for Night's End
227/21/2014 c1 OptimisticLady
WELL THAT WAS CERTAINLY INTRIGUING.
I look forward to reading the rest of it, even though I haven't even read the Percy Jackson books. Shhh. Love me.
WELL THAT WAS CERTAINLY INTRIGUING.
I look forward to reading the rest of it, even though I haven't even read the Percy Jackson books. Shhh. Love me.
8/25/2013 c1 WhitePantherLance
So, good language. As always, proper spelling and grammar are a must in stories, and as often as I do find so many fanfictions slipping on these things, I'm glad you managed to use them very well, so much so that I did not detect any mistakes. Well done there.
The plot holds an interesting premise so far, but be careful with how you handle the scene with Sam and the blonde girl. That could easily slip into an alternate universe style or something equally weird, which could destroy the unique feel of the story.
Good job on portraying Grovers thoughts, though. They feel genuinely his, down to the bag of tin cans in his bag.
The rest, though, is still too early to tell seeing as this is only chapter 1. However, you have created a decent, if not exactly original hook, and I look forward to reading more. Cheers!
So, good language. As always, proper spelling and grammar are a must in stories, and as often as I do find so many fanfictions slipping on these things, I'm glad you managed to use them very well, so much so that I did not detect any mistakes. Well done there.
The plot holds an interesting premise so far, but be careful with how you handle the scene with Sam and the blonde girl. That could easily slip into an alternate universe style or something equally weird, which could destroy the unique feel of the story.
Good job on portraying Grovers thoughts, though. They feel genuinely his, down to the bag of tin cans in his bag.
The rest, though, is still too early to tell seeing as this is only chapter 1. However, you have created a decent, if not exactly original hook, and I look forward to reading more. Cheers!