for Shoton of Konoha3/7/2018 c8 Guest
I’m liking it but you kinda down played narutos talent,he is just as talented if not more talented then Sasuke. Sasuke had a near perfect foundation an entire archive of techniques at his disposal and plenty of funds. After all that he still needed to take short cuts to keep up with naruto. Naruto on the other hand had no training or techniques to learn during the academy or as a genin. Had every teacher but Iruka jeopardizing his everything. None of the techniques that were his birthright inside the uzumaki compound or the extensive funds and weapons inside never took him to his clans origin land he could have acquired all the techniques there. When he was a genin everything he learned was self tought cause Kakashi never trained him aside from tree walking. During that one month he had to training for the chunnin exams he learned more than his entire life so far and could fight toe to toe with gara. Narutos raw talent is probably the best in the whole show.
I’m liking it but you kinda down played narutos talent,he is just as talented if not more talented then Sasuke. Sasuke had a near perfect foundation an entire archive of techniques at his disposal and plenty of funds. After all that he still needed to take short cuts to keep up with naruto. Naruto on the other hand had no training or techniques to learn during the academy or as a genin. Had every teacher but Iruka jeopardizing his everything. None of the techniques that were his birthright inside the uzumaki compound or the extensive funds and weapons inside never took him to his clans origin land he could have acquired all the techniques there. When he was a genin everything he learned was self tought cause Kakashi never trained him aside from tree walking. During that one month he had to training for the chunnin exams he learned more than his entire life so far and could fight toe to toe with gara. Narutos raw talent is probably the best in the whole show.
3/7/2018 c3 Guest
Sealing going slow for an uzumaki is impossible till later stages, for them being a prodigy at sealing was genetic. Minato who is considered a sealing master wouldn’t have been nearly as good as the uzumaki top 5 sealers.
Sealing going slow for an uzumaki is impossible till later stages, for them being a prodigy at sealing was genetic. Minato who is considered a sealing master wouldn’t have been nearly as good as the uzumaki top 5 sealers.
3/7/2018 c2 Guest
I know it’s late but 1. I’m loving the story but I kinda want naruto to quickly get out of the Sakura phase cause I don’t ship it 2. Saying the kyuubi has the shoton element affinity is stupid, the kyuubididn’t have a affinity because kurama only uses raw demon chakra. Any biju who did use a specific element just willed their demon chakra into that form.
I know it’s late but 1. I’m loving the story but I kinda want naruto to quickly get out of the Sakura phase cause I don’t ship it 2. Saying the kyuubi has the shoton element affinity is stupid, the kyuubididn’t have a affinity because kurama only uses raw demon chakra. Any biju who did use a specific element just willed their demon chakra into that form.
2/9/2018 c32 
1Boomshanka
The story's name is Shoton of Konoha.
That indicates that this story has addition of Shoton to Konoha as a MAIN focus.
But what I read was demons, angels, samurais, and stuff, in which Shoton is but a minor occurrence.
Maybe you should rename the story as "Shoton, Demons, Oni, Uzumaki, and lots of other shit gets added to the Ninja world."
1BoomshankaThe story's name is Shoton of Konoha.
That indicates that this story has addition of Shoton to Konoha as a MAIN focus.
But what I read was demons, angels, samurais, and stuff, in which Shoton is but a minor occurrence.
Maybe you should rename the story as "Shoton, Demons, Oni, Uzumaki, and lots of other shit gets added to the Ninja world."
2/9/2018 c31 Boomshanka
Jiraiya.
Naruto is stronger. Much stronger.
Kushina is ANBU level.
Karin has joined them.
Naruto can summon dragon.
Karin can summon dragon.
And they have Shizune.
VS
Orochimaru.
Kabuto.
Kimimaro.
YET THE OUTCOME IS THE SAME FUCKING OUTCOME AS CANON.
And you were saying, that this is going to deviate from canon?
Yeah . Right.
Jiraiya.
Naruto is stronger. Much stronger.
Kushina is ANBU level.
Karin has joined them.
Naruto can summon dragon.
Karin can summon dragon.
And they have Shizune.
VS
Orochimaru.
Kabuto.
Kimimaro.
YET THE OUTCOME IS THE SAME FUCKING OUTCOME AS CANON.
And you were saying, that this is going to deviate from canon?
Yeah . Right.
1/31/2018 c32 Scandalf
Oh god... Normally, I love it when fanfiction authors take a different path than cannon but this one is just ridiculous. I am completely fine with there being people who can go against the sage and all but those people being able to find where sages sipiritual body is, was stupid. Being able to "smite" him, was stupid. Having these all planned from thousands of years ago, is stupid. If these were all planned long before Kaguya ate the fruit then why didn't they just take over the world back then? Surely it would've been a million times easier considering people back then didn't have any super powers. They just conveniently waited until Naruto was born to go with their plans? And they started their plans at such a time that Naruto is still too weak to do anything against them, but he's also just started to realize his potential so he can become the best that he can. How convenient... You know, even in cannon Akatsuki gave a somewhat decent reason(s) to wait until the time cannon started, they said they were finding new members, earning enough money to last them the entire war, finding out who the jinchuurikis are and all that stuff but in your story they just waited for thousands of years for absolutely no reason. They could've come and taken over the planet basically whenever they wanted with that kind of power in their hand but they just had to wait millenniums for the child of the profecy to be born.
