for Goodbye, Father9/8/2013 c1 
9JH24
Wow, that was amazing. This was really emotional, so sad, yet also so beautifully written.
It took me a little while to find out who was narrating but it did not influence the story at all. The emotions, the grief, the feeling of helplessness and disbelief. They felt all so strong, so real, conveyed in such an intense and natural way. When reading I could feel sadness coming over me.
What I especially liked was how the character/narrator interacted with each of the four turtles in her own way and how each of the four turtles dealt with their emotions in their own way as well. It feels so realistic, so real, so pure.
The ending where the ceremony was being held was very well done. The last part was an amazing but also very sad ending. Leo had drowned himself in his grief, and became drunk as he tried to soften his emotions. Poor Leo.
A beautifully written and emotional story, one that makes you really think, Amazing work, and thank you for sharing.
9JH24Wow, that was amazing. This was really emotional, so sad, yet also so beautifully written.
It took me a little while to find out who was narrating but it did not influence the story at all. The emotions, the grief, the feeling of helplessness and disbelief. They felt all so strong, so real, conveyed in such an intense and natural way. When reading I could feel sadness coming over me.
What I especially liked was how the character/narrator interacted with each of the four turtles in her own way and how each of the four turtles dealt with their emotions in their own way as well. It feels so realistic, so real, so pure.
The ending where the ceremony was being held was very well done. The last part was an amazing but also very sad ending. Leo had drowned himself in his grief, and became drunk as he tried to soften his emotions. Poor Leo.
A beautifully written and emotional story, one that makes you really think, Amazing work, and thank you for sharing.
8/15/2013 c1 20VaniaHepskins
Snif... Awww cosha... Casi lloro, hermoso en verdad!
I love it! Thanks for sharing!
20VaniaHepskinsSnif... Awww cosha... Casi lloro, hermoso en verdad!
I love it! Thanks for sharing!
6/20/2013 c1 Guest
Sad but beautiful.
Sad but beautiful.
6/21/2013 c1 82SleepingSeeker
My favorite part was the very end. Thank you for not having Leo take it well. I think that last sentence made this story go from an ordinary piece dealing with the inevitable to something more . . . haunting and deeply moving. Good job :)
82SleepingSeekerMy favorite part was the very end. Thank you for not having Leo take it well. I think that last sentence made this story go from an ordinary piece dealing with the inevitable to something more . . . haunting and deeply moving. Good job :)
6/20/2013 c1 14Brittany-Mel
Aww I cried, don't particularly like the Irma, and the Technodrome bit but It was a good story over all, I hope you do a sequel
14Brittany-MelAww I cried, don't particularly like the Irma, and the Technodrome bit but It was a good story over all, I hope you do a sequel
6/20/2013 c1 26SewerSurfin
Awww totaly tear-jerker! Good job! You really portrayed their emotions well!
26SewerSurfinAwww totaly tear-jerker! Good job! You really portrayed their emotions well!
6/20/2013 c1 203BubblyShell22
Awww, a very sad little story. I love how your OC was included in it and how she was the source of comfort for them. Nicely done on this tale.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
203BubblyShell22Awww, a very sad little story. I love how your OC was included in it and how she was the source of comfort for them. Nicely done on this tale.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
6/20/2013 c1 14Lunamayn
It was a very touching story, I just wish it had been from one of the turtles/Aprils point of view. Not knowing who's telling the story was very offsetting and impersonal. It could have been much more emotional if you'd at least given us a name. We got a microscopic backstory, but it wasn't enough. Other than that, it was a decent story.
14LunamaynIt was a very touching story, I just wish it had been from one of the turtles/Aprils point of view. Not knowing who's telling the story was very offsetting and impersonal. It could have been much more emotional if you'd at least given us a name. We got a microscopic backstory, but it wasn't enough. Other than that, it was a decent story.