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1/12/2016 c1 WxL4ever
So cute! I honestly had to cover my face a couple times...

Also, somebody needs to knock some sense into Mario!
10/20/2015 c1 Guest
lol gotta love those convenient water puddles
3/15/2015 c1 not good
not good at all, needs more mario & kirby cannon, in season 2 of 'The Super Mario Bros. Super Show!' Toad says "lick me in the bum hole!" I think mario would react flirtatious to this... part 2? please... :D

p.s do you do mlp fan fiction too? i haven't heard one about Merry May and Sea Swirl. That'd be cool!
2/10/2014 c1 4Nope93748191p
That was just too cute. Thanks I enjoyed it a lot.
8/29/2013 c1 72Crazee Canadia
This was a good story _

What I'd advise is that you be careful with run-on sentences (I felt that I read a lot of them), and make good use of the comma! Also, when you're skipping a large amount of time, I'd advise you use a little story break or make a new paragraph ("...changing wet sheets from the sweat and dealing with nightmares. Three days later..." after "nightmares" I would have added a break or a new paragraph that began with "three days later...").

You made good use of details and did a good job explaining why Luigi was out in the snow to begin with.

Hope my review was helpful to you.
8/25/2013 c1 Guest
Aww this is so freaking cute! I never thought of these two being a couple but you converted me!

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