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6/1/2014 c2 AngelMaree
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7/5/2013 c1 A
Like the other reviewer said; this story has a lot of potential. I would clear up a bit of the confusing things though. You wrote in third person for most of it but there was one sentence where you wrote in first. I was also confused as to where Neville took her, how she blacked out, and who was kissing her and why did she run out of the room and how did she not get caught? They're Militia, they don't often miss, except for when Miles is around.
7/4/2013 c1 Unused account - deleted
I think this is a very interesting concept for a story. I'll be fascinated to know who the mother is... Of course we all know Miles isn't exactly "the 40 year old virgin" so it's a mysterious tee-hee. Anyway, you have a lot of potential as a writer and this could be very good.

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