for The Champion of Arceus6/21/2021 c1 The Dark Spider
It's a Ralts egg, as it's description matches that of a Ralts, Pure white with green head and reddish horns.
It's a Ralts egg, as it's description matches that of a Ralts, Pure white with green head and reddish horns.
6/21/2021 c1 The Dark Spider
It's a Ralts egg, as it's description matches that of a Ralts, Pure white with green head and reddish horns.
It's a Ralts egg, as it's description matches that of a Ralts, Pure white with green head and reddish horns.
6/13/2018 c4 Random Person
Who is his new friend, Wait Charmander right
Who is his new friend, Wait Charmander right
7/4/2016 c4 
6Yaw6113
Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.
6Yaw6113Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.
6/19/2016 c1 Tyler
It can't be a rats, as oak said it was EXCLUSIVELY from Hoenn and talks is also found in Sinnoh and kalos, and it can't be snoring as they are also found in Sinnoh and Kalos.
It can't be a rats, as oak said it was EXCLUSIVELY from Hoenn and talks is also found in Sinnoh and kalos, and it can't be snoring as they are also found in Sinnoh and Kalos.
12/3/2015 c4 10vaporeonxglaceon
I like where you are going with the story, it has a multitude of potential, I know you probably hear this a lot, but you are in a desperate need of a Beta. Also try and slow down a little, you are pushing the story forth a whole lot, I can barely keep up sometimes, other than that. Keep up the amazing story, I do not mean to sound rude. But criticizing to help you become a better writer. I'll look forward to the next chapter keep it up. Love VxG.
10vaporeonxglaceonI like where you are going with the story, it has a multitude of potential, I know you probably hear this a lot, but you are in a desperate need of a Beta. Also try and slow down a little, you are pushing the story forth a whole lot, I can barely keep up sometimes, other than that. Keep up the amazing story, I do not mean to sound rude. But criticizing to help you become a better writer. I'll look forward to the next chapter keep it up. Love VxG.
11/23/2015 c4 7Myra the Dovahkiin
great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.
7Myra the Dovahkiingreat story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.
1/18/2015 c1 19Smiling Seshat
There are some troubles with punctuation in dialogues I think you should look at, but otherwise it's a well-written first story, though it seems to be on hiatus or abandonned.
19Smiling SeshatThere are some troubles with punctuation in dialogues I think you should look at, but otherwise it's a well-written first story, though it seems to be on hiatus or abandonned.