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7/27/2013 c3 Maria
I love this! Please keep it up :)
7/26/2013 c3 I'm sad
;_; Y u do dis. MY FEELZ.
YOU BROKE THEM
YOU CRUEL HEARTLESS YET TALENTED FANFICTION WRITER.
WHY.
WHY.
:(
7/23/2013 c3 finalstriker21
I read your story.

1) Watch out for your use of commas! This is by far what annoyed me the most! Your use of commas is awful! This is by far what annoyed me the most. You don't put a comma when you absolutely have to and you put one sometimes when you mustn't!

2) WATCH OUT after dialogues! It always starts with a non-capitalized letter, like this:

"You bastards! You're not god! This is madness," another yelled out.

instead of

"You bastards! You're not god! This is madness." Another yelled out.

The story is decently-written. A couple more things are irking, but otherwise it's good. I liked it!
7/17/2013 c2 allimcc
Love this chapter! Your writing is great. Keep it up!
7/9/2013 c1 ARLverde
Very descriptive. I really like the fact that you had Joel carry Sarah with them. I don't believe he would have just left her behind unless forced to do so. I also liked the fact the only time he did put her down was to save Tommy. This has a making for a real good story and I look forward to the continuation.

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