for The Great Tale of Black Ivy: Rise of The Paw11/10/2013 c1 Henry
So wait you know ianv29 in real life? he's Mexican right? with black hair?
So wait you know ianv29 in real life? he's Mexican right? with black hair?
7/14/2013 c3 fanficreader137
Oh gosh, not a cliffhanger! -_-
This is very creative. The whole operation, how the story is flowing, the bantering dialogue...I love it! Keep up the good work! (Just watch for this evil thing called grammatical errors...)
-fan
Oh gosh, not a cliffhanger! -_-
This is very creative. The whole operation, how the story is flowing, the bantering dialogue...I love it! Keep up the good work! (Just watch for this evil thing called grammatical errors...)
-fan
7/14/2013 c3 
5SeverinadeStrango
Oh noes! A cliffhanger! Can't wait to find out what happens next!
I suppose I'll have to wait until the next chapter...
5SeverinadeStrangoOh noes! A cliffhanger! Can't wait to find out what happens next!
I suppose I'll have to wait until the next chapter...
7/10/2013 c1 kestrel
This is so creative! It is difficult to write dialog between people in a story and you have done very well. I am looking forward to more.
I can see it in my imagination as I read it. You have such a way with words!
Next time, do a bit of proof-reading - I hate that part, too, but it does help.
Well Done!
This is so creative! It is difficult to write dialog between people in a story and you have done very well. I am looking forward to more.
I can see it in my imagination as I read it. You have such a way with words!
Next time, do a bit of proof-reading - I hate that part, too, but it does help.
Well Done!
7/9/2013 c1 Fan of Fantasy
Pretty neat!
Although, just make sure you create a new paragraph whenever a new person speaks. It makes it easier to read.
Awesome work though!
Pretty neat!
Although, just make sure you create a new paragraph whenever a new person speaks. It makes it easier to read.
Awesome work though!
7/9/2013 c1 NightSkyWolves
Not bad, not bad. You might wanna start a new paragraph when someone says something though, but that's the only thing I'd fix. Continue soon, you're not a bad writer!
Not bad, not bad. You might wanna start a new paragraph when someone says something though, but that's the only thing I'd fix. Continue soon, you're not a bad writer!
7/9/2013 c1 Vic95
I loved it! You are a great writer. I'm so excited for Chapter 2!
I loved it! You are a great writer. I'm so excited for Chapter 2!
7/9/2013 c1 SeverinadeStrango
You might want to watch out for minor grammatical errors, but otherwise, this story seems pretty good so far!
You might want to watch out for minor grammatical errors, but otherwise, this story seems pretty good so far!