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8/19/2013 c2 UnsanMusho
Interesting take on the "First Male Nin" story you got here, I've read quite alot of fics like this actually and you're the only one I've read so far who gave Naruto an Actual Bloodline nice choice btw. So Naruto is a elemental bender right? That's actually a very interesting power to give to Naruto, I mean the power to bend elements AWESOME! And I also love Airbender so that's a bonus too XD

So is this a harem fic right? Any idea who will be the head girl? And who exactly are going to part of the harem? And from the harem who will be considered wives from the concubines? If there's a difference like that mind you, cause from what I observe in mass-harem fics is that writers often have difficulties in giving all the girls enough screen time so to say. But on the side note as long as Tenten is considered a wife or those girls who are closest to Naruto then I'll be happy XD

Anyways if you ever need suggestions or some help leave me a PM Ill be more than happy to help you out XD
8/18/2013 c2 8The Lone Swordswolf
Ok, decent beginning. But, i felt that you had healed his vocal cords too quickly. Now the kunoichi nations are after him. How will he react when he finds out? Also, men are not classified as beautiful unless feminine. So either Naruto looks like a chick or you can describe him as handsome, chiseled, etc. Calling him beautiful made it awkward to read.
8/18/2013 c2 Takashi Komuro
More! I need more of this story! Please update sooner and I shall enlighten you on how to brighten you flames of youth.
8/18/2013 c2 MarTinez9
I like it so far update soon.
8/18/2013 c2 Unnatural Reader
Amazing
8/18/2013 c1 star reader trey
I only see one problem first time he tried to speak- So he took a deep breath, exhaled slowly and started to at least try to make a sound. "gergh" was the fruit of that venture so he couldn't talk but some how he said "-Kura-chan?" Naruto asked yea can he talk or not other than not detail you have a good base and a good first chapter
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