for Protector of the Fairies4/4 c30 Madara of the leaf
The fight was bullshit! Bullshit! If you wanted a much weaker Ichigo you shouldn't have used the fulbring version of him that's why it so hard and frustrating to read and it's not in a good way are you saying that if it was Gildarts the one fighting the result would have been the same? Of course not! He fucking survived Acnologia and I'm pretty sure none of the seis's would have survive Acnologia.
The fight was bullshit! Bullshit! If you wanted a much weaker Ichigo you shouldn't have used the fulbring version of him that's why it so hard and frustrating to read and it's not in a good way are you saying that if it was Gildarts the one fighting the result would have been the same? Of course not! He fucking survived Acnologia and I'm pretty sure none of the seis's would have survive Acnologia.
3/31 c21 
2PhoniMangaka
I think that, as far as my opinion goes. I wish yiu would have done more to really sell the Ichigo and Fairy Tail dynamic. Cause to me, right now, while i understand that he has strong feelings towards the guild, i dont necessarily believe it. Laxus and Levy? For sure i believe that.
But for everyone else? Not so much. You skipped around and done one offs, kinda like vignettes of how he talked to them (once) and gave advice to them (once). I think a chapter or two to really dedicate more time spent with these characters would have done wonders for the bond that Ichigo is portrayed to have.
Its still a decent read though!
2PhoniMangakaI think that, as far as my opinion goes. I wish yiu would have done more to really sell the Ichigo and Fairy Tail dynamic. Cause to me, right now, while i understand that he has strong feelings towards the guild, i dont necessarily believe it. Laxus and Levy? For sure i believe that.
But for everyone else? Not so much. You skipped around and done one offs, kinda like vignettes of how he talked to them (once) and gave advice to them (once). I think a chapter or two to really dedicate more time spent with these characters would have done wonders for the bond that Ichigo is portrayed to have.
Its still a decent read though!
3/30 c1 PhoniMangaka
I know this fic has been around for a long while and you finished it and thats an accomplishment in and of itself! Congrats on that! I remember reading it when i was younger and so decided to try and get into it again.
I dont know if you still write or not, but what i will say, is that you over-used ‘Him’ quite a lot and instead of building suspense, you moreso dampened the impact that you have. It was very overhanded and since its very obvious what readers are getting into, it becomes a bit of an “i know who youre referring to, can we stop besting around the bush and get on with it?” Type of thing.
There is definitely a more subtle/better way of going about it, but again, this fic is pretty old so im not trying to be harsh or anything! Just wanted to share my thoughts, even if its already over and done with
I know this fic has been around for a long while and you finished it and thats an accomplishment in and of itself! Congrats on that! I remember reading it when i was younger and so decided to try and get into it again.
I dont know if you still write or not, but what i will say, is that you over-used ‘Him’ quite a lot and instead of building suspense, you moreso dampened the impact that you have. It was very overhanded and since its very obvious what readers are getting into, it becomes a bit of an “i know who youre referring to, can we stop besting around the bush and get on with it?” Type of thing.
There is definitely a more subtle/better way of going about it, but again, this fic is pretty old so im not trying to be harsh or anything! Just wanted to share my thoughts, even if its already over and done with
1/5 c5 InfiniteShadow3
As much as im interested in this, youve gotta quite a few things wrong. Natsu joined after the Strauss and Bisca wss brought to the guild by Erza
As much as im interested in this, youve gotta quite a few things wrong. Natsu joined after the Strauss and Bisca wss brought to the guild by Erza
7/31/2024 c32 Fanforce
I don’t feel comfortable with all of the dark wizards being dead. I mean later in the series of fairy tail those wizards became good guys. I want to see that happen here
I don’t feel comfortable with all of the dark wizards being dead. I mean later in the series of fairy tail those wizards became good guys. I want to see that happen here
7/28/2024 c62 thethethex34
I never caught that line before, and I dont know how I hadnt, this is my third or fourth time reading through this fanfiction, and I somehow never caught the line “My father will know what to do.” From Jellal. That one is kind of sad, since he doesnt know that his dad died in the battle. Really sad, since his dad was becoming a better man, someone who wanted to do right for his family and allies. Good job with this chapter, but man, Jellal has only the shibas left now.
