious on your part . . . Hehheh! Your as jumpy about romance as your Raphael is! I swear! Gotta tease, can't help it! Okay the on to the really good stuff:
'he groaned into the ground as if passing a secret to an ear.'
Ah, there it was, nestled snuggly in the middle of your story, the little gems I love to unearth and marvel at, rolling it around in my mind like a precious stone in my palm, fascinated by the simplistic nature of it and yet how lovely and complex.
That end...that end, that end, you little devil. I read a story from someone whom internally I dub as 'unbeliever extrodiare' where she had Raph an actual, gasp! female all along and it made me SICK! She's super science chick and sometimes I write just to spurn the version of her in my imagination, heheh. So, thank you for the little jab, though wholly unintentional - it hit the mark and reestabished for me that some fans out here still understand the material!
And did I like it? oh ho ho, yes. This was terrific. I'm happy for a multitude of reasons, Rebel. Thank you!
First, let me say, that clear statement of this NOT being a romance in your description was so funny on it's own, then all the references to 'being stood up' and a date for prom just had me cracking up. I wonder if that was subconscious on your part . . . Hehheh! Your as jumpy about romance as your Raphael is! I swear! Gotta tease, can't help it! Okay the on to the really good stuff:
'he groaned into the ground as if passing a secret to an ear.'
Ah, there it was, nestled snuggly in the middle of your story, the little gems I love to unearth and marvel at, rolling it around in my mind like a precious stone in my palm, fascinated by the simplistic nature of it and yet how lovely and complex.
That end...that end, that end, you little devil. I read a story from someone whom internally I dub as 'unbeliever extrodiare' where she had Raph an actual, gasp! female all along and it made me SICK! She's super science chick and sometimes I write just to spurn the version of her in my imagination, heheh. So, thank you for the little jab, though wholly unintentional - it hit the mark and reestabished for me that some fans out here still understand the material!
And did I like it? oh ho ho, yes. This was terrific. I'm happy for a multitude of reasons, Rebel. Thank you!