for The Knight of Mahora Academy5/4/2020 c21 Didiwc
Are you going finish story?
Are you going finish story?
3/23/2020 c1 fujimaruhiraga
I wanna see Naruto gone berserk again in front of Negi and the girls.
Great story btw, hope you will continue despite of some negative review
I wanna see Naruto gone berserk again in front of Negi and the girls.
Great story btw, hope you will continue despite of some negative review
5/2/2019 c1 Guest
Naruto without any of his signature moves...why did you even put naruto in this?
Naruto without any of his signature moves...why did you even put naruto in this?
3/24/2019 c18 WarpedMalice
I’m sorry but I’m gonna quit here. This story is just frustrating me cause I just feel naruto has no value and I could just read the manga to get the same thing and it’s already finished. As a writer it’s good to use cannon as a foundation but you got to learn to make the story your own. You got to divert from the original and if you have to go out of your way to keep it the same then it just becomes a second rate knock off where you are using a popular name to boost your reviews and likes. You got the foundation for writing and you don’t have really to many grammatical errors all you need to do is develop your own path. It will be better for you and can help you express ideas that might not be common and you get to bring new life to old worn out stories. Be unique.
I’m sorry but I’m gonna quit here. This story is just frustrating me cause I just feel naruto has no value and I could just read the manga to get the same thing and it’s already finished. As a writer it’s good to use cannon as a foundation but you got to learn to make the story your own. You got to divert from the original and if you have to go out of your way to keep it the same then it just becomes a second rate knock off where you are using a popular name to boost your reviews and likes. You got the foundation for writing and you don’t have really to many grammatical errors all you need to do is develop your own path. It will be better for you and can help you express ideas that might not be common and you get to bring new life to old worn out stories. Be unique.
3/24/2019 c17 WarpedMalice
I wanted Sasuke to kill the civilians and Konoha father just for a difference I want him to force naruto to stop being a chump and actually be serious. I wanted him to force naruto to kill him so that it will divert the story a little bit.
I wanted Sasuke to kill the civilians and Konoha father just for a difference I want him to force naruto to stop being a chump and actually be serious. I wanted him to force naruto to kill him so that it will divert the story a little bit.
3/24/2019 c16 WarpedMalice
Please please change it up. I might as well be reading the manga. What happened to people getting together what happened to asuna and naruto. I feel like she is gonna end up with negi. I feel like there is no bond or development between most of them besides cannon and I feel like there isn’t gonna be. Naruto feels like he’s there for naruto fans and has no other purpose. We don’t know anything about him and now Sasuke which I knew it was him is here and it just distracts from the story because he’s such a shallow character and is only there to make sure the story stays the exact same. This is depressing cause I can see so much more with this story and I don’t want to stop reading cause I want it to get better.
Please please change it up. I might as well be reading the manga. What happened to people getting together what happened to asuna and naruto. I feel like she is gonna end up with negi. I feel like there is no bond or development between most of them besides cannon and I feel like there isn’t gonna be. Naruto feels like he’s there for naruto fans and has no other purpose. We don’t know anything about him and now Sasuke which I knew it was him is here and it just distracts from the story because he’s such a shallow character and is only there to make sure the story stays the exact same. This is depressing cause I can see so much more with this story and I don’t want to stop reading cause I want it to get better.
3/24/2019 c15 WarpedMalice
Guessing it’s gonna happen the same way as normal with no differences and that everyone is gonna be petrified agains.
Guessing it’s gonna happen the same way as normal with no differences and that everyone is gonna be petrified agains.
3/24/2019 c12 WarpedMalice
Why is naruto squating that makes no sense. He was a teacher doing rounds so of course he’s supposed to be up.
Why is naruto squating that makes no sense. He was a teacher doing rounds so of course he’s supposed to be up.
3/24/2019 c11 WarpedMalice
Since I can only post one review a chapter I had to jump to ch 11. I gonna explain what I mean on my last review. When I read a crossover and it’s in thipposite world than the chosen mc. I don’t want to see others from their world because if you just add a villain from his world you literally means you are just jeeping the story the same. It’s gonna follow the same patg instead of changing slowly cause of the mc influence. You have the mc their purely to get fandom instead of the mc having a purpose in the story. Like how you had naruto make the alert barrier but it served no purpose cause it didn’t prevent Konoha from getting kidnapped in the first place like it should have. How were they still able to get to her before her own allies? The reason it happened the first time is cause they had no way of knowing before hand but now they do so how did they react so late? Right now naruto is just splitting screen time with negi and doesn’t produce and change in the story besides his own harem.
Since I can only post one review a chapter I had to jump to ch 11. I gonna explain what I mean on my last review. When I read a crossover and it’s in thipposite world than the chosen mc. I don’t want to see others from their world because if you just add a villain from his world you literally means you are just jeeping the story the same. It’s gonna follow the same patg instead of changing slowly cause of the mc influence. You have the mc their purely to get fandom instead of the mc having a purpose in the story. Like how you had naruto make the alert barrier but it served no purpose cause it didn’t prevent Konoha from getting kidnapped in the first place like it should have. How were they still able to get to her before her own allies? The reason it happened the first time is cause they had no way of knowing before hand but now they do so how did they react so late? Right now naruto is just splitting screen time with negi and doesn’t produce and change in the story besides his own harem.
3/24/2019 c10 WarpedMalice
Goddamnt I didn’t want Sasuke to show up. Fuck. Sigh all well. I really wanted naruto to be the only one from his show here and that he was gonna be the one fighting fate instead of Eva. Now he’s just a mout character that’s has no purpose except making everything harder for his allies.
Goddamnt I didn’t want Sasuke to show up. Fuck. Sigh all well. I really wanted naruto to be the only one from his show here and that he was gonna be the one fighting fate instead of Eva. Now he’s just a mout character that’s has no purpose except making everything harder for his allies.
3/14/2019 c16 N1cok
Why does Asuna remember Sasuke more than Naruto? Seriously... no matter how I think of it it's just plain ridiculous that Naruto who was with her for most of her life was completely forgotten. But she easily notices she has met Sasuke before with literally a single glance. I hope you handle this well. Because I really don't like where you seem to be going with this.
Why does Asuna remember Sasuke more than Naruto? Seriously... no matter how I think of it it's just plain ridiculous that Naruto who was with her for most of her life was completely forgotten. But she easily notices she has met Sasuke before with literally a single glance. I hope you handle this well. Because I really don't like where you seem to be going with this.
3/5/2019 c21 Seta88
A great chapter, I quite like the parts with Setsuna and Naruto. In this one especially how her artifact functions.
A great chapter, I quite like the parts with Setsuna and Naruto. In this one especially how her artifact functions.
3/3/2019 c21 Maelstrom Resurrected
Hey, since Negi and Asuna had their time exploring Negi's past, you should have Naruto and Setsuna do the same considering the fact that they're partners. Ooooooohhhhh, I can't wait for that to happen soon!
Hey, since Negi and Asuna had their time exploring Negi's past, you should have Naruto and Setsuna do the same considering the fact that they're partners. Ooooooohhhhh, I can't wait for that to happen soon!