Sigh... Please, think twice before making such major changes in your fanfictions. It's true that no one wants to re-read the cannon so changing things is great, but this? This is just unbelievable...
Oh god... Normally, I love it when fanfiction authors take a different path than cannon but this one is just ridiculous. I am completely fine with there being people who can go against the sage and all but those people being able to find where sages sipiritual body is, was stupid. Being able to "smite" him, was stupid. Having these all planned from thousands of years ago, is stupid. If these were all planned long before Kaguya ate the fruit then why didn't they just take over the world back then? Surely it would've been a million times easier considering people back then didn't have any super powers. They just conveniently waited until Naruto was born to go with their plans? And they started their plans at such a time that Naruto is still too weak to do anything against them, but he's also just started to realize his potential so he can become the best that he can. How convenient... You know, even in cannon Akatsuki gave a somewhat decent reason(s) to wait until the time cannon started, they said they were finding new members, earning enough money to last them the entire war, finding out who the jinchuurikis are and all that stuff but in your story they just waited for thousands of years for absolutely no reason. They could've come and taken over the planet basically whenever they wanted with that kind of power in their hand but they just had to wait millenniums for the child of the profecy to be born.
Sigh... Please, think twice before making such major changes in your fanfictions. It's true that no one wants to re-read the cannon so changing things is great, but this? This is just unbelievable...
1/28/2018 c32 8The Keeper of Worlds
Damn, well looks like some stupidly strong behind scenes evil is out now!
8The Keeper of WorldsDamn, well looks like some stupidly strong behind scenes evil is out now!
1/25/2018 c1 tonyford3008
your story sucks ballsack the end ruined the entirety of it you made a fucking oc kill the sage continue to write this fic and i will hack your account and take it down
your story sucks ballsack the end ruined the entirety of it you made a fucking oc kill the sage continue to write this fic and i will hack your account and take it down
1/17/2018 c32 teamxcution
glad your doing things your own way. but for me this is a stopping point. like you said I can't see the sage of six path dying when he's already dead. so hope you finish the story but I won't be reading it. it's been a okay story up till now so don't quite. finish how you want.
glad your doing things your own way. but for me this is a stopping point. like you said I can't see the sage of six path dying when he's already dead. so hope you finish the story but I won't be reading it. it's been a okay story up till now so don't quite. finish how you want.
12/16/2017 c9 Henry Vaudreuil
first note some of the early chapters have a lot of grammatical errors along the lines of 'they is' 'she were' etc.
also when naruto gets 'wise' to Zabuza's/Haku's deception in wave: try to make Naruto's analysis sound like twelve year old logic rather than that of a medic-nin/weapon specialist.
also i am eager to see a character mention that if they don't answer, they don't lose points for an incorrect answer.
its the fatal flaw unique to this set of rules. its also the perfect vengeance for idiotic tests (apologies to teachers: its not you)
first note some of the early chapters have a lot of grammatical errors along the lines of 'they is' 'she were' etc.
also when naruto gets 'wise' to Zabuza's/Haku's deception in wave: try to make Naruto's analysis sound like twelve year old logic rather than that of a medic-nin/weapon specialist.
also i am eager to see a character mention that if they don't answer, they don't lose points for an incorrect answer.
its the fatal flaw unique to this set of rules. its also the perfect vengeance for idiotic tests (apologies to teachers: its not you)
11/30/2017 c20 Enjin
I apologize if I seem to be flaming but please do not use google translate for jutsu
I apologize if I seem to be flaming but please do not use google translate for jutsu
11/27/2017 c32 thegrison
This should be in the CROSSOVER area. It was going good until you started that then it turned from good to ok. Please put it in the CROSSOVER area.
This should be in the CROSSOVER area. It was going good until you started that then it turned from good to ok. Please put it in the CROSSOVER area.
10/22/2017 c32 anon
shouldnt this be in the crossovers section if you also use characters from other series?
shouldnt this be in the crossovers section if you also use characters from other series?
10/21/2017 c32 5The Benevolent Scriber
Well you obviously pulled this out of a dark hidden crevasse devoted to all dark and evil anime girls with op abilities that make no sense.
I honestly thought she was from DxD.
It wasn't entertaining truth be told and not because it's "impossible" but because there was zero build Up or presidence.
Equivalently it's like this:
"Suddenly DAEMONS!" For some reason...
5The Benevolent ScriberWell you obviously pulled this out of a dark hidden crevasse devoted to all dark and evil anime girls with op abilities that make no sense.
I honestly thought she was from DxD.
It wasn't entertaining truth be told and not because it's "impossible" but because there was zero build Up or presidence.
Equivalently it's like this:
"Suddenly DAEMONS!" For some reason...