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1/13/2014 c6 1Kagemaru Okami
Looking good I'm looking forward to seeing narutoxtayuya in the future, not so sure about minato cheating but ill keep reading and sees where it goes
1/13/2014 c6 3Dansama92
Ok these last two chapters were a little better and a whole lot easier to understand but I'm still seeing a lot of mistakes. I feel I should... only word I can think of is warn. Warn you that if a mod or someone who likes reporting sees your story they can report it as one of the things you have to agree to when you start posting stories if that they have to be gramtically correct. So my advice, get a beta or read over all your old chapters and look over any new ones before posting them. Later.
1/12/2014 c4 Dansama92
Ok while this chapter was better I still see a lot of little mistakes around. Also I think that if you could, you should go fix up the past chapters to make them like this one and the first one so it's not as confusing and you aren't giving away info on what happens in the future
1/12/2014 c3 Dansama92
Ok still seeing small mistakes and I'm starting to find the jumping back and forth timewise annoying now. Are all of your chapters going to be like this? I find it annoying because you're giving away little hints and details of things that haven't happened yet that I don't like. Such as making it sound like Naruto went back to Konoha for a little bit and cheated on by Ino. I can't even tell which is present time anymore. Jiraiya and Tayuya or the time with Konan and Naruto.
1/12/2014 c2 Dansama92
Ok this chapter was a little different and I'll admit I'm not a fan of the whole going back and forth through time thing. I'm still seeing a lot of mistakes such as unfinished, misspelled and misused words as well
1/12/2014 c1 Dansama92
Ok your story and the way you go about it isn't bad but I am noticing a lot of little errors such as missing words, wrong words, and mis spelled ones. Nothing serious but still a little annoying. I suggest getting a beta or going back to fix old chapters.
1/7/2014 c6 draken666
cant wait for the next chapter
1/5/2014 c6 crimsondrake1945
Glade to see that this story is going to continue. Only one prob i had was at the end were you regard Ei as the Hokage, he is actually the Raikage. Other then that have no other probs, hope u keep up the good work
1/5/2014 c1 Guest
It's sad that girls at 14-24 don't wait to get pregnant or save their first time until they truly know what they like and look for in a guy cause everyone should think of that but with me I would probably need someone like my mom extremely patient caring loving understanding etc but I am sorry for your loss but remember to tell your daughter to wait till your 25 to start having a real love life and make sure to get her condoms but tell her that around the age of 14 but remember it doesn't matter if you adopted her just love her with your all
1/5/2014 c6 2ChilledKitsune
I'm confused on the pairing since it has been so long could u remind me what it is suppose to be. Also is karui going to be married to naruto because I'm pretty sure tayuya ain't gonna let no girl near her man
1/5/2014 c6 4Count Cuddles RPT
Glad to see your back! I liked this chapter, can't wait for the next one!
1/4/2014 c6 Hexflame
I really hope the character pairings in the top bit, not the chapter but where the summary goes, is incorrect because I would rather not see Naruto paired with Minato... completely okay with Konan and Kushina however.
1/4/2014 c4 girrr
ye
1/4/2014 c6 16Duesal Bladesinger
I for one am totally fine with the fast-paced plot. Keep up the good work!
1/4/2014 c5 Duesal Bladesinger
I'm a bit confused, why was Naruto the one who grounded Narumi to reality? She barely knew him.
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