for Family is What you Make it2/20/2016 c11 guest
Hey there! This story is so interesting and I can't wait to read more; hope you are still writing!
Hey there! This story is so interesting and I can't wait to read more; hope you are still writing!
12/16/2015 c11 Guest
I like your story.
I like your story.
10/16/2015 c11 guest
I love this story, everytime I come back to me it gives me chills. I really really hope you continue it! Thanks for all the hard work!
I love this story, everytime I come back to me it gives me chills. I really really hope you continue it! Thanks for all the hard work!
8/13/2015 c11 guest
I LOVE THIS STORY. I never thought that harry potter and star trek could come together, but you have done it. And done it well! Thanks for writing. Hope to see some more soon!
I LOVE THIS STORY. I never thought that harry potter and star trek could come together, but you have done it. And done it well! Thanks for writing. Hope to see some more soon!
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3/12/2015 c11 Happy.Death.Executioner
Uh oh are they going to hear her having a nightmare, moreeee pleaseeee
Uh oh are they going to hear her having a nightmare, moreeee pleaseeee
3/9/2015 c11 E-man-dy-S
Thanks for updating.
Thanks for updating.
3/6/2015 c11 megsjedi
This really is quite good. Your characters are sound, the plot is seamless and has a good pace. You have a tendency to slip from past tense to present tense and back again, but it's not often enough to be really annoying. I recommend a beta reader.
I enjoy the dynamic between Jim and Jenna, two sibs who just aren't sure about the whole thing but more than happy to try to be good to each other. It brings to mind how carefully blended families tread around each other until things are more familiar.
Bones has an advantage in the fact that he has family, and has been married. He's much more used to the give-and-take situations that come up when family is concerned. He can at least be a mediator if things get too heated.
How is Dumbledore doing with the fact his "Chosen One" doesn't even remotely fit the Prophecy? By default, the job passes to poor Neville. Voldemort will eventually find out that Jenna isn't his rival because she was born in December, so he chose the wrong person. Or, one could argue that the Prophecy has already been fulfilled, the night that he tried to kill Jenna.
Whatever people decide, Pike is there for her. The Federation and Starfleet wouldn't be happy with anyone who tried to take her away. Magic vs modern tech, there's no where they could hide her where a transporter beam couldn't get her out. Unless it was a place with the composition of minerals found at the Katric Arc in Gol on Vulcan.
Vulcan! I'd like to see Jenna meet Spock at least once and have her own opinion on "that pointy-eared bastard."
And, yeah. *Salute* To Nimoy's memory. Live long and prosper. (I cried so much last Friday!)
This really is quite good. Your characters are sound, the plot is seamless and has a good pace. You have a tendency to slip from past tense to present tense and back again, but it's not often enough to be really annoying. I recommend a beta reader.
I enjoy the dynamic between Jim and Jenna, two sibs who just aren't sure about the whole thing but more than happy to try to be good to each other. It brings to mind how carefully blended families tread around each other until things are more familiar.
Bones has an advantage in the fact that he has family, and has been married. He's much more used to the give-and-take situations that come up when family is concerned. He can at least be a mediator if things get too heated.
How is Dumbledore doing with the fact his "Chosen One" doesn't even remotely fit the Prophecy? By default, the job passes to poor Neville. Voldemort will eventually find out that Jenna isn't his rival because she was born in December, so he chose the wrong person. Or, one could argue that the Prophecy has already been fulfilled, the night that he tried to kill Jenna.
Whatever people decide, Pike is there for her. The Federation and Starfleet wouldn't be happy with anyone who tried to take her away. Magic vs modern tech, there's no where they could hide her where a transporter beam couldn't get her out. Unless it was a place with the composition of minerals found at the Katric Arc in Gol on Vulcan.
Vulcan! I'd like to see Jenna meet Spock at least once and have her own opinion on "that pointy-eared bastard."
And, yeah. *Salute* To Nimoy's memory. Live long and prosper. (I cried so much last Friday!)
3/5/2015 c7 megsjedi
Don't worry about Sam, he's never been central to the story in either timeline. Don't worry so much about canon, this is an AU. That's the joy of an AU, certain details can be tweaked.
And it's Leonard.
Don't worry about Sam, he's never been central to the story in either timeline. Don't worry so much about canon, this is an AU. That's the joy of an AU, certain details can be tweaked.
And it's Leonard.
3/5/2015 c6 megsjedi
The way Pike reacted? Awesome. Very sweet. _ Poor Jenna, though, realizing she was flirting with her brother.
She's flirting with this Chad guy Damn, I was hoping she'd flirt with Bones. He needs a sweet girl.
On with reading more!
The way Pike reacted? Awesome. Very sweet. _ Poor Jenna, though, realizing she was flirting with her brother.
She's flirting with this Chad guy Damn, I was hoping she'd flirt with Bones. He needs a sweet girl.
On with reading more!