for Shoton of Konoha6/24/2017 c26 Etc.Gal
I was hoping for some interaction with a temporarily resurrected Minato but I guess that was a bit predictable. Good call on bringing back Daisuke.
I was hoping for some interaction with a temporarily resurrected Minato but I guess that was a bit predictable. Good call on bringing back Daisuke.
6/24/2017 c13 Etc.Gal
I just binge read this and I'm finally taking a break. Ah, the terrible feeling of coming out of a serious procrastination with a crap load of homework. Still, a good read! :D
I just binge read this and I'm finally taking a break. Ah, the terrible feeling of coming out of a serious procrastination with a crap load of homework. Still, a good read! :D
6/22/2017 c28 
6Kitnight
I really enjoyed this story till the chunin exams. You started off strong and worked for the right stuff but by this chapter i feel your story has fallen off and you have forgotten how you were building this story. Your expanding the world has become tedious and detracts from the story. You forget some of your main characters abilities or training. Ill take his fight with lee as the biggest example... you gave naruto resistance seals and forgot to have him take them off. The fact that during the forest of death they were set at 12 means either you forgot completely or for some strange reason naruto wantedto fight lee with a handicap. Like i said you started off strong but by this point you have fallen short with your delivery.
6KitnightI really enjoyed this story till the chunin exams. You started off strong and worked for the right stuff but by this chapter i feel your story has fallen off and you have forgotten how you were building this story. Your expanding the world has become tedious and detracts from the story. You forget some of your main characters abilities or training. Ill take his fight with lee as the biggest example... you gave naruto resistance seals and forgot to have him take them off. The fact that during the forest of death they were set at 12 means either you forgot completely or for some strange reason naruto wantedto fight lee with a handicap. Like i said you started off strong but by this point you have fallen short with your delivery.
6/21/2017 c30 4Antex-The Legendary Zoroark
Great chapter! But sheesh! Talk about an emotional rollercoaster eh? Lol. Anyway, I enjoyed this and I hope to see more.
4Antex-The Legendary ZoroarkGreat chapter! But sheesh! Talk about an emotional rollercoaster eh? Lol. Anyway, I enjoyed this and I hope to see more.
6/21/2017 c2 5The One True Nobody
...Why the hell are you using "u" in place of "you?" You're writing a story, not texting your friend in class...
Please tell me you stopped doing that in future chapters. The word count and general grammar in this thing is too much for just another no-effort crapfic, which is the main reason I bother to keep reading. But it just keeps going on and on with the fixfiction tropes, a wish-fulfillment extravaganza of "let's see what Naruto would be like if he had no more character flaws to build an interesting character arc from..."
5The One True Nobody...Why the hell are you using "u" in place of "you?" You're writing a story, not texting your friend in class...
Please tell me you stopped doing that in future chapters. The word count and general grammar in this thing is too much for just another no-effort crapfic, which is the main reason I bother to keep reading. But it just keeps going on and on with the fixfiction tropes, a wish-fulfillment extravaganza of "let's see what Naruto would be like if he had no more character flaws to build an interesting character arc from..."
6/21/2017 c1 The One True Nobody
Everyone brings up the bright orange clothes as if it's an actual tactical sticking point in a world where ninjas can alter their physical appearance into just about anything if they really need to hide from the naked eye. Oy veh. Typical fixfiction. I'll stick with this to see if it gets better, but Chapter One did not leave a particularly positive impression.
Everyone brings up the bright orange clothes as if it's an actual tactical sticking point in a world where ninjas can alter their physical appearance into just about anything if they really need to hide from the naked eye. Oy veh. Typical fixfiction. I'll stick with this to see if it gets better, but Chapter One did not leave a particularly positive impression.
6/21/2017 c8 12Gold Testament
Naruto's definitely going to need more Wind Jutsus before Sasuke learns Chidori. Whether or not he gets the Rasengan down, those Wind Jutsu will counter Kakashi's original move.
12Gold TestamentNaruto's definitely going to need more Wind Jutsus before Sasuke learns Chidori. Whether or not he gets the Rasengan down, those Wind Jutsu will counter Kakashi's original move.
6/21/2017 c30 2te.nellis
Sorry but physical training only gets you so far in the ninja world oh noes she is used to that why didn't they put her in a Genjutsu oh wait Sasuke was never taught any because no one thought the genjutsu doujutsu user needed it. Then there is your logic that training can make you immune to pain if that was Lee should be equally immune to pain because of Guy's training and same as Guy as well. It would mean Kakashi as Guy's eternal rival would know a way around this crap and should have taught his team this. All in all the Princess may have made some good points but tanking a Rasengan which literally shreds andything that isn't instantly sent flying and a chidori. That is ridiculous. Lee should have been champ then in the Chunin exams only weak the genjutsu because ha you don't have enough chakra to break it. Lame. Rest of the chapter was awesome Keep it up. But you really annoyed me with the princess.
2te.nellisSorry but physical training only gets you so far in the ninja world oh noes she is used to that why didn't they put her in a Genjutsu oh wait Sasuke was never taught any because no one thought the genjutsu doujutsu user needed it. Then there is your logic that training can make you immune to pain if that was Lee should be equally immune to pain because of Guy's training and same as Guy as well. It would mean Kakashi as Guy's eternal rival would know a way around this crap and should have taught his team this. All in all the Princess may have made some good points but tanking a Rasengan which literally shreds andything that isn't instantly sent flying and a chidori. That is ridiculous. Lee should have been champ then in the Chunin exams only weak the genjutsu because ha you don't have enough chakra to break it. Lame. Rest of the chapter was awesome Keep it up. But you really annoyed me with the princess.
6/20/2017 c30 felixgi1
Great update wish haku was still in the pairing.i was 're reading all chapters. Will you have naruto fight sasuke in the valley of the end. In the prelims there's a part that elude things will get dark between them. Will they be more uzumaki coming to the village
Great update wish haku was still in the pairing.i was 're reading all chapters. Will you have naruto fight sasuke in the valley of the end. In the prelims there's a part that elude things will get dark between them. Will they be more uzumaki coming to the village
6/20/2017 c30 UnsanMusho
Ok so Yuma is Jirayia's daughter and is a mercenary ok got it. But what I'm interested in is the fact that someone from the Hattori clan I was about to say Hanzo did it but then I remembered that there was an actual character in Naruto named Hanzo, is there a connection here?
Ok so Yuma is Jirayia's daughter and is a mercenary ok got it. But what I'm interested in is the fact that someone from the Hattori clan I was about to say Hanzo did it but then I remembered that there was an actual character in Naruto named Hanzo, is there a connection here?