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6/21/2013 c1 52SpirkTrekker42
Very good start! :)
6/21/2013 c1 1Johnlocked1895
I liked it :) I mean I don't normally read Star Trek stuff so I can't compare, but it was good!

Uh, only things I could think of to help you is watch out for who is talking and be careful not to switch the POV in the middle of a paragraph. Other than that its great. You might just need to give it another chapter or two for it to pick up :) good luck!
6/20/2013 c1 1spirkforever
Beautifully written, and such a twist at the end. Cannot wait for more!
6/20/2013 c1 2Sheepdog20
It's pretty good.

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