I never caught that line before, and I dont know how I hadnt, this is my third or fourth time reading through this fanfiction, and I somehow never caught the line “My father will know what to do.” From Jellal. That one is kind of sad, since he doesnt know that his dad died in the battle. Really sad, since his dad was becoming a better man, someone who wanted to do right for his family and allies. Good job with this chapter, but man, Jellal has only the shibas left now.
6/13/2024 c200 1jtawh
You gave a pretty interesting bankai to Shinji. Compared to the one we see in tbe anime, it’s definitely a lot better in 1v1’s. Considering how long you waited to see Shinji’s actual bankai, I’m curious as to what you would’ve done with it if you had known. Could’ve been real interesting to see him use it throughout this war.
1jtawhYou gave a pretty interesting bankai to Shinji. Compared to the one we see in tbe anime, it’s definitely a lot better in 1v1’s. Considering how long you waited to see Shinji’s actual bankai, I’m curious as to what you would’ve done with it if you had known. Could’ve been real interesting to see him use it throughout this war.
4/15/2024 c3 2LONE RANGER 97
hey sorry I had this whole thing written up explaining why Ichigo saying mother or mom works but him saying mum just doesn't, I'm not trying to insult you or anything I'm being genuine I really think This story is really great so far it's just there are a few things that getting the way of it being better And it's not to do with the plot or anything it's just some small little things that are just here and there But it's not anything that's a constant reoccurring thing except for One of them.
I'm going to try and recreate what I wrote, And I really hope you find it helpful.
Okay so In the story we always hear Ichigo calling his mother mum instead of mom or mother, which just doesn't feel right And whenever we Read it we hear it in our minds and that can sometimes instantly break the immersion because it's not something Ichigo would say, For example I read past apart where ichigo's mom was referred to as mother and it didn't break the feeling of immersion I was having, now I know it sounds like complaining about him saying Mum instead of Mom is nitpicking but sometimes it's a small things that do matter because can you actually imagine Ichigo saying Ma or Mommy, or when referring to his dad saying Pa, pops, or Daddy, probably not right Well that's because although they are just different ways to refer to the same things they are technically a type of slang when someone says Mum it gives the impression of them not only having a British accent or one that's similar But Ichigo doesn't have an accent like that, And he doesn't say ma ma either that implies that he has a bit of a countryish accent although granted it would be easier to get away with that better than with Mum But still it gives a impression of a bit OOC
2LONE RANGER 97hey sorry I had this whole thing written up explaining why Ichigo saying mother or mom works but him saying mum just doesn't, I'm not trying to insult you or anything I'm being genuine I really think This story is really great so far it's just there are a few things that getting the way of it being better And it's not to do with the plot or anything it's just some small little things that are just here and there But it's not anything that's a constant reoccurring thing except for One of them.
I'm going to try and recreate what I wrote, And I really hope you find it helpful.
Okay so In the story we always hear Ichigo calling his mother mum instead of mom or mother, which just doesn't feel right And whenever we Read it we hear it in our minds and that can sometimes instantly break the immersion because it's not something Ichigo would say, For example I read past apart where ichigo's mom was referred to as mother and it didn't break the feeling of immersion I was having, now I know it sounds like complaining about him saying Mum instead of Mom is nitpicking but sometimes it's a small things that do matter because can you actually imagine Ichigo saying Ma or Mommy, or when referring to his dad saying Pa, pops, or Daddy, probably not right Well that's because although they are just different ways to refer to the same things they are technically a type of slang when someone says Mum it gives the impression of them not only having a British accent or one that's similar But Ichigo doesn't have an accent like that, And he doesn't say ma ma either that implies that he has a bit of a countryish accent although granted it would be easier to get away with that better than with Mum But still it gives a impression of a bit OOC
4/10/2024 c2 LONE RANGER 97
why is he saying Mum like he's from Europe instead of Mom it's very disorienting.
why is he saying Mum like he's from Europe instead of Mom it's very disorienting.
2/9/2024 c14 7Spartastic 4
I gotta say that the Master seems OoC here. But I gotta see where this all goes.
7Spartastic 4I gotta say that the Master seems OoC here. But I gotta see where this all goes.
2/8/2024 c11 Spartastic 4
Ok you got me. Didn't Yajima tell Mavorik and Gildarts what happened after that first mission? or was all he said "Politics" and left after that?
Ok you got me. Didn't Yajima tell Mavorik and Gildarts what happened after that first mission? or was all he said "Politics" and left after that?