for Broken Clockwork10/13/2013 c5 
2awesomeconji1
Ahahaha insane Narumi. Anyways can't wait until Kushina figures out about Minato and Mikoto.
2awesomeconji1Ahahaha insane Narumi. Anyways can't wait until Kushina figures out about Minato and Mikoto.
9/12/2013 c5 ninbigboy168
Wow very interesting story..
but a few things it would have been better if you started as just a story not jumping from different time line kinda got confuse o the 2nd chapter why was tayuya being interrogated? How was she captured? Then you would do more of jumpimh on time line took me a while to finally get it. It would have been better if it was just a straight out story but i was really good i want to know more and what happen in ino betrayal.. its really good and want to know what happen... i be adding you to fav and i check out ur other storys
Wow very interesting story..
but a few things it would have been better if you started as just a story not jumping from different time line kinda got confuse o the 2nd chapter why was tayuya being interrogated? How was she captured? Then you would do more of jumpimh on time line took me a while to finally get it. It would have been better if it was just a straight out story but i was really good i want to know more and what happen in ino betrayal.. its really good and want to know what happen... i be adding you to fav and i check out ur other storys
9/10/2013 c5 2MirageSPL
The only thing I'm disappointed about is that I finished the chapter already. Now I have to wait for an update. I hope to read it soon! This chapter was great!
2MirageSPLThe only thing I'm disappointed about is that I finished the chapter already. Now I have to wait for an update. I hope to read it soon! This chapter was great!
9/9/2013 c5 1ZeonReborn
Eh... this seems like it might be interesting, but it jumps around so much that any sort of coherent plot is impossible to determine. I have literally almost no idea what is going on, who the major players are, etc. It's just a giant mess of vaguely connected scenes with no background or context.
1ZeonRebornEh... this seems like it might be interesting, but it jumps around so much that any sort of coherent plot is impossible to determine. I have literally almost no idea what is going on, who the major players are, etc. It's just a giant mess of vaguely connected scenes with no background or context.
9/9/2013 c5 Jin Masters
awesome story and i like how the title reflects how the story is written, unless it was accidental that the story is like a broken clock(you know skipping time and so on) then awesome mistake
awesome story and i like how the title reflects how the story is written, unless it was accidental that the story is like a broken clock(you know skipping time and so on) then awesome mistake
9/9/2013 c5 22SSJ3 Kyuubi Gohan
Ok I'm just being honest so hear me out. You started this story from a set time, then you flashed forward, then back then forward, then slightly back, then forward, then back a lot again... do you see the problem?
The story is jumping all over the place and destroys any sense of story, it is rather hard to read, harder to enjoy and almost impossible to figure out when, something is happening.
22SSJ3 Kyuubi GohanOk I'm just being honest so hear me out. You started this story from a set time, then you flashed forward, then back then forward, then slightly back, then forward, then back a lot again... do you see the problem?
The story is jumping all over the place and destroys any sense of story, it is rather hard to read, harder to enjoy and almost impossible to figure out when, something is happening.