for Shoton of Konoha5/15/2017 c21 KiSwordsman
Not only does this need massive editing as far as sentence structure and just outright missing words go, but dragons… Really, dragons... if that isn't the most cliché of the Naruto summoning contract clichés.
Good luck for the rest of this. I'm not trying to be condescending or sarcastic either, I honestly wish you luck but I think I have to put this down.
Not only does this need massive editing as far as sentence structure and just outright missing words go, but dragons… Really, dragons... if that isn't the most cliché of the Naruto summoning contract clichés.
Good luck for the rest of this. I'm not trying to be condescending or sarcastic either, I honestly wish you luck but I think I have to put this down.
5/13/2017 c29 mmat
It like Naruto's mother is interesting in other people more than her son?
It like Naruto's mother is interesting in other people more than her son?
5/12/2017 c29 Spontaneousrebell
OMG update update update you have me hooked and I can't wait to read more
OMG update update update you have me hooked and I can't wait to read more
5/12/2017 c29 
9Dragon Man 180
Huh... didn't expect Hiruzen to have been mind raped by Danzo, makes sense though. I guess now they have another reason to drag Tsunade back to Konoha if he doesn't wake up.
Very interesting story, I suppose my only complaint is Haku gets quite a bit of romantic build up with Naruto and then steps aside. Don't get me wrong, I'm a diehard NaruHina fan, but it seems a shame to waste that development for Haku and possibly Yugito. I was hoping to see Naruto with Sakura, Hinata, Haku, and Yugito since all four understand him pretty well and can relate to him.
Kushina coming back caught me completely out of the blue and it wasn't with Edo Tensei or anything else seen in the anime or manga, so good job there. The various Uzumaki are very interesting and I'm curious if more of them will show up. I can totally see Lyn going to Demon Country with Naruto as another guard for Shion.
9Dragon Man 180Huh... didn't expect Hiruzen to have been mind raped by Danzo, makes sense though. I guess now they have another reason to drag Tsunade back to Konoha if he doesn't wake up.
Very interesting story, I suppose my only complaint is Haku gets quite a bit of romantic build up with Naruto and then steps aside. Don't get me wrong, I'm a diehard NaruHina fan, but it seems a shame to waste that development for Haku and possibly Yugito. I was hoping to see Naruto with Sakura, Hinata, Haku, and Yugito since all four understand him pretty well and can relate to him.
Kushina coming back caught me completely out of the blue and it wasn't with Edo Tensei or anything else seen in the anime or manga, so good job there. The various Uzumaki are very interesting and I'm curious if more of them will show up. I can totally see Lyn going to Demon Country with Naruto as another guard for Shion.
5/11/2017 c17 iwish328
Youre telling me kushina had the time to make a blood clone, seal herself in the bullshit immortality scroll, and give the scroll to the third but she didnt have the time to tell the third she was alive. Thats stupid as fuck.
Youre telling me kushina had the time to make a blood clone, seal herself in the bullshit immortality scroll, and give the scroll to the third but she didnt have the time to tell the third she was alive. Thats stupid as fuck.
5/9/2017 c29 Apedreitor
Hohoho dear lord i don't remember any story where Danzo use that genjutsu on Hiruzen and that could actually explain a lot of the sandaime behavior on the canon storyline
Hohoho dear lord i don't remember any story where Danzo use that genjutsu on Hiruzen and that could actually explain a lot of the sandaime behavior on the canon storyline
5/8/2017 c29 Guest
Pleasantly surprised to see Kisame working alongside Itachi as a spy! Guess this means that he WILL NOT give away the location of Turtle Island (if it gets to that point)!
Pleasantly surprised to see Kisame working alongside Itachi as a spy! Guess this means that he WILL NOT give away the location of Turtle Island (if it gets to that point)!
5/8/2017 c29 Guest
OH SNAP! Hiruzen is going to be on the War Path in the next chapter!
Fuck You Danzo!
OH SNAP! Hiruzen is going to be on the War Path in the next chapter!
Fuck You Danzo!
5/8/2017 c29 UnsanMusho
Woah that ending got intense REALLY quickly. Now I'm more curious to see what your plans Danzo are. Now onto the more entertaining I was completely taken by surprised with the scene with Kisame, not only was he flirting with Kushina (I honestly don't think there has been any fic that I've seen with that kind of pairing) but him being a good guy took me by surprised as well. Then there was the scene with the Hyuuga and Sakura, I actually thought Hinata was going to talk with Sakura regarding Naruto. Anyways I enjoyed this chapter and I'm looking forward to more to come.
Woah that ending got intense REALLY quickly. Now I'm more curious to see what your plans Danzo are. Now onto the more entertaining I was completely taken by surprised with the scene with Kisame, not only was he flirting with Kushina (I honestly don't think there has been any fic that I've seen with that kind of pairing) but him being a good guy took me by surprised as well. Then there was the scene with the Hyuuga and Sakura, I actually thought Hinata was going to talk with Sakura regarding Naruto. Anyways I enjoyed this chapter and I'm looking forward to more to come.
5/8/2017 c5 18Luna's Meow
Corpse was heavier? Right, because ninja who use chakra to run and jump at extroadinary levels can't possibly use it to strengthen their arm muscles to carry a body. Even if not to the extremes of Tsunade. In fact this whole situation was so fucking "obvious" that Naruto and Kakashi, instead of looking cool by "figuring it out" instead look like utter fools for not stopping it in the first place. Brilliant work.
18Luna's MeowCorpse was heavier? Right, because ninja who use chakra to run and jump at extroadinary levels can't possibly use it to strengthen their arm muscles to carry a body. Even if not to the extremes of Tsunade. In fact this whole situation was so fucking "obvious" that Naruto and Kakashi, instead of looking cool by "figuring it out" instead look like utter fools for not stopping it in the first place. Brilliant work.
5/8/2017 c29 thor94
Really interesting chapter.
so the uzumaki were dragon slayer, never expected.
and the scene between itachi and kushina was touching, she know everything.
and never expected hiruzen under kotoamatsukami, so itwas the reason he didn't seen use it, because he already did on sarutobi.
Hope naruto skills and power will increase fast at prodigy rate (jump the ranks until reach A-S in a year or even few months).
so next tsunade retrieval
Really interesting chapter.
so the uzumaki were dragon slayer, never expected.
and the scene between itachi and kushina was touching, she know everything.
and never expected hiruzen under kotoamatsukami, so itwas the reason he didn't seen use it, because he already did on sarutobi.
Hope naruto skills and power will increase fast at prodigy rate (jump the ranks until reach A-S in a year or even few months).
so next tsunade retrieval